The Answers Hide Behind a Wall
Detrot, like most of Equestria's citizens know, is one of the most boring, soul-sucking places anypony could ever live. It's like pre-restoration Crystal Empire on steroids, steriods that increase sucky-ness. This alone justified Sophie Osmo's descision to take a vacation. Recent events involving the fourth wall, osmosis dreams, and an exploding head had prompted her to choose Ponyville as her vacation destination. Aside from getting away from the geographical armpit she called her home, Sophie also had questions involving the short story that had induced her strange dream. She had no idea who had put it there, but she supposed that it had something to do with the pink mare's mentioning of somepony important wanting her alive, right after Sophie had "died" from being forced to absorb a journal about the fourth wall, written by the same mare. Her one anxiety was that all of the people from the dream were not real, and this pink mare would be nonexistent, reducing her options and hopes of unravelling this mind bucking enigma.
The train station of Ponyville was much more gaudy than Sophie had expected, and completely inaccurate to what she had seen of it when blazing into the city as a demonic comet in the dream. Pulling up, she wondered for a brief second if the events in her dream had actually happened. It looked like the town was being repaired in the wake of a disaster. However, it didn't seem to be the fiery disaster she had caused. This reaffirmed her to the fact that her becoming a demon had only been a dream. Upon walking to the town's center, she was met with the sight of a disgruntled alicorn directing the cleanup of what seemed to be slabs of gold and a myriad over-the-top flambouyant materials. Sophie immediately recognized her as the alicorn from her dream. Perhaps she had some answers. However, the disgruntled princess shrugged her off with a grunt and continued to chip away at what apeared to have been a solid gold street. What in Equestria happened here?
Anyways, the next thing she would need to do was find a place to stay. And by stay, of course, she meant pitch her tent. As far as she had been able to find out from absorbing a pamphlet on the place, there was no hotel, motel, nothing for guests. It was expected of them to stay with the people they were visiting. Sophie, however, knew no one, except maybe those from the dream, but she was almost entirely sure that they knew her. The princess had just grunted her off, meaning that Sophie was the only one who recalled nearly burning this place to the ground.
OOMPH!!!
"Oh, it's you!" A pink pony exclaimed after picking Sophie up from her collision. Upon further inspection, it was the mare who had caused her head to explode.
"You recognize me?"
"Well duh! Of course I remember you! I see that you are still alive. That somepony sure is clever."
"You know! I came looking for someone to help me figure this out!" Sophie pulled the fanfic from her saddlebag.
"Ah yes. That somepony found a cool way to preserve you," Pinkie gestured to the pages Sophie held. "You know, part of the reason I bumped into you was so you wouldn't end up seeking help from Zecora. That somepony hates writing her dialogue, with all the weird rhyming."
"What?"
"Just come with me."
Seeing that Pinkie, as Sophie was reminded her name was, seemed to know about the dream, Sophie obeyed and went with her. She was led to Sugarcabe Corner, knowing its name from the pamphlet, and led inside and up the stairs to Pinkie's room. Pinkie reached under her bed and pulled out the very journal that had brought about her demise. Sophie jumped back at seeing it, and Pinkie clearly understood why.
"Your guide to the fourth wall..." Sophie half-muttered, half-gasped.
"Yep."
"But I don't want my head to explode for real!"
"I don't think it will if I just read it to you."
"I don't learn things well unless I absorb them."
"I know, but I don't want your head to explode either"
Sophie was amazed at how much Pinkie knew. It must have something to do with the fourth wall. This thought made Sophie a bit less nervous and a bit more excited about the coming dissertation.
"You know how Celestia and Luna control the sun and moon?"
Sophie nodded.
"Imagine a bunch of ponies who control everything else, anything they want."
Sophie was already having her mind blown, not literally, mind you.
"They hide behind a wall. The fourth wall."
"Where is this wall?"
"That is the funny thing. The wall is everywhere! You can't see it, hear it, touch it, but you can acknowledge it, and when you acknowledge it, the ponies behind the wall let you do fun things!"
"Like what?"
"Well, doing this makes a story a bit eta, but I will show you this m that I pulled out of a word I said earlier."
Sophie was extremely flabbergasted.
"With that said," Pinkie continued as she threw the letter back from where she got it, effectively missing its target due to the story having progressed, the m tumbling down to rest above a line break, "the one who put that on your head was a pony from behind the wall, the one I said wanted you alive."
"Woah... These ponies behind the wall sound like omniscient gods."
"Yep, pretty much. They still make mistakes though."
"What do you mean?"
"Like, in the dream, Spike mentioned you by name once. How could he have known that?"
Looking through the papers, Sophie saw that she was right.
"Y'know what? This is absolutely wonderful! I have my answers, but I don't think I will remember it all. I have a headache just trying to. Maybe you could just write it on a paper so I don't have to absorb the whole notebook?"
A look of unsurety developed on Pinkie's face. "I don't know. This fourth wall stuff is really hard to handle, as is evident by your headache from just comprehending it. You reacted much better than I expected, though. I expected you to go half insane."
"That sounds good for my case. Please? I really don't think my head will explode if I have already learned about it."
"Well I guess you are still wanted alive by somepony behind the wall, so why not?"
Sophie waited apprehensively as Pinkie quickly abridged her explanation onto a spare sheet of paper. She placed it on Sophie's head, and Sophie slowed her breathing in an effort to fall asleep. Eventually, she succeeded, and after an hour the veil of sleep was lifted and Sophie opened her eyes, only to painfully succumb to a much harder blackness than her sleep had presented.
m
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Sophie awoke in a white room, head still feeling horrid. Pinkie stood over her, along with a few doctors.
"Oooh.... My head blew up, didn't it?"
Pinkie giggled. One of the doctors spoke up. "You had a minor stroke. You have been out for two days."
Sophie groaned.
"However, there was little to no damage, and you should be able to leave today, or maybe tomorrow, depending on how you feel."
"I think I am going to be staying here. I am still feeling a bit depleted."
"Fine by us," replied the doctor, who departed with the rest of the staff. Only Pinkie remained.
"See, that somepony wants you alive.... Do you remember anything from that paper?"
Racking her brain, Sophie found that what little, yet potent information the paper had contained was solidly glued to her memory.
"Yeah."
"Well goody! Although, the only money on hand to pay your medical bill was your vacation and travel funds. Sorry..."
Normally, this would have upset Sophie, but two things were keeping her from feeling so. First, with her newly acquired information, she could acknowledge that perhaps this was supposed to have happened, for some reason. The other thing was the mere fact that Detrot was a hell hole, and she wouldn't mind an extended stay, especially if it meant avoiding her home.
"Okay then. How am I going to earn back all of my funds?"
Pinkie rummaged through the stack of magazines in the room and pulled out a newspaper. Flipping through the crinkley pages, she found what she was looking for, and handed the newsprint to Sophie, who read the top of the page out loud.
"Job listings."
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i should probably read the other story first....im confused as heck right now.
4322965 Ummm. Yeah. Do that.
i started reading the first one after i commented.and I'm still confused as f***!
4323421 you will get it...
i hope.
Perhaps a job especially suited toward her natural talents. I suggest Trinity. Pinkie Pie can be Morpheus. Their job is to find The One.
4330428 >Spoiler<
Well I guess it is not a spoiler, cause it is in the short description.
Sophie gets a job repairing sewer lines...
I might be late to the party, but I brought cake! And it's review flavored! And I think it's massive! And I'm coming in here without any context of any previous story, so eat up!
First off, there may be previous stories that precede this one, but that doesn't give you an excuse to avoid describing your character. Is she a pegasus? Does she have blue hair? Is she the sun god of some other dimension? Is she Darth Vader in a beanie cap? I don't know, you didn't describe her appearance. You're starting a new story, so you need to take the time to introduce characters, not assume that your audience knows them all. Best example I can give: the Harry Potter books. In each book Rowling takes a little time to describe the characters when they come in, even if they've appeared in previous books. But as a book goes on they don't need describing because the reader knows what they look like. Remember that.
On the opposite side of the spectrum, you were almost right under the mark for giving the context of previous stories. That girl went through a dream land or something, that's what you want the audience to know, and there was enough detail in there to convey that. However, you could have put a bit more build up to Pinkie Pie appearing. Sophie just accepted that it happened and that Pinkie, a pony she never met, was in her dream. She should be a whole lot more surprised. or give us a reason why she's not. If I saw a person I never met in my dreams then met that person the next day and he pulled an "m" out of the air, I would at least be surprised. Sophie just accepted it to easily to be believable.
Also, exploring the forth wall from the view point of a character, not an audience member. Too many times have I read Pinkie Pie referencing the reader in some forthwall-breaking way and no one in the story seemed to care. What you're doing is interesting. You're imagining the forth wall as a physical part of the world, not just some off-hand joke that's forgotten about. The explanation that Pinkie gave about it, that was perfect. It told the reader exactly what they needed to know to get into the world, and it didn't go overboard with specific details. I like it because it has relevance; you wrote it in for a purpose. Though, once again, Sophie should be a bit more slow in accepting this reality.
That's it, that's all the cake I have. Oh, the rest of that, I'm taking that home with me.
4362461 Ah yes, that cake was refreshing. I get what you are saying, and I have an application method that allows me to apply those changes without altering the story as it is now. So, what is happening later will have your advice applied to it.
Hello? Anypony writing in here?
4362848 the cake is a lie
5006826 Oh hey! Yeah I'm here.
5007605 will there be anymore to this story?
5009607 Yes, it is just on the back burner of my to do list.
Since you asked nicely: SNEAK PEAK!