o snap necromancy! >.><.< the fun has been doubled. i do hope she becomes an ally to nightmare moon. i approve this also finish atfn first then do this one to clear up any missing pieces.
maybe dazzle can use her newgound necronamncy powers to enter a tournament and beat up a roster of fighters including a pretty boy, a couple ninja, and an insane immortal necormancer!
All joking aside this seems interesting, and do i see a bit of a crush between dazzle and orange?
Well, well, well... Peppy, you've done it again. Kudos on the brilliant fic. Sorry it took so long to read, I've had a lot of uni to go through in the past week. Really enjoyed it and looking forward to more. You could run them side by side, then have them merge at some point (ie: Dazzle joins Night's army) and then run it as one fic. That would be pretty interesting. But yeah, just my rambling. Oh and shame on Orange. Exposing herself to a 12y/o. Not legal in a lot of places.
Gah, why do you people keep doing this to me? How am i supposed to be productive in real life if I keep finding more and more fics to read,write, and ramble about!
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This is intresting i think the first person perspective is a nice change of pace here. It really allows us to get into dazzler's head and see the world through her eyes. I'll admit I think that you should do alternating chapters as this story really does seem to add more to the overall world of ATFN.
The Dazzler Blossom relationship looks like it will be intresting to explore. I mean we've been given some intresting hints for example what happed to organge that prompted her to say that dazzler was all she had left, did she and her family have issues about the nature of her cutie mark? How did these too meet and why did they become friends how close do they become over time that made Dazzler hesitent to admit even to herself her true feelings about her oldest friend.
Now we come to the big questions, where did this bassilisk come from, how did it get to dzzler's house and why focus on her to receive it's power rather than the full grown unicorns? Is there a reason that it replaced her horn with a third eye can she see from it if so is it normal vision or some kind of otherworldly sight granted by the powers she has taken on in a moment of anger and weakness?
first-pony-view of a 12 year old? not sure... keep writing
ATFN or ND? the answer is hard. You could compromise and switch between them, but I don't think that would be a good idea. You could make chapters shorter to be able to put out ATFN out as frequently, but you shouldn't do that either. I would want you to update ATFN now and then get ND up to 4 chapters, so we can see in what direction ND is headed. After that you just write what you are more motivated for. Whatever you want, if you have a good go on one of them just write it. Don't feel forced to write for either.
317827 This is technically in the past. Its during the first recruitment phase of Nightmare/Royal Guards.
Now for the other stuff. WHAT?! RUIN IT WITH PEANUT BUTTER!? How can you live with yourself ? She isn't a pervert silly! Or is she? Who knows The basilisks aren't extinct, but there are very few remaining and none of them as powerful as Morla. I can explain the use of the eye, or at least part of it, without any major repurcussions. The basilisks control their magic through the use of their eyes. A pony's eyes were not made for using such magic and would therefore be destroyed should they attempt it if given the ability to do so. Her eyes couldn't be replaced due to basilisks being blind thus making her blind in turn and the basilisk didn't want her eyes as a tribute. Morla wanted an exchange of power and so took her horn and replaced it with an eye that could cast necromantic magic.
Hmm. Great overall, but I think that Blossom's reaction at the end was a little... Unfit? She seemed to just jump to the conclusion of Dee Dee using necromancy, but I think that it would have been better for her to be: 1) More traumatized; 2) less aware of what appears to be an extremely uncommon power. Otherwise, the fear is well placed, as are the hugsies. After all, every little monster needs a hug! And, of course, tracking + thumbs-up (it's just not the same! But it's better than nothing).
326190 She doesn't know what it is exactly. All she saw was the glowing of the stone removing Dee Dee's horn. Replacing it with the eye. Then seeing the same glow possess Dee's parent's. It's an obvious assumption to make that the two coming back to 'life' was caused by Dee Dee.
The title scares and excites me, and I wonder if she'll make an appearance in ATFN. You know, since Nightmare bought that book about basilisks... suspicious...
And I'm glad to see that you're still a sicko who makes foals slaughter other ponies. That's a sign for me that the world is still sound to some degree, without your madness unchained from your mortal body.
ooh, this is interesting. Can't wait to see where this one goes
o snap necromancy! >.><.< the fun has been doubled.
i do hope she becomes an ally to nightmare moon.
i approve this
also finish atfn first then do this one to clear up any missing pieces.
O.o how do you do this....also poor dazzle having three eyes, going to suck if she needs glasses
Damn. Just... Damn. Wow. (other monosyllabic word here)
That was great.
Moar, you magnificent bastard, moar!
306509 Hehe. Those will be some amazing spectacles.
306511 shit maybe?
306340 Well, this fills in some pieces from ATFN such as what goes on outside of the castle and whatnot.
maybe dazzle can use her newgound necronamncy powers to enter a tournament and beat up a roster of fighters including a pretty boy, a couple ninja, and an insane immortal necormancer!
All joking aside this seems interesting, and do i see a bit of a crush between dazzle and orange?
Well, well, well... Peppy, you've done it again.
Kudos on the brilliant fic. Sorry it took so long to read, I've had a lot of uni to go through in the past week. Really enjoyed it and looking forward to more. You could run them side by side, then have them merge at some point (ie: Dazzle joins Night's army) and then run it as one fic. That would be pretty interesting. But yeah, just my rambling. Oh and shame on Orange. Exposing herself to a 12y/o. Not legal in a lot of places.
Anyway, just me muttering thoughts.
Also, Jekyll: BRACKETCEPTION to 8 levels!!
Gah, why do you people keep doing this to me? How am i supposed to be productive in real life if I keep finding more and more fics to read,write, and ramble about!
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This is intresting i think the first person perspective is a nice change of pace here. It really allows us to get into dazzler's head and see the world through her eyes. I'll admit I think that you should do alternating chapters as this story really does seem to add more to the overall world of ATFN.
The Dazzler Blossom relationship looks like it will be intresting to explore. I mean we've been given some intresting hints for example what happed to organge that prompted her to say that dazzler was all she had left, did she and her family have issues about the nature of her cutie mark? How did these too meet and why did they become friends how close do they become over time that made Dazzler hesitent to admit even to herself her true feelings about her oldest friend.
Now we come to the big questions, where did this bassilisk come from, how did it get to dzzler's house and why focus on her to receive it's power rather than the full grown unicorns? Is there a reason that it replaced her horn with a third eye can she see from it if so is it normal vision or some kind of otherworldly sight granted by the powers she has taken on in a moment of anger and weakness?
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gore with your writing style? *approve*
first-pony-view of a 12 year old? not sure...
keep writing
ATFN or ND?
the answer is hard.
You could compromise and switch between them, but I don't think that would be a good idea.
You could make chapters shorter to be able to put out ATFN out as frequently, but you shouldn't do that either.
I would want you to update ATFN now and then get ND up to 4 chapters, so we can see in what direction ND is headed.
After that you just write what you are more motivated for. Whatever you want, if you have a good go on one of them just write it. Don't feel forced to write for either.
317827 This is technically in the past. Its during the first recruitment phase of Nightmare/Royal Guards.
Now for the other stuff. WHAT?! RUIN IT WITH PEANUT BUTTER!? How can you live with yourself ? She isn't a pervert silly! Or is she? Who knows The basilisks aren't extinct, but there are very few remaining and none of them as powerful as Morla. I can explain the use of the eye, or at least part of it, without any major repurcussions. The basilisks control their magic through the use of their eyes. A pony's eyes were not made for using such magic and would therefore be destroyed should they attempt it if given the ability to do so. Her eyes couldn't be replaced due to basilisks being blind thus making her blind in turn and the basilisk didn't want her eyes as a tribute. Morla wanted an exchange of power and so took her horn and replaced it with an eye that could cast necromantic magic.
I say finish ATFN first, going back and forth would kill me.
It's a Rock! -Spock
Hmm. Great overall, but I think that Blossom's reaction at the end was a little... Unfit? She seemed to just jump to the conclusion of Dee Dee using necromancy, but I think that it would have been better for her to be: 1) More traumatized; 2) less aware of what appears to be an extremely uncommon power. Otherwise, the fear is well placed, as are the hugsies. After all, every little monster needs a hug! And, of course, tracking + thumbs-up (it's just not the same! But it's better than nothing).
326190 She doesn't know what it is exactly. All she saw was the glowing of the stone removing Dee Dee's horn. Replacing it with the eye. Then seeing the same glow possess Dee's parent's. It's an obvious assumption to make that the two coming back to 'life' was caused by Dee Dee.
324985 Unintentional Star Trek reference ftw?
OMG hi, Lol i was in yuor blog psot :P
333774 So I noticed. Enjoying it so far?
The title scares and excites me, and I wonder if she'll make an appearance in ATFN. You know, since Nightmare bought that book about basilisks... suspicious...
And I'm glad to see that you're still a sicko who makes foals slaughter other ponies. That's a sign for me that the world is still sound to some degree, without your madness unchained from your mortal body.
343816 Yep :)
So......Is her soul now owned by the dark gods; Khrone? Tzeentch?
.....
Slaanesh?
Wait no, has to Nurgle!