”Surprise!” I hear them saying as I entered the room.
Several small ponies in various colours standing in the room, all turned towards the door I came in through.
Somewhere further in, into the room, I sense another Pony, Pinkie pie is there, I know it, even before I actually had seen her. I guess I learn to recognise her, and her presence.
“Yeah, I sure am surprised. It's all so colourful. I'm not really used to colours!” I pointed out in response to their exclamation.
Curiously I look around, trying to make sense of everything, the colours, balloons all over, confetti hanging from overhead. I may not really recall my past, it's just the vague sensation, as if I smell something out of place?
“I love it!” I then exclaimed happily as I tried to bounce like my new Mother, into the room.
Then I could feel her giggles all over the place, not so much in volume, as in the sensation of it.
Apparently, she had managed to find the entire rainbow? From red to purple, though she had not yet presented any of them. I guess she had already explained why we were all hear, and who I am. They just smiled at me, maybe they looked at me like the toy I felt I saw in my mother Pinkie Pie?
Looking closer, they had no funny images on their flanks, why? Pinkie Pie has three balloons on her flanks, and she loved making funny points out of them, ripping one right off of her flank, blowing it up and handing it to me. I had been laughing at her as she did it, then pondered where he balloon came from, and how she could blow it up like that. She doesn't even have hands to hold the balloon with.
Sometimes nothing here makes sense, then it makes perfect sense. Then I realise just how little my former life made sense to me, as it is. Here it is just one big party, and all are gigantic toys to play with. Isn't she the best toy ever, one who can be my mother at the same time?
Then I realised she was behind my back, covering my eyes with a strange mask that makes it all dark and I can't see anything.
“Here's the bat I promised you!” she then exclaimed as she aimed me in a new direction.
“Just a few steps, and you should be able to hit the piñata!” she then pointed out.
All the foals obviously know what was about to happen, since I clearly could hear them cheering. I guess they found this hilarious to see. Then again, from what I had been told, there would be more than enough sweets and treats for any and all to go around. She always kept a huge stash of them, hidden away somewhere, so they would be close at hoof to her.
Then it hit me, just how starved I had been, I never had been given sweets or treats before. At least not until I moved in with Pinkie Pie. She had been only to happy over me calling her Mother, Mom, or what other similar words. Now I had an entire piñata.
Maybe they were told they could help me catch the spoils? I guess I didn't care. I was to have more than my fill, even if they had theirs' too. Besides, the best part is still having Pinkie Pie my mother, wouldn't it.
Something changed, was it them suddenly giggling, or was I mistaken? Either way, I stop, it had been over my head by now, by the sounds I thought I hear. If I had walked in the direction intended, it had to be. I swing the bat, and felt something. Either I had hit something else, but that couldn't be the case. I tried to give it a new swing, by what I had felt, and sure hear a noise and feel the bat hit something. I tried a few more times, before I hear a different nose, small things falling all over the floor.
There was a sudden cascade of candy, sweets and treats. Though as they stop, it is dead silence. None of them said anything.
I then noticed Pinkie Pie pulling the rag off of my face, I could see, and it was once more light. Now I see numerous individual sweets and treats all over the floor.
Once I could see the light of day, I see an ocean of candy, sweets and treats all over the floor around me. I take a moment, just looking, where had she managed to hide all this?
Then I throw myself on the floor, trying to pick out what looks the yummiest, which could as well have been everything, but I can't eat anywhere near as much as this in a months, as much as I may wish I could.
In the end, I just push a mountain to one side, away from the others, in an attempt to claim it, though I still leave the ocean more or less intact, by the looks.
I had tried to taste a few, but they all are just too good, maybe she knew my taste already, or is it part of her talent, or her being my mom?
After a while, I realised, they were all over the spoils I had left behind, maybe they knew better then to take from any of the others, there simply is way too much to bother.
When I had managed to hide my stash, I noticed they had their own mountains, but the ocean still is where I had left it. For once, I had been right, there is no point in petty squabbles with Pinkie Pie securing the treats. She had given me a sack to store my treats in, and they apparently had theirs. She still leaves the remainder where it lay.
“Time for the cake!” Pinkie Pie announced.
There is a scream from all the ponies, rushing towards the table, and I soon found my place.
no offense, i kinda like where this story's headed, but the grammar makes it really hard to figure out.
i hate sounding mean, especially when I've Favorited this fic, but it's really hard to figure this out.
please don't hate me for that
4144876 the Problem with Grammar is that it can't clearly be pointed at.
spelling is easy, that way.
I'd rather hear it early, if there's the slightest problem.
besides, I suck at hating.
maybe I'm too much of Pinkie Pie for it?
oh yeah, and thus it is Pinkie adopting the girl ..
4183144 if the story makes sense, that's always good.
if you can enjoy it as that, I guess that's good for you.
Can't recall putting anything I'd consider clopable, but that's just me?
I've been writing quite a few clopish fics, though, maybe part of it followed through?
I probably should write a few more chapters for this any time soon, too.
just gotta wait for my Muse to follow me there, though.
excellent history
just a question is a magical orphanage??? (well several)
because human ponies take??
and humans take ponies?????
some special sign is required to enter this orphanage???
greetings ok
I hope I do not bother with these questions
4219902 Thanks.
It's basically the gate that is Magical.
That would be a techniality.
If you see the gat as just another door, it's just one buiilding with one united Orfanage.
or you could see it as two or four separate once.
if you use the gate, you'd only find the Pony
Foals, while the Ponies only find Human Children.
If you don't use the gate, you'd just find children, and they only find foals.
Greetings
naeh, no problems. so long as you enjoy the story, I'm happy.
I only mentioned a single adoption this far, and just the one way.
I could as easily have chosen any of the options, even if this is one of the more interesting options.
Starting with an Adoption that wasn't using the gate would be sad and boring, considering the Title?
Unlike the Gate in the film, this stay open, but it only admit specific individuals.
just one last question (I swear it's the last) celestia knows that orphanage
lol I hope to see pinkie pie as a mother she is funny, cheerful, smiling
but when motherhood requires you be a little more serious as aa respond to that situation
Raising a child is important for happiness, love, joy everything that makes a home warm
but when strongly necessary to discipline as will react pinkie
as his friends would react
this will be interesting
I look forward to the next episode
greetings and good luck
4225568 I guess Celestia is bound to know the Orphanage too.
yeah, Pinkie stands for ll things fun, and laughter.
Thankfully there are a few samples of responsibility to go by, aside from the fact that Commedy is Dead Searious too.
Raising the young is what makes the community happy soon enough.
BTW, isn't there a story where Pinkie adopted the Cake Twins?
right now I'm exploring the mirror aspect of the Orphanage, as it were.
I did after all mention this in the summary, even if the title doesn't mention it, right?
Parents needs children to foster.
Remains to see how the respective characteristics in the story will be belending together, before the story is ompleted ..
It would help the story better structurally if you framed each chapter as a diary or journal entry written by the central character. Maybe include a prologue that explained the background a bit. I think you have a good idea for the story; its just that the writing is inconsistent and lacks a central focus.