Reading this off-site and I gotta say, very enjoyable. I really dig the atmosphere in this, even though it's not quite as horrifying as Sleepless, it's still a very nice read. I'll leave another comment once I'm done.
Only nitpick I have is that one chapter where goes to math class. Aren't systems of linear equations a middle school thing? I remember learning about them when I was like 13. Then again, I'm a yuropoor, so maybe that explains it.
Same here. It's been seven years since I wrote it, but I vaguely recall researching for the curriculum of American schools. I may have gotten it wrong or taken liberties, I guess.
Lightning Dust was undercover?
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You'll see...
It's all downhill from here.
A street war's coming, an all-out brawl between the Manehatten Mafia, griffons, and the police.
And Babs, Nightcap, Lightning Dust, and everypony close to them are going to be caught right in the middle of it.
She's a U.C.? Or just a P.I.?
Reading this off-site and I gotta say, very enjoyable. I really dig the atmosphere in this, even though it's not quite as horrifying as Sleepless, it's still a very nice read. I'll leave another comment once I'm done.
Only nitpick I have is that one chapter where goes to math class. Aren't systems of linear equations a middle school thing? I remember learning about them when I was like 13. Then again, I'm a yuropoor, so maybe that explains it.11095699
Same here. It's been seven years since I wrote it, but I vaguely recall researching for the curriculum of American schools. I may have gotten it wrong or taken liberties, I guess.
Is that a twin peaks reference or just coincidence
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I'm pretty sure it was supposed to be a reference, but I wrote it a while ago.