We don't want to live for an eternity, we don't want to fight for an eternity, but we must. It is our calling, our curse. Our path and our duty to fight to protect those that are in need. We have slept for so long, and it is just the last o
7501642 Ah yes, Luna. Although she did a major bad by forcibly breaking into his mind, she did give the power of speaking to them. But by giving him that power she also gave him the means of translating the words as well as speak them. All will be explained in due time.
And what else that caught everyone's attention was the obvious bulge in its trousers, every single mare in the room was staring intently at it and more than a few of us were now confirming that this alien was indeed a he, something that made quite a few fantasies to start forming in our heads. I myself have...well...I may have already started to think about such things but I threw those thoughts aside when I realized that I don't even know anything about this guy! Would he even be interested in a mare like me?
Seriously? Seriously?! That entire paragraph is so out-of-nowhere and cringe it almost made me quit the story then and there.
Also: Tenno don't become able to physically emerge from a Warframe and use their powers at will until after the events of The War Within. The No.5 skill from Second Dream is a non-physical void projection of the Operator's real body for use as a conduit for their undiluted power, not their actual body. Regardless, once the void energy runs out the 'Operator' vanishes completely.
You... you need a proof reader or editor. I'm assuming English is your second language. You need someone to go over every chapter, take out pieces, place in others. This story isn't horrible. But it's very cringey and hard to read sometimes.
Oh good job Luna
That was a fun read, still working on my story. Thanks for being an inspiration for me to stop being lazy.
I'd pop a Roar and a Stomp
sigh luna luna luna every god damn time you assult the strange creatures mind
YES, IVARA
For Hell sakes, Luna, you cunt!
ffs Luna, Dashie and AJ have the same attack dog mentality.
NOO I MUST HAVE MORE
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7501625 Uh...was this directed at my story?
7501633 nope, to the lunar one...
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Attack first, use puppy eyes of regret later.
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7501642 Ah yes, Luna. Although she did a major bad by forcibly breaking into his mind, she did give the power of speaking to them. But by giving him that power she also gave him the means of translating the words as well as speak them. All will be explained in due time.
7501653 so basically, she was just being typical Luna. Act first, and anyone don't like it? Well buck them.
They just broke into his mind. That is a crime the Tenno won't easily forget. If at all.
MOONBITDH GON GET FUCKED
Uh oh.
Seriously? Seriously?! That entire paragraph is so out-of-nowhere and cringe it almost made me quit the story then and there.
Also: Tenno don't become able to physically emerge from a Warframe and use their powers at will until after the events of The War Within. The No.5 skill from Second Dream is a non-physical void projection of the Operator's real body for use as a conduit for their undiluted power, not their actual body. Regardless, once the void energy runs out the 'Operator' vanishes completely.
You... you need a proof reader or editor. I'm assuming English is your second language. You need someone to go over every chapter, take out pieces, place in others. This story isn't horrible. But it's very cringey and hard to read sometimes.