A continuation of the Xenoverse the day of Twilight's ascension in which an Irish blacksmith and hunter named Galen, who was raised in a medieval tourist trap of a village is brought to Equestria, along with his dog, due to said ascension.
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I may just have to do that... It was something of a major plot point in the original and how it revealed Lero's terror involving the Lady... I may have gotten a little hung up, trying to keep a little too close to the original...
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My recommendation is to change it around. Have the test first and then have Celestia try to defend her actions after Galen rips her a new one for threatening Riley by explaining that it was a test, followed by Galen ripping into her again. I don't think that you'd have to change much if you follow that sequence of events (I've only gotten about halfway through chapter 4, so I'm not sure).
As a side note, it seems that Galen is much like myself, in this regard; you protect your own against all threats. If someone threatens my friends and family, I wouldn't lose a wink of sleep after giving that person a .40-cal lobotomy. If that person was doing it as a test to see how I'd react... Let's just leave it as the result wouldn't be pretty, and reconciliation would be hard, if not outright impossible.
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I also thought that scene was cringe-worthy, but for a different reason. Your Celestia apparently learned nothing from dealing with Lero, and eagerly made the same mistake all over again.
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I know what you mean there, but you also have to remember that Lero was a special case since it was some aspect of her power that was terrifying him on a subconscious level. I plan on editing those first few chapters when I get the time and get some heat rolling through my place. Currently existing as an electric blanket burrito with my phone under the covers with me lol
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You would indeed be correct and I thank you for pointing that out I'll hunt down the offending section and edit it after my next update... Feel free to pm me to remind me if you're interested in helping out a scatter brained writer who doesn't sleep enough
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I've had no editor (so to speak) until I found this one character who likes the order in which I place my words. One of these days, I'll go over those beginning chapters again and overhaul them thoroughly
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Same here, but with shotgun or a .357 Magnum. Though I might go a bit more hands-on. *Hefts 20 lb. sledgehammer.*
5721404 Agreed, though I prefer psychological warfare and then some chemicals and then some hands on action. Much more fun.
So much ApplePie, at this rate I'll get diabetes from all the goodness.