1st: Teenagers like Adagio and Sunset Shimmer wouldn't curse. Though this type of stuff happens a lot with teenagers. I appreciate this honest story which resembles a true tale of a teenager's. Thus, why I left a like. There are some grammatical errors and you misspelled pajamas. Also, the bowl thing? Kinda made me leave the story but I forced myself to come back.i.imgur.com/alBmLu9.jpg

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Yeah, I just noticed it, removed it, it's not what you think.

I actually didn't notice it until you brought it up. Thank you.

...you're awful. i don't mea ln you as a person or even this story is aweful, its good for what is, but the subject matter... if i knew something like that was going on i'd be at his front steps with a shotgun and i'd saty there so leople would know i did it, i'd be glad to.

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Thanks, and also thanks for pointing out the bowl.

5309322 I wasn't talking to you with that latest comment I was talking to another person.

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Sorry, I am still getting used to this site.

I usually post this stuff on DA or FF.net.

Huh, I had kinda hoped this would end with her ambushing him with his own knife when he comes back or Sunset Shimmer barging in.

5309341 heh it's okay

5309818 The robot geeks who make tiny robots and invent stuff........ I'm just messin' with ya!

Yes continue, as I want to see Abraham get his just deserts.

this Pic makes me feel so sorry for Adagio

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Welp, ask an ye shall revieve.

You want a sequal?

You've got it!

5310478 I'm asking for you to maybe make some edits to the first chapter. Add on a second chapter that is proofread preferably.

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Deal.

5310562 Yes!

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Then write one about Aria on the kickboxing team. Just the mere thought of her in trunks and a sports bra turns me on for some reason.

THOSE COMMENTS!

You will pay...

Yeah, let me explain what's going to happen to your repetition. It's going to explode into another dimension, then get eaten by a bear, then the bear will explode, then it'll fall into a black hole where it'll be incinerated and blown up until it's nothing. Or it's just done for, I always get them mixed up.

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In smiles?

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To clarify: Your done for.

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Um...is that a threat?

Honestly, I want to see what happens next, this story has caught my interest, and I want to see if Adagio can free herself from this mess

5314267 It's not a threat. I'll try to explain.

Most people of the community will get the impression that you're an immature brat because of the fact that you delete comments. I'm not calling you an immature brat, just to be clear, but I'm saying that people will take you for one.

In the future, if there are people who leave comments like, "this story sucks, go kill urself," you should leave those up, so that others could see who the real immature brat is; the commenters. Deleting comments can really give you a bad rep.

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Oh, those were not insults, someone was trying to add a autistic excuse for a OC. It got out of hand and I removed them.

Just to be clear, I am not used to this site (I am used to DA and Fanfiction.net).

Oh this is going to be good

5317730 In that case, it is understandable, but most readers will automatically assume they are insults, because usually they are.

And also, welcome to the site! It must take balls to put something up. I honestly thought your story was pretty good. At least, it was better than the usual stuff that gets put up.

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To be honest, this is not my first MLP fic, Once I am done with my other works, you will see it.

Oh look at those groups...not looking good. Not looking good at all.

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Do you think I care if people hate my work, I FEED on that.

This is nothing compared to "Everyone Makes Mistakes".

5332492 I-I'm sorry? What was that?

Do you think I care if people hate my work, I FEED on that.

Um, one more time?

I FEED on that.

Still not quite getting it.

I FEED on that.

JESUS CHRIST!

But no, seriously, what the hell is that even supposed to mean?