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Spirit's Thoughts

I can't believe that little creep moved in on Thunderlane! How dare she! Guess I will have to drive Thunderlane away from her as well as the others. Sorry, Big Mac. I'm gonna have to use you again. Oh, and then there's the problem of that little unicorn and the earth filly. Lyra and Bon Bon, I think. They are obviously helping her out with Thunderlane. If I get rid of them, their whole relationship might go down in flames without me having to lift a hoof! Although I might want to intervene anyway, just to secure the outcome. Oh, yes. This will be delicious.

Author's Note:

This is a mini chapter, just so you know. And it's from Spirit's point of view, not Dashie's.

Dear friends, I must ask that you please refrain from criticizing in the comments of this story. This used to be allowed until somepony (you know who you are) seriously hurt my feelings with said criticism. (I know that most of you are thinking that I need to toughen up right now, but everything they posted was just a paragraph of "You're doing this wrong!" I asked them to stop and they called me an emotional twit.) Thank you.

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Rainbow87dash

Rainbow87dash #1 · Sep 29th, 2013 · 1 · 2 ·

I've gotta say this, Spirits character is hollow, her backstory has next to no detail, it's just 'I was kidnapped before I was one, I wrote SOS letters even though I didn't know I needed saving, I found dad again!' With no detail given on what happened to her after she was kidnapped, who kidnaped her? Why?
And her motives for trying to ruin Dash's life seem non-existent. The only thing that would make any sense about her character existing would be the whole 'she's a CHANGLING!!!' Approach.

If that was the case, Her reasoning for trying to take up the Mane 6 would make sense, making the elements of Harmony useless. Her trying to archive a romantic partner, would make sense, due to her needing love to survive. Her poor background story and special talent would make sense! Her hollow character would, also, make sense, due to her not actually thinking her excuses through enough.

CutieMarkCrusaders

CutieMarkCrusaders #2 · Sep 29th, 2013 · · 2 ·

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she is not a chnagling and im sorry but when you type it like that, it feels like you are dissing my story. if you actually WAIT FOR TWO SECONDS you will figure out more stuff about her. dont be so darn quick to judge, and please dont post things like that. you kind of hurt my feelings.