Well, that (not?) good. Wonder what's going to happen to Sweetie. Also,
Applebloom fondly towered over her still pint-sized sister, a laviscous eye tracing an easy line over the curve of her younger sister's flank."Y'all are some hot ass now, sis." "Thanks." Applebloom took the compliments in stride, both from Afterparty and her as of yet unnamed sister of the darkness. Applejack, for her part, tossed her mane aside and regarded her new-found comrade evenly.
You're mixing up the sisters a bit here, not sure how this should go. The AB pic link is broken as well, AJ's is fine.
Glad this came back from The Nether. Now, as for a quick review (my eyes might be covered in "Fetish Fuel" glasses, so I might be too into it): - The spacing seems alright, the characters believable, in a alternate timeline kind of way - I enjoyed the descriptions, although a bit to much for some tastes, I am sure - I did get lost somewhere in the middle, as to actual positions the Apple's were in, but that might just be me All in all, a valiant effort, and I am looking forward to more. P.S. I did enjoy that [Female Dog] nickname AJ gave to Rarity. Seems legit, as you say.
Applevine and Plunderbloom sound pretty neat actually. Never would've thought of that myself So... Who's next? Sorry, I just really want to know how Twilight and Fluttershy'll end up in this story. (I have a soft spot in my heart for that ship )
Well, that (not?) good. Wonder what's going to happen to Sweetie. Also,
You're mixing up the sisters a bit here, not sure how this should go. The AB pic link is broken as well, AJ's is fine.
4525300 Yeah, AB's link is broken for me too.
Glad this came back from The Nether.
Now, as for a quick review (my eyes might be covered in "Fetish Fuel" glasses, so I might be too into it):
- The spacing seems alright, the characters believable, in a alternate timeline kind of way
- I enjoyed the descriptions, although a bit to much for some tastes, I am sure
- I did get lost somewhere in the middle, as to actual positions the Apple's were in, but that might just be me
All in all, a valiant effort, and I am looking forward to more.
P.S. I did enjoy that [Female Dog] nickname AJ gave to Rarity. Seems legit, as you say.
YAY!!!!!!!!!!! I'VE BE WAITING SO LONG!!!!!!!!
YES! IT'S BACK BABY!
It's back!!! Hooray!!!
Applevine and Plunderbloom sound pretty neat actually. Never would've thought of that myself
So... Who's next? Sorry, I just really want to know how Twilight and Fluttershy'll end up in this story. (I have a soft spot in my heart for that ship )
For a name for Nightmare Applejack, I'd go with Nightmare Mallus. (A type of apple)
3692009 are the next ones to get corrupted rainbow dash and scootaloo
4525323 The confusion on position is not just you, (shrugs) at this point I just let my imagination fit everything into what's sensible.