You pace back and forth across your living room, the cloud of smoke from your lit cigarette hanging in your mouth growing thicker overhead.
Let’s see... Let's go over the facts... Caramella is stuck in a rut in her little home town and wants to do more, be more... Her parents encourage her to take up the family business of running the little general store, but she wants to go to the city... But... She can’t find a way out.
Taking another long drag on your cigarette, you make your way over to the typewriter and let out the smoke as you concentrate on the magic within yourself to your horn and start to press down on the keys as the words start to flow from your imagination to the paper.
“But momma! I just wanna live my life, why can’t you let me jus-
You stop and groan aloud as you hear the phone ring and get up angrily as you march your way over to the distraction.
“Hello?” you ask angrily.
From the other end, a gruff voice laughed a bit before doing what sounded like clapping his hooves together. “Hey, hey! How’s my favorite bestseller?”
You let out a heavy sigh and put your cigarette out in a nearby ashtray. “I’d be better if you didn’t check in on me everyday, Trump Card.”
“What’s wrong with just saying hi?” your agent asks with a bit of a chuckle. “I just wanted to-”
“You wanted to see how I’m doing,” you say bitterly as you make your way to the window. “Listen, writing this new novel is already a pain in the ass and you’re not making it any easier if you keep poking me while I'm writing, asking how far I've gotten.”
You can feel Trump Card’s temper flare a bit as you look out at New Colt City, his voice just a hair away from yelling.
“Hey come on, I just wanted to see how you were doing with the latest book, I-
“A book I didn’t even want to write!” you say rather angrily. “When I said I had a new book planned at that interview last week, I meant that horror story I’ve been working on, not another romance novel! Why did you tell all those advertisers I was?”
“Oh don’t be like that. Your fans want this, they eat up your work! A new romance novel would-”
“Fuck you! What about what I want?!?" you yell out angrily. "What about Geist? I’ve been wanting to write that story for years now! I told you that I was going to take a break from romance for a while and start branching out into new genres and here you are, tying me into promises for new stories I don't want to write!”
Trump Card goes dead silent as you start to dig into him.
"Now listen, I like writing romance and it gives me the warm fuzzies when my fans tell me how much they loved the story or how much they cried when this happened or how good of a author I am, but I'm the writer here, not you! If I want write horror, fantasy, or science fiction, I'm damn well going to write it and I don't need you telling my fans or me what I'm writing!"
“But I was just trying to-”
“You were just trying to make a quick buck, Trump,” you accuse sharply. “Don’t try to deny it. I know you. Now you listen here and you listen good. I’m going to write this novel and then I’m going to work on Geist, The Curtain, and The Wanderer. Not the sequel you’ve already promised.”
From the other end, you hear Trump Card audibly gulp. “Y...You know about that?”
“Yeah, and you’re lucky I don’t cut you as my agent for that."
"You wouldn't dare!" Trump yells angrily.
"Try me, I'll be my own agent. You know how spiteful I can be, so just fucking try me. Now, I want to be left alone to my work,” you say as you open up your window. “And I want to get away from it all.”
“What do you mean?” Trump Card asks as you lean out the window, taking in New Colt City in its entirety.
“You hear that?”
"Hear what?"
Grabbing a hold of the phone, you hold it out to the city and let Trump Card hear what you heard. "What about now?" you ask over the dull roar of the city. “It’s pretty hard to write about a small town mare when all I got to draw off on for inspiration is this city that never sleeps. I want to move to another town. Somewhere quiet and out of the way.”
"I don't think-"
"Trump, I'm tired, cranky, and on my third carton of cigarettes. I'm not going to argue. Either you let me go find myself and do write this fucking story or I'm leaving you and taking my business elsewhere."
Trump Card lets out a heavy sigh. “Alright, alright. You got me. I'll start making arrangements so you can move to... Where did you want to go, again?"
Looking out on the horizon, you feel a small smile start to grow on your face as you grab yourself a new cigarette “I hear Ponyville is good this time of year.”
“Okay, I’ll check around and see what I can do about getting you a place to stay.”
“...Thanks. I’ll get my stuff packed,” you say before hanging up the phone.
Chewing on the cigarette in your mouth a bit, you look around your living room and sigh aloud. Books, papers, a few dozen ashtrays, and enough empty bottles of energy drink littered the place and this place in the house was the cleanest.
Grabbing a hold of a nearby lighter, you touch it to your cigarette.
“This may take a while...”
FIRST
ALSO YAY ITS OUT
Here we go!
GentlemanCreeper has a new story?
I love your other stories and I can't wait to see how this one turns out!
I can already tell this one's gonna be good. Just the thought of the personality difference between this character and Fluttershy is enough to make me giddy with anticipation!
HRRRRGGGGG ALL OF MY YES
FLUTTERSHY
YAY
TRACKING
NUFF SAID
And so it begins...
i look forward to this.
Why am I sensing a feeling of animosity radiating from you Creeper? Almost like this is like a like a giant middle finger to some annoying fans. I'm sorry if we got on your bad side.That main character...wow if anyone needs some clover and or some Ambien, it's that guy. I still look forward to more.
Peace Out
Looking forward to more
Already love it. Keep up the amazing work!
Been waiting for this story to start for a loooooooong time. I trust you won't disappoint with this one.
Friendship accepted!
I'm excited :D
Pretty good! I like how you made foreshadowing of this in Freudian Slip !
Wait a minute....... “Hey, hey! How’s my favorite bestseller?”
OH MY GOD IT'S BARRY!
I see a lot of Alan Wake references in here. (Even though it's pure coincidence)
Can't wait till next chapter!
You my good sir have again gotten me hooked in a romance fic good job
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Indeed .... also
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A bit of unessesary cussing imo, but I'll track.
Things are about to get interesting.
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Heh, I'm going to have fun with this, just you watch.
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wat? This is far from a giant middle finger... Hell, if I was mad at anyone, I would make it apparent, not voice it through a story. The main character in this is more abrasive right now but SPOILER ALERT was actually more kind and plucky before he got roped into the more dry, business side of the writing bizz. You'll see what I mean later... And what makes you think I'm mad at anyone? I love all you guys!
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It'll serve a purpose later, trust me. It's far from pointless, as you'll see in chapters to come.
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He's a writer that writes a lot of romance stories and is constantly being hounded by his supporter and fans. Maybe I assumed too much and looked for subliminal undertones when there weren't any. Sometimes people will throw bit and pieces of themselves into characters. To assume is to make an 'ass' out 'u' and 'me.' oops.
As long you ain't pissed.
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I can't ever see a valid reason ever to have one of those disgusting words.
There really is no justification and it takes away innocence that could've been a good characteristic of the story. Lotsa authors fall into this trap, using words only meant for mature audiences when they could also tailor it for everypony. This is the reason I still like disney cartoons, as does others, such as parents and their impressionable, fragile youth.
Please don't interpert this as hating on the story. I really do see potential in the story, and wasted potential in any way, shape or form is a terrible waste of talent, which, my good sir, you quite frankly have a lot of.
Or you could just ponify the cusses. Just my two bits.
Fluttershy... with the grumpy uninspired writer archtype. This... is going to be FUN.
Damn...This is a GREAT START!
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Seriously dude, don't worry about it. You guys are awesome, I could never be mad at my fans. But you are right, you might find some undertones of my personality or bits and pieces of myself in a character every now and again. But not in this case.
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Well, I've noticed as my stories have progressed, they've become more mature. But I'll explain to you why I used angry words exactly... The "You" in this story is rather stressed, angry, and getting more abrasive as he is getting pulled into the more lifeless business side of his passion. Of course he's angry and when you've got someone like Trump Card calling him at all hours of the day, he was bound to lose his temper. Once again, sorry if I offended, but this is how I feel he'd act given the situation. But just watch, you'll see his character develop a lot.
Can't wait to see where this goes Mr. Creeper!
I understand your motive, but I still don't think it's really nessesary, given cleaner alternatives.
Besides, the seriousness of the situation could be undermined if you used phunny phrases.
Funny + Seriousness + Good Story Development + Good Character Development + ????= profit.
Just a suggestion, though.
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"The whole point of swearing is that it ain't appropriate!"
- Kaywinnit Lee Frye.
They're supposed to be harsh, rude and angry - "Oh gosh golly darn" doesn't put across the same emotional message as "Oh, for f*ck's sake!" because the former would make the character look like he was dancing around and trying not to offend Trump Card. In my opinion, dancing around the cursing would have made the character look weak, and happy to bend over for his awful agent. Honestly, I don't think Trump Card given his apparent behaviour so far would have given our hero what he wants if he'd skimped out.
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me gusta
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Agreed!!
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Why not use words that only sound like swearing?
Us bronies have invented some.
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...sry i let pinky pie write the comment....she still hasn't found the space bar...nevermind she tell''s me she just doen't use it
any way's good story man write some more
355717 btw she is bigger than anything in the choose bar....sry had to say it
SHITS ABOUT TO GET REAL
Oh joyous!!!! Its finally out!!!!!!
It's funny, but my ponysona is a writer (like I hope to be) and mai waifu is Fluttershy . . . . . ME GUSTA! Seriously though, you've got a really good hook going in!
O.O
I... I CAN HAS NEW STORY?! YUSHYUSHYUSHYUSHYUSHYUSHYUSHYUSH!!!!!
Oh yay! A new story! I wonder how this will turn out. *see's hiatus update*
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Hmmm. Seems just a teeny bit rougher than your normal style of writing, Creeper? (Style-wise rather than content, I mean.)
Unsure whether I wanna keep reading this or not. I like your writing style, but it'a a little too rough for me. I'll definitely check out your other stories though!
Thay could have been handled better.