I've finally found a HIE fic that doesn't melt my eyes out with suck. And of course, it's absolutely thrillingly sick and dark and horrifying. Who would have thought that the big nasty aliens that kidnap people and subject them to abject terrors beyond reckoning are pastel-colored magical ponies. There's something outright disturbing about that. And it's also the most unique take on the concept yet, so here you are, sir, a thumbs up and a fav.
Although regarding this chapter... Why didn't the guards first set up a perimeter? A lot of the bastard slavers probably escaped as a result. Sloppy, sloppy... Next time, just kill on sight. Celestia knows they deserve it.
So finally we see a bit more about what happened to break up the human sex cult, hmm. There's a certain satisfaction in seeing not only the royal guard but both princesses there as well. The image of luna eclipsing the sun in the wake of a shattered stained-glass window was very nice. I can still fell the vibration of air from when the bolt of lightning struck down the pegasi. Chaos and crowds is very hard to pull off with any sort of comprehensiveness, so I do tip my hat to you there. That was a very powerful scene.
But onward to Fleur de Lis. It's strange to see someone craft someone so despicable, and yet try to make her seem sympathetic at the same time. Clearly she cannot help herself. Now, whether this is because she's addicted to humans, is a basic nymphomaniac, or some mix of the two, remains to be seen. Or, perhaps that was the end of her story (which it more than likely is), and she'll vanish once more into the underbelly of... I suppose Canterlot, I don't remember if you said specifically, so I just assumed it was Canterlot. Interesting that an illegal human orgy cult was kept there in such close proximity to the Princesses. But, its darkest at the base of the lighthouse, so I suppose there's some form of logic there.
Anyhoo, you really painted Fleur de Lis as a darker... like... Brittany Spears or something. A little too perfect when things are going well in public, and just a little bit sickening when you look beneath the surface. There's something stomach-wrenching about her, especially in the scene where she was with the half-transformed human/pony. Even the mention of her pet "Digits" was a spine-tingling touch, and that only added a bit more depth. Clearly she misses her pet, and was attached to him. Perhaps that's who she imagines when she takes advantage of the other human males. I like to think so. That's a special sort of sick torment, for both participants involved. Though, that does leave me to wonder what happened to "Digits", if he's still out there, etc. If so, did he become a pony? And if so, who? You've been very good about relating just about all the important characters to named characters from the show. Unless of course, all of this madness really does tie back to Lyra... that'd be an Equestria-shattering plot-twist, I think. (then again Fleur's pet was explicitly male, so I dunno what I'm trying to string together here...)
You've got the gift, and your pen marches on through this insanity.. Keep writing, and I'll keep reviewing. Cheers!
294707 Just leave the stragglers to a pony version of the Punisher. Even if Celly isn't willing to put Blueblood's horn in a vice till he talks, Frank Castle would be.
*Reads third chapter* The noose is closing in around this little ring of Caligulas. This is one of those few instants where I would daresay that the death penalty would be warranted.
hmm, im going to track this and see where it goes.
Mother of God.
I've finally found a HIE fic that doesn't melt my eyes out with suck. And of course, it's absolutely thrillingly sick and dark and horrifying. Who would have thought that the big nasty aliens that kidnap people and subject them to abject terrors beyond reckoning are pastel-colored magical ponies. There's something outright disturbing about that. And it's also the most unique take on the concept yet, so here you are, sir, a thumbs up and a fav.
Although regarding this chapter... Why didn't the guards first set up a perimeter? A lot of the bastard slavers probably escaped as a result. Sloppy, sloppy... Next time, just kill on sight. Celestia knows they deserve it.
So finally we see a bit more about what happened to break up the human sex cult, hmm. There's a certain satisfaction in seeing not only the royal guard but both princesses there as well. The image of luna eclipsing the sun in the wake of a shattered stained-glass window was very nice. I can still fell the vibration of air from when the bolt of lightning struck down the pegasi. Chaos and crowds is very hard to pull off with any sort of comprehensiveness, so I do tip my hat to you there. That was a very powerful scene.
But onward to Fleur de Lis. It's strange to see someone craft someone so despicable, and yet try to make her seem sympathetic at the same time. Clearly she cannot help herself. Now, whether this is because she's addicted to humans, is a basic nymphomaniac, or some mix of the two, remains to be seen. Or, perhaps that was the end of her story (which it more than likely is), and she'll vanish once more into the underbelly of... I suppose Canterlot, I don't remember if you said specifically, so I just assumed it was Canterlot. Interesting that an illegal human orgy cult was kept there in such close proximity to the Princesses. But, its darkest at the base of the lighthouse, so I suppose there's some form of logic there.
Anyhoo, you really painted Fleur de Lis as a darker... like... Brittany Spears or something. A little too perfect when things are going well in public, and just a little bit sickening when you look beneath the surface. There's something stomach-wrenching about her, especially in the scene where she was with the half-transformed human/pony. Even the mention of her pet "Digits" was a spine-tingling touch, and that only added a bit more depth. Clearly she misses her pet, and was attached to him. Perhaps that's who she imagines when she takes advantage of the other human males. I like to think so. That's a special sort of sick torment, for both participants involved. Though, that does leave me to wonder what happened to "Digits", if he's still out there, etc. If so, did he become a pony? And if so, who? You've been very good about relating just about all the important characters to named characters from the show. Unless of course, all of this madness really does tie back to Lyra... that'd be an Equestria-shattering plot-twist, I think. (then again Fleur's pet was explicitly male, so I dunno what I'm trying to string together here...)
You've got the gift, and your pen marches on through this insanity.. Keep writing, and I'll keep reviewing. Cheers!
OMG make a sequel about a small group of humans that's are immune to changing!...if that's OK with you
294707
Just leave the stragglers to a pony version of the Punisher. Even if Celly isn't willing to put Blueblood's horn in a vice till he talks, Frank Castle would be.
I am seriously considering an invasion of equestria. With the princess's permission of course.
Did she just... drown herself?
This is horrifying. My heart was beating so hard I could fucking hear it. Well done.
*Reads third chapter*
The noose is closing in around this little ring of Caligulas. This is one of those few instants where I would daresay that the death penalty would be warranted.
530980 Fuck The Punisher, send in this guy...
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