A continuation of the Xenoverse the day of Twilight's ascension in which an Irish blacksmith and hunter named Galen, who was raised in a medieval tourist trap of a village is brought to Equestria, along with his dog, due to said ascension.
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That was an error on my part. I like to believe that Celestia isn't always the morning pony she makes herself out to be and sleeps in for an extra half hour-forty five minutes on occasion, hence her waking up just as Galen's setting out. If you had read my blog post, I've been incredibly busy and only had a chance to write in fits and starts, so it tended to get a little odd as I would have to break off mid paragraph and pick back up where I left off. I caught most of it, but apparently not all. I would state a four hour road trip followed by an hour to finish up the chapter before I then had to leave as a reason for my lapse, but I've wrote under sleep deprivation and fatigue before
As far as the rest goes, it was meant to take a step back from Galen and not follow him like a microscope puncturing the back of his skull for his inner most thoughts and feelings. This was meant to be a "filler" chapter with some light comedy, a little altercation and some warm and fuzzy romance. There's a bit of foreshadowing as well as some of these characters will return and a few things ended up the way they were for a reason. Foreshadowing~
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That's what I meant about the sleeping in bit. She would wake up, raise the sun and then fall back asleep occasionally I'm still recovering from by unexpected road trip after work and am quite tired at the moment
I won't be this busy for a while, so I doubt I'll have the disjointed writing sessions any time soon.
As far as the transitions go I know I need a bit of work on them but, whenever I read a story, I find the best transitions that keep me engaged are the ones that transition just as the dwindling action begins to get about a third of the way to the conclusion so it doesn't confuse the reader in thinking that's all it was. If a scene will not continue on later in the chapter, I conclude the section and move on to the next part, that way no one expects a return that won't happen. I try to emulate this but I'm still honing it as you cal tell The transitions in this chapter were cut the way they were to keep it going without going up and down too much as it was only what it was. A filler to tie up loose ends, establish a few more bonds and get back to where it needs to be to continue onward.
Now, I must away to the land of sleep. I hear its siren call, but I shall return this night