Rapture has given Epsilon only one good thing, the very thing that drives him everyday to live in this stinkin' city. His only family, his daughter Applebloom. He'll do anything and everything to protect her.
The spelling and punctuations sure did improve, from what I can see. There is still more room for improvement. To make it easier for the readers, put an extra line in between paragraphs. Sometimes when I stop at the end of a paragraph to do something, and when I get back, I got lost at which paragraph I was reading. I'm starting to get interested in this fiction
You have yet to tell us what kind Subject E is, why? He's obviously not a Rosie or a Bouncer or a Rumbler or a Lancer or a Alpha, but you seem to keep saying different descriptions of him. He has two weapons and Plasmids yet he also has multiple portholes, he seems closest to a Alpha modal and describing him as the ultimate Big Daddy would most likely be a Alpha, but if he's a custom daddy then he should have a longer, and more descriptive, description.
The spelling and punctuations sure did improve, from what I can see. There is still more room for improvement. To make it easier for the readers, put an extra line in between paragraphs. Sometimes when I stop at the end of a paragraph to do something, and when I get back, I got lost at which paragraph I was reading. I'm starting to get interested in this fiction
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I'm going to need a LOOOOOT of whiskey...
You have yet to tell us what kind Subject E is, why? He's obviously not a Rosie or a Bouncer or a Rumbler or a Lancer or a Alpha, but you seem to keep saying different descriptions of him. He has two weapons and Plasmids yet he also has multiple portholes, he seems closest to a Alpha modal and describing him as the ultimate Big Daddy would most likely be a Alpha, but if he's a custom daddy then he should have a longer, and more descriptive, description.