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I'm confused.

4260413 he did that on my story too :/

Will this story at least have a happy ending?

4260530 maybe so, maybe no--I haven't decided yet.

I like this :-)

My only complaints here is that the story feels a bit... rushed. Other than that, nice job.

Mkay, there's a little tag that I'm sure you clicked on when you made the story. It's called "Mature", and it covers NSFW stuff like " hoof-play, questionable sexual self-control, ethics and moral standards." If you've got a mature tag on your story, you don't need to put annoying and obstructive notes all over the place warning people about stuff they ought to be already aware of. Anyone who wasn't deterred by the mature or the sex tag, and isn't okay with this type of content is a little bitch and should grow a pair. The only real warning you should put there is that this is vore, since that isn't strictly covered by the [mature] tag.

Just tell the story. The last thing you want is for your reader to sit down, settle themselves in, and open the book, ready to be brought to another world, only to be forcefully shoved back into reality by an author's note that reminds them they're reading a fictional tale. You've just shot yourself in the foot, and you're about to turn away anyone who's read enough books to view this as a sign of an amateur.

ok this fic makes no sense at all

You are amazed at your size, as it took almost an entire minute of constant running to get to the middle of the rusty screw... Then again, being a third of an inch will do that to you.

like are you confusing inches for millimeters here or what giant ass bed sized screws are you talking about when you wrote that?......

or are you just a slug irl? and same goes for everything else what the fuck was happening with the proportions at any time?....

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I'm reading this after four year, funny how he corrected it in 1/5 of an inch but still that's 0.2 inches, a sock can't be taller than 2.5 inches so like 13 times bigger.
And still you would be as large as a screw that way if not larger