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I have no heart and my avatar makes everything sound sexual. Also, It's pronounced "sam-ee".

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The tags are not to be taken lightly :twilightoops:

But I'm very curious to see where this goes. One chapter in and I'm already hooked! More please!

I didn't follow you for nothing.
This should be good...

I thought long about the tags (just before posting I removed "tragedy" and added "dark"). Though it's a bit different kind of "dark" than Sleepless...

Thanks :twilightsmile:

I absolutely love how you referenced Diamond's killing spree and Vinyl's tragic death, and the effects they had. The moment you mentioned the musical instruments, I said "Wait a minute...". And then my suspicions were confirmed. Now I wonder if one of these side stories will be about Neon's downward spiral. That would be interesting to see. Keep up the awesome work Samey; I'm loving everything about this story and its extremely dark universe.

Hmm, that'd be interesting... Btw, I have to finish that side story about Berry Punch...

Considering the kind of place Equestria used to be, it's no wonder Diamond got famous. (It's like unleashing Jason Voorhees on Mayberry :twilightoops:)

Did tabloids actually get details right, for once? :pinkiegasp:

Anyways, I love the amount of worldbuilding that goes into these stories; you've created a living, breathing thing. You can go a lot of places from here, and I'm excited to see where you do go! :pinkiehappy:

“What I…” Babs looked at the quickly growing puddle of blood and her own knife lying next to the motionless body.

Well, where have I seen this before?

Either way, another great chapter and I can't wait for the next one. And boy is White Dove in a lot of trouble...

Oh yeah... Though DT started to kill because of her mental problems, while Babs may start to have mental problems because she killed someone (assuming that walking at night with a knife and robbing ponies is normal...)

THIS is the Cutie Mark Crusaders Manehattan branch!? Wow the Ponyville branch will be VERY disappointed to know this. Plus Babs needs to remember that Applejack will approve of these 'friends'. Also remember that if Applejack found out. She'll LITERALLY DESTROY YOU!

I was just thinking that they should sell drugs disguised as filly scouts. You took the thought right from my brain.

Well, in case Applejack comes to visit her, Babs can always show her Dove – she's the only one without a cutie mark and, unlike the rest of the gang, she looks innocent enough (that is, when she's not stealing wallets or... oh wait, spoilers :trollestia:)

When is the next chapter coming out?

Probably tomorrow (it should go faster since I finished another story I was working on).

Does Babs and her group have a gang name? Because they're practically a gang.

"Cutie Mark Crusaders" may count as one, though they don't use it very often. The mafia boss calls them "filly scouts", but he calls everyone who delivers drugs for him that. In fact, I've never really thought about that...

:rainbowlaugh: I myself often wondered the point of such equations. Is it just me or does White Dove seem to be following the Slippery Slope Fallacy following and/or surpassing Babs.
Also, 'We’re all unneeded… Me, Hedgehog, Cracker, Raz, even White Dove… We’re like cancer… No perspectives, just vegetation in the lungs… Till the whole organism chokes on us…' That's deep. Have an upvote on me!

Thanks :twilightsmile:

And yeah, Dove would do everything she thinks Babs would like... And that's what scares Babs.

So much for White Dove's "innocence".
And I love how you weaved the events of "Thirsty" into this story with the "Canterlot Vampire" reference.

(Begins to read math equation section.)
(Gets mid-way through it.)
Ah, fuck it. I didn't understand it in tenth grade and I sure as hell don't understand it now.

Actually, when I put that reference there, "Thirsty" wasn't finished; that's why no one refers to the fact that there's an eldritch abomination right below Canterlot. Though I guess an average pony in Equestria remembers "there was a pony who killed some folks in Canterlot and drank their blood" better than "that doctor wrote that we shouldn't dig under Canterlot, or something invisible will eat us".

A propos "Thirsty", I've noticed that there's a difference between Lovecraftian stories set on Earth and in Equestria. The common motif of many of them are people who doesn't believe in the monsters from outer space. In Equestria, with its changelings, Sombra, Discord, Nightmare Moon, and Angel bunny, one has to be a Flat Earth Atheist to not believe in eldritch abominations...

“It’s a bomb!” the other replied. “The zebras attacked!”

I get the reference! :pinkiehappy:

"The Canterlot Vampire" is a cool name. Fitting, too.

Also, math! Twilight Sparkle would be proud! :twilightsmile:

Oh yeah... And Babs' line "You read too much comics" was inspired by this.

Old friends become new enemies. And this wont be the last time we see Hedgehog or White Dove...

White Dove isn't going to live through this story isn't she?

Oh yeah... They'll appear again soon...

You'll see...

Also, I can say that two characters known from Sleepless will appear in chapters 6 and 7... (and that both of them have similar coat colour).

You weren't kidding when you said that we would be seeing some familiar faces.
Now we can only hope that none of them get shot, stabbed, bludgeoned, or worse.
How else will the past come back to haunt Babs?

What kind of racing is this chapter based off of?

Speedway. I used a slightly simplified 15-run table from Polish Speedway Extraligue (an older variant in which the first race was indeed between juniors).

Well, there's one more character with orange coat who'll appear in the next chapter. If you remember the ending of Sleepless, you may figure out some plot points...

I saw Babs was in this, so I am SO reading this! :yay:

Hopefully, it won't ruin my headcanon for her. :twilightblush:

It depends of your headcanon... My vision of Babs' life in Manehattan is rather dark... (though not dark in a supernatural sense).


Babs is basically a fucking criminal in mine...

So, you'll like this story... :scootangel:


Yay. I'll post a review after I am done reading

So does every nutcase (Sunshine.) and has-been (Neon, Lightning Dust.) end up in Manehatten eventually? It looks like it.

And boy, did Babs have a meltdown...
Then again, the griffins had it coming.

It seems that this town is a weirdness magnet... But Trixie wasn't there (though, if we believe a graffiti in the toilet in one of my other fics, she was in Manehattan. Briefly).

“So, six of ‘em and four of us…” Babs said.

“Seven of us,” the colt interrupted her.

Erm, wouldn't that only make it the five of them if they added the colt to the group?

There were two more colts with him, but they had no lines.

Jesus Christ why would they kill a poor filly? Looks like White Dove's parents are going to raise hell now. Could this lead to something similar to the Ferguson riots?

I thought more of the broken windows theory. And I'd say that the guards are currently Babs' least problem...

The broken windows theory?

Here it is. Remember the descriptions of, for example, Babs' neighbourhood, or the opening paragraphs from Coco's point of view? So far, Babs and the others are the results of the authorities' lenience (though in case of Babs it's also her character flaws, including the complete lack of ability to predict the consequences of her deeds).

Well, this story has a "sex" tag for a reason...

“I stay out of trouble, mom…” she whispered. “Except of trouble I make myself…”

I don't know why, but I absolutely love this quote.

Yeah, it's Babs in a nutshell...

Also, I've heard somewhere that writing sex scenes is similar to writing fight scenes... This one alternates between both...

Lightning Dust was undercover?

You'll see...

It's all downhill from here.

A street war's coming, an all-out brawl between the Manehatten Mafia, griffons, and the police.

And Babs, Nightcap, Lightning Dust, and everypony close to them are going to be caught right in the middle of it.

So, shall we all agree that shit has officially hit the fan?

Oh yeah... And it's not the last time it happens... :pinkiecrazy:

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