Damnit, I can't take the mature tag seriously when you use pony swear words!

5103094 Again I do not like using the "F" bomb in my stories. It just does not seem to sit well for me for some reason. However, I am sure the slurry of other "colorful" words more than make up for that fact.

5103112 It's jarring to see a story (your other one) where you are fine with having a scene where your main character brutally murders someone, snapping their arm to the point of being able to stab them with their own arm, but then refuse to use the word fuck. It boggles the mind.

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5103118 Well we all have your quirks I suppose. You may also have noticed that I do not use contractions in my regular speech/text. Either way I do apologize if my wording does not sit well with you.

5103149 Alright.

Interesting start so far. I'm loving the narrative, Dark Net sounds a lot like my own inner monolouge. i look forward to seeing more.

5103180 I am glad that you enjoyed it. The amusing part is my own internal monologue often shifts depending on my mood. As you can obviously tell Dark Net would represent one of the more darker variety. In addition to answer your question, there will be more of Dark Net's tale sooner or later.

Feels kind of like a Noire film to me...I like it

5103413 You know it is amusing that you say that. When proofreading it out loud I was actually using a gravely voice for some reason. Well at least that solves that mystery(No pun intended...maybe)

5103448 lol well it works

Where's your "Alternate Universe" tag?

5104166 It is still sort of set in the same universe more or less(set in Manehatten). Just more of the underground of ponykind was what I was shooting for hmmm. I will have to think about it.

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What is there to think about? Canon MLP doesn't have an internet, or hackers, or what we would call cars, or a number of the other elements that you have in your story. It's obviously an alternate universe.

5104960 Put an Alternate Universe tag. Listen to Elric.

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Fair enough, the "Alternate Universe" tag has been added.

Excuse me, but I've read this story, and found nothing pertaining to the reasons behind the mature-tagging, as well as the romance. Would you remedy this?

5113449 This story is going to be a three-parter. So I placed those two there as placeholders for the next chapter and the final last one. I hope this clears some things up.

5115737 But still, I don't really see any romance and whatnot. Hell, we're not even told about what the vampiric factions did. Could you elaborate on that first chapter or second chapter sometime, please?

Hello all,

It had become obvious that this little experimental story of mine has not gone to plan. Admittedly, while this story was not one of my best works, it was never going to be. It was merely setup as a testing ground to test some literary methods and elements I was thinking about. As such I had some fun in generating a character that was an exaggerated version of my brother’s loner personality type with a few bits of mine thrown in for balance.

I knew full well as the character was going to be jaded and rude, they would come off initially as unpleasant(this changes later on). This in turn meant that people would probably “dislike” the story on those grounds alone. Now I am not bothered by this fact as people are free to “like” and “dislike” whatever they choose. However I please ask you, do not add my story to unpleasant groups without my permission. Thank you. I wish you all well and have a good night.

5115747 The second chapter will explain a bit more, while the final third one will roll everything all up. This story is just a test "slice of life" type for me and I am attempting to not get too deep into it for simplicity sake. On a side note in relation to your question the second chapter should be up most likely by tomorrow. I will try and write the third and final one shortly after that.

Hello all,

I just wanted to note that Chapter 2 will be out tomorrow(Friday) instead of today. Being as this story did not have a great reception from the start I took a hard and long look and I wanted rework a few things about the plot and character design. So I ended up rewriting chapter 2 from scratch again(might even rework chapter 1). In turn I am expanding the story a bit more in an effort to improve it. As such I removed the "slice of life" tag and the second and last chapter will be longer than I originally planned(but I, and hopefully you all, will be more satisfied with). See you tomorrow.