Oh…the queen has the hots for the human?…interesting, if they communicated throw minds, and she has control of everyone, what would happen if she experience an overwhelming emotion? like a really strong orgasm? did ALL the changelings will experience too? or her mind control will just disappear?
Shining had put up a standing order some time ago that I was to be allowed entrance to the city under any circumstances, after I had soundly thrashed him and his six best subordinates all at once in a sparring match, proving that I wouldn't need weapons to take over if I wanted to.
I'm going to just face-palm at that one.
I have no issues with the guy being good enough to match or beat Armor, but beating him and six other very good fighters?
5059904 Only a reason…well 2 actually, the first english is not my first language so make long stories is not easy, and would not be very good with words, it will be as if a cave man will be talking
the second is that this form of upload stories is still confusing me a lot of people had try to explain them to me but I always come short into HOW to do it. So…yeah I in theory can, but I don't know HOW
5059743 If they know absolutely no hand-to-hand or weapons training then I heavily question Equestria's military standards. And you did state him and his six best subordinates. One would hope they would know what the hell they were doing.
5060334 Yeah sorry, oh but if you can help me I could do it…I could pass you private messages you can help me with the grammar and the orthographic, and once ready you can post it on your page or I on my, THEN maybe I could do it
When you make a new story, make a new chapter, and then you can just type it in on the site. Alternatively, you could also just copy/paste from another source. I don't think there is a way to download a file wholesale, but that should at least get you started. Also, in the story options page, you can set a password for other people to see your unpublished chapters.
5060708 I was pointing out that they should be trained, and stating 'who are accustomed to using magic' implies the opposite.
Also remember, who says that they are A) all Unicorns as we see plenty of Pegasi guards and B) primarily use magic, as every time we've seen Rarity in a fight she's smacking them with her hooves.
My main point is having him being able to beat Shining and his six best all at once really smacks of being overpowered and Gary-Stu-ish.
I repeat again, I do like the story, I'm just pointing out something that seems improbable IMHO.
Oh, I forgot about my reasoning for your two points.
A: From what I remember of the guard, a good chunk of them are unicorns, although that could just be because most of the ones who actually get lines are unicorns.
B: I would imagine that unicorns who enter the guard are primarily trained in magical combat, but that's certainly not a certainty.
Also, I would imagine that the 'best'(most regularly high-efficiency performance) of the guard would typically be magic-based combatants, as they would be able to do things others simply couldn't(multiple takedowns at once, for example).
Oh…the queen has the hots for the human?…interesting, if they communicated throw minds, and she has control of everyone, what would happen if she experience an overwhelming emotion? like a really strong orgasm? did ALL the changelings will experience too? or her mind control will just disappear?
I'm going to just face-palm at that one.
I have no issues with the guy being good enough to match or beat Armor, but beating him and six other very good fighters?
That's a wee bit much.
Otherwise, good chapter.
5059548
... That is a very good idea for an one shot or a clop fic right there...
5059609
Six unicorns, who are accustomed to simply using magic to beat their opponents?
5059723
Short? it can work for a whole story right there
5059761
Then why don't you do it? Make a long fic with this idea, let's see if it works for long fics as well
5059904
Only a reason…well 2 actually, the first english is not my first language so make long stories is not easy, and would not be very good with words, it will be as if a cave man will be talking
the second is that this form of upload stories is still confusing me a lot of people had try to explain them to me but I always come short into HOW to do it.
So…yeah I in theory can, but I don't know HOW
5059743 If they know absolutely no hand-to-hand or weapons training then I heavily question Equestria's military standards. And you did state him and his six best subordinates. One would hope they would know what the hell they were doing.
5059915
true dat
5060334
Yeah sorry, oh but if you can help me I could do it…I could pass you private messages you can help me with the grammar and the orthographic, and once ready you can post it on your page or I on my, THEN maybe I could do it
5060347
There is that, but I don't know how to post things here either, but I can help you with grammar, send the mensages that I will try my beat
5060363
Thanks I will send you a message as soon as I get something in mind
5060387
ok
5060325
Why would they not have training?
5060387
5060413
When you make a new story, make a new chapter, and then you can just type it in on the site. Alternatively, you could also just copy/paste from another source. I don't think there is a way to download a file wholesale, but that should at least get you started. Also, in the story options page, you can set a password for other people to see your unpublished chapters.
5060724
Cool to know man
5060708 I was pointing out that they should be trained, and stating 'who are accustomed to using magic' implies the opposite.
Also remember, who says that they are A) all Unicorns as we see plenty of Pegasi guards and B) primarily use magic, as every time we've seen Rarity in a fight she's smacking them with her hooves.
My main point is having him being able to beat Shining and his six best all at once really smacks of being overpowered and Gary-Stu-ish.
I repeat again, I do like the story, I'm just pointing out something that seems improbable IMHO.
5061557
Well, there is a major bit of character development coking up, so that should at least make it more believable.
5061631 Maybe. We'll see I guess.
5061557
Oh, I forgot about my reasoning for your two points.
A: From what I remember of the guard, a good chunk of them are unicorns, although that could just be because most of the ones who actually get lines are unicorns.
B: I would imagine that unicorns who enter the guard are primarily trained in magical combat, but that's certainly not a certainty.
Also, I would imagine that the 'best'(most regularly high-efficiency performance) of the guard would typically be magic-based combatants, as they would be able to do things others simply couldn't(multiple takedowns at once, for example).
Wow, finally we don't have dumbasses in canterlot!