Xeon gave a sigh, as he pulled Rose closer, and gave her a kiss. But he was vastly surprised when she returned the kiss rather passionately. He felt her take his helmet off.
"Mm... can't get a good kiss with this armor in the way..." She said with a mischievous tone, as she licked his cheek. Something stirred in Xeon as she continued taking off his armor, and he started to take hers off as well.
"You're right Rose.... I just can't get enough of that sweet fur of yours...." He drew his head in closer. "I'd say you're good enough to eat....."
But it was then that they started to take notice of the air running out of the enclosed space, and Xeon suddenly came back to himself when he had started to be lightheaded.
He backed up awkwardly in the small space. "I am so sorry Rose..." He relied sheepishly, flattening his ears. "Definitely not royal Guard behavior."
"It's okay.... we need to find a way out of here."
"Why not use your magic?"
Rose face-hoofed for not remembering that in the first place. "Good idea Xeon." She lit her horn, and with a blast, knocked the wooden door off it's hinges. It landed with a thud. Xeon and Rose were glad of the fresh air.
"Just a note Rose... this will not be told to anyone else. I'd feel stupid if you ended up all... " He made a few faces, "Blah- Blah- Blah!"
"Are you making fun of mares?" She replied, a bit more than annoyed.
"Yes. Yes I am." He replied, a bit too cocky.
"That's it!" She hit him with a blast of her magic. "I hope you learn a lesson!" And with that, she teleported off.
Geez.... just the way I said they are..... Picking himself off the floor, he cautiously walked out of the abandoned house, so glad to feel the warm sunshine again on his fur. He had no idea that this incident would change his life forever......
stupid Xeon
OC: Daffodil Spark
i.imgur.com/UqY6XDr.jpg
(The one to the right)
Daffodil Spark is an orange earth pony with yellow mane and a seed with a sprout coming out of it as cutiemark.
Daffodil got a slight bit of social anxiety, often feeling very uncomfortable and stressed around people she don't know and in big crowds, always preferring to stick with her friends. Don't worry just give her some time and she'll be comfortable. In comfterbul surroundings, Daffodil is very open, optimistic and love talking. She is very loyal to her friends and family and will do anything for those she care about. If you make Daffodil angry, your in deep problem, as she will let nothing stop her, social anxiety or not.
5328748 thanks! I'll let you know when I get done with the chapter. One question though.... what would be her reaction to Xeon at this point? He thinks he's fat, and not quite at the point of the picture on the story. He can't caught on yet about the trick..... and I thought to ask the one who made Daffodil herself.
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Well, she'd probably think it's a little weird that he's gotten fat all of sudden, but accept it as the only logical solution. (Since she's an Earth Pony, she don't know all the things you can do with magic, for example making a stallion pregnant)
5328781 ah. got it
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Yep.
Try to get an editor for the story, use spellcheck maybe.
Also, you don't need to cut the chapters quite as much, these three chapters could have been one long chapter, but instead you split them.
Interesting story idea though, I'll see this through to the end.
5333201 Not harsh, but true. Thank you for your opinion.
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I try not to be mean when giving critique.
Thanks for the random watch.