In an attempt to recapture a sense of belonging, Prince Lune hires a new assistant. One he, and the other Equestrian alicorns, all may be infatuated with.
My gosh... It's like you ripped this chapter straight out of my life. It is highly accurate, scary accurate, like hit the sharp end of a nail with a pin from the moon accurate. Replace the characters here with me and two people from my life and you basically have our first meeting to the letter. There is one thing that is both innacurate and an oddity. Dusk shine. Such hostility, such irksome emotions, for feathers here; what's up with that? This was good, the story seems great, but I'm a bit on the fence about giving it the thumbs up. It's a difference in quality you see. Usually your stories are grammatically correct to the t, this one not so much. Take it as a compliment though. I won't up-vote this story for, literally, silly mistakes. It means I have stupidly high expectations from you. No I will not lower them.
Yeah it's much different for me to be writing in the past tense, let alone in the first person, so this is quite the venture for me. Let's hope all goes well!
“Yes.” The prince replied casually, as if it was no big deal. “So, can I keep him?” I couldn’t tell if I was demeaned by this behavior or I felt more valuable, but the way that he was treating me like a lost kitten he found was anything if not comical. I played along and widened my eyes, staring up at Dusk Shine in as pathetic a manner as possible, anything as long as he let Lune take me back to Canterlot.
I think I died of shear DAWWWWWWWWWWWWW... and laughter
My gosh... It's like you ripped this chapter straight out of my life. It is highly accurate, scary accurate, like hit the sharp end of a nail with a pin from the moon accurate. Replace the characters here with me and two people from my life and you basically have our first meeting to the letter.
There is one thing that is both innacurate and an oddity. Dusk shine. Such hostility, such irksome emotions, for feathers here; what's up with that?
This was good, the story seems great, but I'm a bit on the fence about giving it the thumbs up. It's a difference in quality you see. Usually your stories are grammatically correct to the t, this one not so much. Take it as a compliment though. I won't up-vote this story for, literally, silly mistakes. It means I have stupidly high expectations from you.
No I will not lower them.
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Yeah it's much different for me to be writing in the past tense, let alone in the first person, so this is quite the venture for me. Let's hope all goes well!
What the heck,a Rule 63 M/M story,huh...I'm keeping my eye on this.
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I apologize in advance for this chapter.
I think I died of shear DAWWWWWWWWWWWWW... and laughter