This story is pretty good but you might want to consider getting an editor to fix some minor problems in this story like for example you use the incorrect words in a sentence. For example in the sentence "Dear Celestia, your main!" (From the chapter "Hello princess.") you spelled the word "Main" when you should have spelt "Mane."
Yes RD, try to fight capture the guy whose weapon fires hot lead bullets faster than you can ever hope to react or see, great plan
This is why rainbow is my least favorite character in the series, she's constantly arrogant, self-righteous, thinks slower than a snail shits.........I really hope you fuck her up on this story. Sorry bout the rant
I would rather not see the Mane Six die, but I would like to see them get their asses kicked. Let them suffer. As for RD, Delta should kick her ass and then capture her. Use her as leverage against the Equestrian Government. Free those slaves, but leave the Mane Six alive and injured. Realistically, not a good idea to kill the nation's biggest heroes. It will just make the Princesses more determined to take down Delta and his group.
6109591 I'm with ya man, nobody ever kills them off and its annoying as fuck. In every fic I've read the main 6 somehow can go toe to toe with a trained solder, its annoying
6112637 6112659 Well I don't want to spoil the story, but I'll just say that some characters will die. Not gonna say who, or when, but just know that some loveable characters will be six feet under. Just be patient, and I promise you'll be satisfied.
"Sorry girls, but I can't just sit here and wait. I'll bring back Spike, and the human in chains." She said to herself, shot into the air, and changed her direction towards the Everfree forest.
This story is pretty good but you might want to consider getting an editor to fix some minor problems in this story like for example you use the incorrect words in a sentence. For example in the sentence "Dear Celestia, your main!" (From the chapter "Hello princess.") you spelled the word "Main" when you should have spelt "Mane."
6109646 *Face palm* Damn it! Also, I know I need an editor.
Great chapter
But how soon until new one?
6109760 Not sure, but I'll try and finish it as soon as possible.
Yes RD, try to fight capture the guy whose weapon fires hot lead bullets faster than you can ever hope to react or see, great plan
This is why rainbow is my least favorite character in the series, she's constantly arrogant, self-righteous, thinks slower than a snail shits.........I really hope you fuck her up on this story. Sorry bout the rant
I would rather not see the Mane Six die, but I would like to see them get their asses kicked. Let them suffer. As for RD, Delta should kick her ass and then capture her. Use her as leverage against the Equestrian Government. Free those slaves, but leave the Mane Six alive and injured. Realistically, not a good idea to kill the nation's biggest heroes. It will just make the Princesses more determined to take down Delta and his group.
Oh RD you are going to be the first one, at least i hope so...
This was a good chapter :) Maybe one of your best. It flows fairly smoothly and is easy to understand. Keep up the good work :)
6111617 Thanks.
How about a little ass kicking on them already? Getting real tired of you pussyfooting around here man.
6109591 I'm with ya man, nobody ever kills them off and its annoying as fuck. In every fic I've read the main 6 somehow can go toe to toe with a trained solder, its annoying
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Well I don't want to spoil the story, but I'll just say that some characters will die. Not gonna say who, or when, but just know that some loveable characters will be six feet under. Just be patient, and I promise you'll be satisfied.
6112903 if that's the case I can't wait, really like the fic by the way its alot diffirant from all the other story's like this, in a really good way
*suddenly notice I'm at the latest chapter*
What?? ALREADY?!
Welp, now I have to find another way to burn time...
more death
6119647 Masturbation's a great way to start.
to armed my brother and sister we fight for freedom!
6283251 -reads comment that was responded to-
DAMMIT DISCORD!!!
Discord best character
Also why does every story I have read has Rainbow Dash trying to kill or be killed by something she likes has a death wish.