At the edge of the everfree forist, two demon like creatures were watching a yellow pegasus trot into a village with a small child in a carryer by her side. Kabold and Sheraa growled and turned and went back into the everfree they continued walking until they came too a small vortext. They went inside and the vortext closed behind them.
On the other side of the vortext was another world. This world had fire and brimstone everywhere, pools of lava and blood covered the ground and everywhere there were living monstrosoties. they all seemed to be made of a mish mash of different animals. Some had bodys like an ape but a head of a deformd dog, and made small chhoking noises as they talked. Some looked bipedal but had scaley skin and spikes coming out of thier spine, the heads looked humanoid but the tops of their heads were sqished to a point, while the lower jaws were missing, a long cord like tounge was dangeling down. they made gurgleing like burps as they talked. there were even one's that looked like Kabold and Sheraa.
The sky was blood red and an eternal eclipse was in the sky. All around them there were craters and ruined buildings corpses of humans litterd the streets. The two creatures continued thier jurney toword a small pyramid like structure. They climbed it and stoped near the top and bowed.
"Lord Mooneater." Both creatures said. A Human like figure waved his hand and stood. He had jet black eyes and red pupils with a cat like slit. He had a huge malevalent smile on his face showing rows of sharp teeth, His fingers were knife like claws, His ears were pionty like an elf. On his back he had jet black angel wings. He wore armer that looked like something a roman gladeater would where.
"So did you find her." His voice sounded soft and sad with a hint of wickedness.
"Yes we did your honor." Kabold said.
"But she was with another creature." Sheraa said.
Kabold spoke up again. "But we couldn't get the child of harmony without raising suspicion."
"Hmmmmm....this does pose a problem." Mooneater said. "But we need to act fast. We don't want the childs chaos gene to awaken. If it does she would pose a huge threat to us."
"Now what my lord." Kabold said
"We wait, and when the time is right we strike and kill the child." Mooneater said befor breaking out into a laugh. "Then nothing will stop us from conckering the universe."
Back in Equestria.
"The little tiyke has ah mighty set o lungs on her." Applejack said as she tried to quite down the crying baby.
"I Just don't know what could be wrong." Twilight said.
"I have a bad feeling about this." said Fluttershy. Rareity and Spike where busy trying to find a book on parenting and were running around panting.
"Uh Oh! uhhh.. Girls my pinky sense is trying to tell me something." Pinky pie said. "I think something bad is about to happen." Little did she know a portal was biggining to form on the other side of the everfree.
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I'll do ya a favor. Give me an email I can contact you at, and I'll edit these two chapters of spelling. And no, this isn't a permanent basis... too much rl stuff on my side
still a bit of spelling issues, use microsoft word, it has spelling check and grammar check too
your probably using open office huh?
323342well actuly i don't have acces to a computer yet. right now i'm using the wi-fi function on my nintendo wii to go onto the internet and type my storyies. right now i'm using internet channle combined with a wireliss keyboard to type. it's reall simple once you know how. the downer though. the spell cheek isn't that good.
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let me just admit something...I HAD NO IDEA YOU COULD DO THAT!
next, try pressing f7. That is usually the spell checker on documents and such
323373 ya me neather untill i decided to do a bit of experamentation. thats sortof how i blew up my xbox last time when i tried to hotwire a computer keybard to it. (by accedent of corse.) had to use oxe clean to get the scorch marks of the carpit. it wasn't my day that day. lol didn't really happin but still i did manige to get the keybard to work for my wii with a usb port in the back( always helpful)
and this is when i say *puts on shades* DEAL WITH IT yeeeaaahhhhh!!! lololo
joking aside, yeah be careful when experimenting. THAT's how i crashed my other computer
323391>>323398 anyway my brother just joined the site and has agreed to help me with the proof reading. while i work on the storybords. Currently in the middle of writing out a rough draft for chapter four in my notepad right now it looks like it might be a long one. but anyway am i the first to do a human baby in equestria fiction or has it been done before. couse right now it looks like i was the first. just something i'm wondering about. but when i get my laptop fixed i will be doing the proof reading myself so right now i'm stuck using my bro.
yup my dear! you are the FIRST to ever bring it up as far as i have read in my travels through the fandom
usually its a guy who falls from the sky or walks out of the everfree and let me tell you, THAT has a surplus of stories and I should know, ive read over 234 of it. most were guys, some had both but surprisingly less had a girl as the unlucky/ lucky human to get into Equestria
YOU my friend may just be on to something, a human raised by a pony kinda like My Little Dashie or MY LITTLE ONE on fanfiction.net. I say, godspeed to ya
you'd think it being a little girl's show, the majority would be little girls or teens
323473 that is just lauren fausts creative writing to the show. she pretty much is a godsend to the seires.
324241 bro i hope your not trying anything (looks at him with a trollface)
324257 maybe
325054 OMG IT'S DUSK STALKER!!! Big fan of your work!
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Thanks.... But its just one story
325106 One story or 100 stories, a fan's a fan. Anyways, good idea of making a DMC crossover.
325483 yes you can use my idia of a human baby in equestria . oh and can youhelp with finding the mistakes in the three chapters. and tips about how to improve my writing would be good to. pm me with yor answer.