Its interesting to see what a tight web you've woven here. I've not really looked into Lyra and her human habits before, so seeing something so well-crafted as my introduction to the concept is certainly a warm welcome. The bit with Derpy was a little odd, it almost felt like a commercial break, but meh, it was still nice. Also, I do have to stop and comment on the cloppy bits. Its an odd feeling to read something and NOT suspect that the author may have been typing with one hoof down his pants and the other on the keyboard. You made romance, not sex, and that's a rare gift indeed. It takes a certain level of skill to write that way, and you certainly have my respect for it.
The orgy cult was well crafted, and the harliquin masks were a good touch. They were no different than the human equivalent, and it really showed. The darker side of Equestria indeed. Though he wasn't explicitly named I do suspect Mr. White-with-gold-mane was Blueblood. The detail was a little too specific for him to hide behind a mask like that. But, the scene and setting itself did serve a rather chilling function to the story as a whole. When a human female arrives in Equestria she goes directly into a frazzled heat, and the first thing she mates with is what she becomes, as proven by Big Mac and now the manticore. I suspected at first, but one does not make a pattern. Two does, though, especially under such specific circumstances. You really crafted a horror with that scene.
But, back to Lyra and Bon-Bon. Its very interesting to see so much invested in a pair of characters that really have so little meaning in canon, other than to please the fans (especially in the new "Putting Your Hoof Down"). So, I can certainly see the devotion that it takes to not only craft their personalities, but to make us love them as readers. They're a giggly, fickle, and playful pair that are more than just a female-female pairing under your writing pen. It takes a greater show of talent to expose love between characters that we as fans literally have no context to base from. That makes this a real gem to read, and I enjoyed every moment of it.
The only thing going through my head during the orgy scene, was how much I wanted to let loose on those bastards with a flamethrower. It would be most enjoyable.
wow, that just molested my feels </3 moving to the next chapter. it's wonderful, first time reading about there relations. this back story for lyra. i like it. it makes a lot of sense really.
pony with pointy head and flappy things. you sir, are a genius.
Its interesting to see what a tight web you've woven here. I've not really looked into Lyra and her human habits before, so seeing something so well-crafted as my introduction to the concept is certainly a warm welcome. The bit with Derpy was a little odd, it almost felt like a commercial break, but meh, it was still nice. Also, I do have to stop and comment on the cloppy bits. Its an odd feeling to read something and NOT suspect that the author may have been typing with one hoof down his pants and the other on the keyboard. You made romance, not sex, and that's a rare gift indeed. It takes a certain level of skill to write that way, and you certainly have my respect for it.
The orgy cult was well crafted, and the harliquin masks were a good touch. They were no different than the human equivalent, and it really showed. The darker side of Equestria indeed. Though he wasn't explicitly named I do suspect Mr. White-with-gold-mane was Blueblood. The detail was a little too specific for him to hide behind a mask like that. But, the scene and setting itself did serve a rather chilling function to the story as a whole. When a human female arrives in Equestria she goes directly into a frazzled heat, and the first thing she mates with is what she becomes, as proven by Big Mac and now the manticore. I suspected at first, but one does not make a pattern. Two does, though, especially under such specific circumstances. You really crafted a horror with that scene.
But, back to Lyra and Bon-Bon. Its very interesting to see so much invested in a pair of characters that really have so little meaning in canon, other than to please the fans (especially in the new "Putting Your Hoof Down"). So, I can certainly see the devotion that it takes to not only craft their personalities, but to make us love them as readers. They're a giggly, fickle, and playful pair that are more than just a female-female pairing under your writing pen. It takes a greater show of talent to expose love between characters that we as fans literally have no context to base from. That makes this a real gem to read, and I enjoyed every moment of it.
I'll be back soon, but keep writing! Cheers!
And tonight Lyra's role as a hot, sexy, lesbian action hero will be played by Angelina Jolie.
Lyra Croft anyone?
The only thing going through my head during the orgy scene, was how much I wanted to let loose on those bastards with a flamethrower. It would be most enjoyable.
wow, that just molested my feels </3
moving to the next chapter. it's wonderful, first time reading about there relations.
this back story for lyra. i like it. it makes a lot of sense really.