Rainbow Dash is kidnapped, then rescued by a gang of criminals. Stripped of her wing strength, she finds sanctuary among the Payday Crew. (Season One finished; stay tuned!)
Now we w8
HE LIIVVEES
6307361 Fucking cloakers.
“Guess who’s ba-ack!” a voice that she thought she’d never hear again sang
sing?
“Guess who’s ba-ack!” a voice that she thought she’d never hear again sang.
Jesus christ, this guy's invinci—
and Wolf suddenly tackled the Skulldozer from behind.
—or not.
6307655 Past tense.
6308589 yeah, if it was past tense, in this case it would be sing. Not sang. Sang is used in the past tense like, "He sang" or "she sang"
"She never thought he would hear him 'sang'" again isn't the right form of past tense.Sing can still be past tense.
6308603 [A voice she never thought she would hear again] [sang].
[The Skulldozer] [sang].
6308609 Okay, I see now what you meant, but that is super awkwardly worded.And I was just trying to help, jees.
6308641 I wasn't trying to be mad, I was just pointing out why I wrote it that way.
Though I'd still like you as an editor, maybe on what I'm gonna work with next. I'll PM you.
Oooooh yes, that 1st music does truly apply, Falcon...Nice chapter, now to wait for the next season~
6308645 Alright.
6309956 2/10. Nowhere near as creative as the Skittles one.
Easy top 5 on the story, well done
She heard a Cloaker shouting something about a drum solo
A drum solo is wild bro...
Now we w8
HE LIIVVEES
6307361 Fucking cloakers.
sing?
Jesus christ, this guy's invinci—
—or not.
6307655 Past tense.
6308589 yeah, if it was past tense, in this case it would be sing. Not sang. Sang is used in the past tense like, "He sang" or "she sang"
"She never thought he would hear him 'sang'" again isn't the right form of past tense.
Sing can still be past tense.
6308603 [A voice she never thought she would hear again] [sang].
[The Skulldozer] [sang].
6308609 Okay, I see now what you meant, but that is super awkwardly worded.
And I was just trying to help, jees.
6308641 I wasn't trying to be mad, I was just pointing out why I wrote it that way.
Though I'd still like you as an editor, maybe on what I'm gonna work with next. I'll PM you.
Oooooh yes, that 1st music does truly apply, Falcon...
Nice chapter, now to wait for the next season~
6308645 Alright.
6309956 2/10. Nowhere near as creative as the Skittles one.
Easy top 5 on the story, well done
A drum solo is wild bro...