Spitfire is at the top of her game ,the best of the best.Someponys would say she has everything.But how wrong they are. Dealing with her heart being broken by her ex,while only her Wonderbolts teammates by her side to cheer her up.While they deal wi
I take it you guys didnt see his comments on the last chapter which explained it.
Either way. Grammar in my opinion is not the main need for a story and can be bypassed as long as it is at least readable. And this is still VERY readable. This is showing the start of a good storyline which is the most important and i can tell i am going to enjoy it a lot. Seriously. A lot.
3835509 I enjoy running. Would I let a field of caltrops ruin my enjoyment of it? Yes, yes I would.
That said I still like the premise of this story and look forward to seeing where it is going. But seriously there are a million groups on this site dedicated to setting up writers with editors it would be worth your time to look into them.
But i be carful on it. Since in the past ,I had said beta said they would do it and never reply or after 1 chapter.
Or be a part of a group of trolls who like to make fun of people story's no matter is it bad or good. (Long story ,that reason why I only post my rough stuff on fanfiction.net now.)
3921747 It is no trouble. The idea you are posing is enjoyable and interesting. the grammar I personally have no problem with and no matter what anybody says, they will not change my opinion. now continue on with this story. it has touched my interest.
3921841 I would love to see this proofread, and would offer to do it myself if I wasn't ridiculously busy the whole time. This is a good story so far and I want to see more. The grammar doesn't bother me as much as it would normally, so I guess I can live with it for now. Please tell me you'll be getting a proofreader soon. I know you have asked here, but try the Proofreader Group. There are lots of people there who would help. Again, I would love to, but I can't help. The story is great and I just want to see it improve in every way. You already have a great like-dislike ratio, and those dislikes are almost certainly because of grammar. Those people are assholes.
I get tht you have disabilities, so it's cool that you're writing and that this is your third story. Keep doing it! Enjoy it! I know I enjoy it.
Anyway, well done. I know I may sound harsh or critical, but that's just because I'm an asshole. I only meant to compliment you. Hehe... Sorry.
Basically, you need a proofreader, you're doing great and you have written a great story. Keep doing it.
This chapter needs alot of work.
No offense, but you seriously need to work on your grammar.
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I take it you guys didnt see his comments on the last chapter which explained it.
Either way. Grammar in my opinion is not the main need for a story and can be bypassed as long as it is at least readable. And this is still VERY readable. This is showing the start of a good storyline which is the most important and i can tell i am going to enjoy it a lot. Seriously. A lot.
Keep up the good work.
3822482 I agree. Grammar is not very important here. Sure it could use a little editing here and there but it really does not matter in this case.
The story is apparent and easy to grasp and overall enjoyable.
So would I let a few grammatical errors ruin my enjoyment of the story... No.
I cant wait to see what is to come.
3835509 I enjoy running. Would I let a field of caltrops ruin my enjoyment of it? Yes, yes I would.
That said I still like the premise of this story and look forward to seeing where it is going. But seriously there are a million groups on this site dedicated to setting up writers with editors it would be worth your time to look into them.
3833338 p51 mustang for the win i got one hanging from the ceiling in my room lol
3814349 Spitfire my fav fallow by the Lanchester and their will be more
3819512 Like I have said in the past I suther from Dyslixa and Dysprixia,which effects my spelling and grammar.
I am looking for a beta to help this so people can understand it better.
3821595 Please look at other replies I posted on this.
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Thank you
3835509 Thank you ,so true some people take grammar in story's way to serious sometimes.
3835544 Gives a cake.
3921734 I saw them and I'm sorry for that. It happens.
3854909 Like I said i am looking for beta for it.
But i be carful on it. Since in the past ,I had said beta said they would do it and never reply or after 1 chapter.
Or be a part of a group of trolls who like to make fun of people story's no matter is it bad or good. (Long story ,that reason why I only post my rough stuff on fanfiction.net now.)
3919672 Like said it other post lol. Yeah I read over it like 4 time before posting it. I
3921759 It ok i understand sometime you miss stuff.
Plus I had worst stuff in reply to my fic on fanfiction.net.
3921747 It is no trouble. The idea you are posing is enjoyable and interesting. the grammar I personally have no problem with and no matter what anybody says, they will not change my opinion. now continue on with this story. it has touched my interest.
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I would love to see this proofread, and would offer to do it myself if I wasn't ridiculously busy the whole time. This is a good story so far and I want to see more. The grammar doesn't bother me as much as it would normally, so I guess I can live with it for now.
Please tell me you'll be getting a proofreader soon. I know you have asked here, but try the Proofreader Group. There are lots of people there who would help. Again, I would love to, but I can't help. The story is great and I just want to see it improve in every way. You already have a great like-dislike ratio, and those dislikes are almost certainly because of grammar. Those people are assholes.
I get tht you have disabilities, so it's cool that you're writing and that this is your third story. Keep doing it! Enjoy it! I know I enjoy it.
Anyway, well done. I know I may sound harsh or critical, but that's just because I'm an asshole. I only meant to compliment you. Hehe... Sorry.
Basically, you need a proofreader, you're doing great and you have written a great story. Keep doing it.
~ Decaf
For all intents and purposes Sin, better to follow along here than back on SF
i wait and wait and 2 months later i find out there is a 2nd chapter...where is 3 and 4 and if it takes awhile sorry just been wating for a long time