Seeing that I had very little interaction with this story, I'm interested in this hellish creature you've brought in. I hope to edit, and read ahead of everyone else lol.

You have got my attention with this... the only thing that I would nitpick about is 'peaked interest' vs. 'piqued interest', but that's just the grammar nazi in me.

Ambassador of the Changelings,
Dopple Ganger

Oh yes. I like this concept. I'll be watching this one.

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Thanks! More will come soon but I've got to get another chapter out on my main fic b4 or on its one year anniversary.

That was pretty good. Captivating plot, unique backstory, what's not to love? You deserve an upvote and fav.

5313317 Thank you very much! That means alot!

Interest piqued? Check!
Attention grabbed? Check!
Curiosity skyrocketing? Check!
Second Chapter? Not yet!

I must admit that you have my complete attention with this opener, however, I feel as though we're getting a little bit of an info-dump from Chrysalis, though I don't mind it as much as I thought I would. I do find her to be a bit long winded. It seems like a past she would much rather forget and keep buried, but yet she throws it out there, half-assed trying to get Twilight to connect the dots and just explains it all when the unicorn doesn't.

Some small critique, but overall, I am really enjoying this concept. I am giving this an upvote, like, favorite and tracking it for updates!

5314463 Thank you for your feedback! It really helps out alot!

Thinking on it I do agree with you slightly and will make an effort to avoid that from happening again or at least do a better job of it.

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I'm happy to help!

Like I said before, you have me captivated by this opening. I think just toning it down a fraction would make it flow better without flat out telling us every and anything we need to know or learn about the topic all in one sitting. I am excited to see another chapter of this...

Even as I write my third chapter, which would probably piss my readers off if they saw this since I haven't posted anything in a bit.

5314510 I get that for sure!!! Sometimes I get writers block or just dont have the time to sit and write but, I can read all day any day lol.

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That's pretty much it. Hahaha. On top of all of that my finals are coming up for school. College 'n stuffs.