Quick thing I noticed; in chapter two it was said that Rainbow never saw her mother again after her parents divorced but here it said she goes to church with them every Sunday. Is this accurate or a mistake?
6693737 It was said that Fluttershy would sometimes join her at church and it was said that they didn't become friends until after the divorce. Also the wording is clearly in the present tense and Twilight said earlier Rainbow only leaves her home occasionally to go to Cloudsdale, presumably to church.
A single tear was shed. This story is beautiful, deep, horrific, dark, and mysterious all at the same time. I can't wait for the next chapter (well thats actually a lie but. . . Don' make us wait too long please).
I only spotted a couple of smaller errors and such that have already been mentioned by the other commenters.
So is Roseluck going to turn because I fear for Lucky if that happens. Interesting that Fluttershy seems to have few memories, maybe they can get through to her somehow but I doubt it. Also sending Apple Bloom away, swearing revenge for Roseluck. Damn it Applejack you might as well be wearing a sign around your neck that reads "I'm going to die".
Wow Daisy, you are really losing it here...being mad a Lucky is one thing, accusing Lucky of killing your sister is another. I understand that you're grieving and want to get justice for your sister, but lashing out at the Princess and accusing her of all ponies of sleeping with Lucky. Not cool, Daisy...NOT cool.
Comment posted by Super Ponyman deleted May 17th, 2018
The dead can speak?
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Shit, fixed
Just...just wow...this was...whoa...
It is no longer Fluttershy.
It is hunger.
Can't wait for the next one :)
Quick thing I noticed; in chapter two it was said that Rainbow never saw her mother again after her parents divorced but here it said she goes to church with them every Sunday. Is this accurate or a mistake?
While the forward slash is an excellent punctuation mark, I think a period would be better here.
The irony not lies not only within the spelling, but the fact that Fluttershy ate an incorporeal thing that she should have abhor.
6693540 The time Rainbow Dash went to church with them was probably before the divorce happened.
Awesome chapter
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It was said that Fluttershy would sometimes join her at church and it was said that they didn't become friends until after the divorce. Also the wording is clearly in the present tense and Twilight said earlier Rainbow only leaves her home occasionally to go to Cloudsdale, presumably to church.
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Mistake on my part will fix that when I get home
morale
prey
dude cant wait for more, its so good, im goin nuts!
A single tear was shed. This story is beautiful, deep, horrific, dark, and mysterious all at the same time. I can't wait for the next chapter (well thats actually a lie but. . . Don' make us wait too long please).
I only spotted a couple of smaller errors and such that have already been mentioned by the other commenters.
Anyways keep on truckin'.
If you awake as tho you were awaken from a dream and you are standing in a field, don't worry for you are a Elysium... And you're already dead.
Great chapter looking forward to the next, let's hope flutterbat feeds on that crazed mare.
please update soon
So who's her next victim going to be
It stalled?
7127653 It got murdered, brutally I might add, by a pack of angry ninja midgets.
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So is Roseluck going to turn because I fear for Lucky if that happens. Interesting that Fluttershy seems to have few memories, maybe they can get through to her somehow but I doubt it. Also sending Apple Bloom away, swearing revenge for Roseluck. Damn it Applejack you might as well be wearing a sign around your neck that reads "I'm going to die".
Wow Daisy, you are really losing it here...being mad a Lucky is one thing, accusing Lucky of killing your sister is another. I understand that you're grieving and want to get justice for your sister, but lashing out at the Princess and accusing her of all ponies of sleeping with Lucky. Not cool, Daisy...NOT cool.
I wonder what will happen when she finds out it is Fluttershy. When she does, she better pray to Faust that she doesn't rip her throat out.
What happened to the images for this chapter? Instead I'm just seeing "Upstream reported 404 Not Found" and "Invalid image".