3434270 Done.

Great chapter

I like James and Fluttershy...but damn if I don't want him and Nightmare to be together.

From what I understand, she truly loves him, wants to be with him...and yet denies herself from even telling him. Whether because she doesn't want to interfere with his current relationship, or if it just hurts too much, my respect for Nightmare just went up.

Great re-telling, here's hoping she snogs him someday

3921530 Is it just me, or is this story still set to "Incomplete"?

3921615

Oh, did you hear that?

That's the sound of my hopes going up, hope you don't disappoint...

3921530
Dude. I like the idea, too. Not the snogging, but the pairing.
If something goes wrong, Nightmare SERRIOUSLY needs to be there for him.

if you don't update you're stories soon i'ma find you and i'ma smack you, these are to good to remain unfinished

3922907 Two chapters remain for this one, though I may take a while to finish the fourth. It will contain spoilers otherwise.

That was just beautiful - (you heard nothing) But seriously it really, REALLY is. And I hope to see more of this.

But now I'm curious as to what she dreams of in her sleep? Ah forget, best not to know.

But say, here's a question: Shouldn't James still be in control since it was only in the grey area and not the darkness? Because he was half way of losing it completely.

Though I guess that's just me.

Great chapter by the way!

3924391 What she dream about? Who knows? Maybe we'll find out next time.

But in any case, what did you love most here? I tried my hardest to get everything done just right on this.

>>Humanity Hmm... Let's see here...

Oh yes! It's mostly base around how NM tells her story in this chapter. There's just so much emotions in here, mostly love and all that. I even liked the part where she felt torn apart in between, then coming up to the point where she felt that he betrayed her feelings, broken, if not shattered, her heart. This even confirms that she wanted him to be, not only her lover, but her King, but this also raises the question of: Can she really turn James into an Alicorn? Then again, Tia turned Twi into one.

As for when she gone and - pardon my French - pissed off James to the point where his inner demonic savager tried to kill her. Well isn't that ironic, her appearance and reputation of sort strikes fear into the hearts of ponies, now she's the one who wrought the monster outta him and to be reminded how much destruction humanity can bring upon their enemy when enraged. I know I would, though I guess it's for the best that doesn't happen. Anyway sidetracking, after doing so, her struggle on surviving and desperately trying to cling to life, she finally thought that witnessing this, proven that mankind was still a dangerous threat, can actually bring her back to her home, when all of that of which she's doing is creating more bloodshed. How human is that!

After clearing up and making up with each other, plus waiting for help. She even mentions that Chrysalis was there at the time as well. It's no wonder why she herself wants James too, but also states that Changelings can't be trusted. It also pains me that Moon can't have James since she learned about him and Futters, she's in the same spot as Twi is right now, perhaps maybe a little bit worse. But she'll get over it (maybe not).

Though can I ask: what happens if they try to summon another human? I know it isn't going to happen, it's just something I'm curious about. And if you're not sure I might be able to help, but it could be different than what you would want.

All an all, I loved the whole thing bro.

3922918 i mean this and the lost element need moar, MOAR I TELL YOU, MMMMMMMOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRR

3924552 There will be another human brought in, but not until the sequel.

>>Humanity Ooooh, I wonder who it will be. Well looks like you're all set with the sequel then.

Though I wonder how this other human's gonna take it? Probably end up crashing through a wall.

3926285 Heh, I think she'll be right at home.

>>Humanity Wait, wait back up here a sec!!? Are you actually saying that this new human's a girl!? Holy-- there are so many scenarios that could happen with her in it, not to mention it's sound like a pretty good plot-twister for the series.... MAKE IT HAPPEN!!!!

Say can I PM something to you?

3927533 By all means, go ahead.

3924670 If I may ask, what did you enjoy most from this one? It was a challenge to put in just the right bit of emotion at every part.

3928986 the change in perspective of the characters and the descriptive righting style

Awwwwww, a truley sweet chapter.

If your the author I think you are why haven't you brought the lost element series over yet I'm sure many here would love to read that one!

3958036 Uh... Dude...? I have. Right here.

3922907 Actually, there is only one more left. I would write a fourth, but I am not certain it is a good idea to write the same event twice.

3963210 let me se it and ill se what i can do

3964434 I will when I finish it.

3964652 k

4009727 If I may ask, what did you enjoy most from this one? The second chapter was a challenge for me.

4016265 Uh... Didn't you already leave this on another site? If so, sorry for asking for your opinion twice.

4016437 It's not a good idea to recycle comments. Use it once and leave it at that.

love it