A long time has passed since Cloud left Equestria behind. Now the time for the return is growing near, but what mental scars does the lost paragon carry? And can a romance shattered by foolishness regrow its roots?
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Why? I enjoyed this chapter. I also enjoyed having a backstory to Gilda that explained her actions. So all in all, well done.
5135876 Mostly I can't help but feel like I rushed it, eh I guess I can't please myself. :3
5135885 Ehhh, you know what they say, You are your worst critic.
As to the rushed bit.... Maybe the fact that you had abit of time skipping going on? I still think this was handled very well cause you didn't just tell us, "Two months have passed.".
You showed us what happened in those two months. Granted a highlights version but still good.
Should I be ashamed that this chapter brought this to mind?
Liked this chapter, but now I'm hyped for the next one even more. Excellent build-up for the end there.
This is getting good.
Discord is the one who created it, I think?
5136990 Or his sister.
Holy double penetration Batman! So much exposition. Loving the story man
5838171 I appreciate it and hope that you stick around even though the release schedule is somewhat unreliable right now due to ongoing schoolwork.
5839228 Lovin the story so far. Another thing I wanted to ask but, who is Gary Stu? I read another story before and I saw this name again and it's killing me just to find out who this is. I have thoughts but, again their just thoughts.
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Gary Sue is the male equivalent of Mary Sue
ongoingworlds.files.wordpress.com/2009/10/mary_sue___how_to_tell.jpg
http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/MarySue
SPEAR OF DESTINY!!!!!!
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That was totally my first thought hahaha