Rainbow Blitz and Butterscotch go out for a night of drinking. Butterscotch drinks a little too much which leads to him pushing his true feelings onto Blitz. Blitz hates to admit it, but he wouldn't mind doing the things that Scotch wants from h
Okay, now. I'm loving the plot hole play you've done here (then again buttholes are my fetish, so I guess I just gravitate towards that stuff).
However, did you really need to put in the line about the scat fetish? That just felt like a cheap laugh instead of something that was crucial to the story (but it was a little more uncomfortable than funny).
The term "ponut" is really being overused here. It's supposed to be used for comedy, not arousal.
>The squeezing around my cock increased the pleasure by at least twenty percent…what? You know you love that catchphrase. I was bound to have it in here somewhere, in reality though, it was more than twenty percent, maybe thirty, forty? i.minus.com/iMBWrhCSwYVRw.gif
I really like the events that unfolded in this chapter, but dear lord the narration and diction are still messy.
4514539![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
Exactly! There are now currently three chapters that are titled in reference to a song
the wait was worth![:heart:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/heart.png)
4515089![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
Glad to hear it
10/10
Sexy hey talk to me i have a proposition
HOT! 10/10
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A proposition, hmmm?
4516973 yes cxare to use my OC
4517060
For?
That was so hot, so adorable, and definitely worth the wait. I give this chapter, and the whole story, an 11... out of 5!![:yay:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/yay.png)
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4517160 a fan fic if you want
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I'm not sure when I would if I did. I don't write too many stories with ocs in the first place
4517249 well you can if you want
4517237![:trixieshiftright:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trixieshiftright.png)
way to make things awkward
This fic continues to make me happy.
I wish I could vote up even more after each amazing-er chapter.![:raritystarry:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritystarry.png)
Okay, now. I'm loving the plot hole play you've done here (then again buttholes are my fetish, so I guess I just gravitate towards that stuff).
However, did you really need to put in the line about the scat fetish? That just felt like a cheap laugh instead of something that was crucial to the story (but it was a little more uncomfortable than funny).![:ajbemused:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajbemused.png)
The term "ponut" is really being overused here. It's supposed to be used for comedy, not arousal.
>The squeezing around my cock increased the pleasure by at least twenty percent…what? You know you love that catchphrase. I was bound to have it in here somewhere, in reality though, it was more than twenty percent, maybe thirty, forty?
i.minus.com/iMBWrhCSwYVRw.gif
I really like the events that unfolded in this chapter, but dear lord the narration and diction are still messy.