We don't want to live for an eternity, we don't want to fight for an eternity, but we must. It is our calling, our curse. Our path and our duty to fight to protect those that are in need. We have slept for so long, and it is just the last o
Okay, I loved this chapter. Dr. Saw ones was quite the interesting mare and I found it amusing that the mares (all the Mane 6 sans Fluttershy, along with Princess Celestia, liked Viktor's body). The ending with the last medical test was extremely Hillarious. Hope the next chapter comes soon.
I am a mid-core raider that dabbles in botany, leather working and carpentry (I.E. Those secondary classes are LV 60 and I have all but Dark Knight, White Mage, Bard, Paladin, Scholar and the other crafters at LV 60.)
7811190 I am going to pretend that I didn't read any of that right now, what I am doing is Story/Gameplay Separation. In game yes that makes sense but seeing how this is a story the rules can be bent a little bit. I have already played limits on what can and can't be done with the void powers so it won't make him truly overpowered when his not controlling his warframe.
7811190 you do realize sex and romance are tagged righ? Along with gore and so on? And rated M? The only thing that it could use is comedy but that would contradict with the other tags. Its out of place because its meant to be, its shock humor. All this other stuff is going and a big reveal but we're going to focus on his dick. Its just not your sense of humor. I personally find it hilarious.
So far I gotta give this crossover a solid B. As far grammar goes I've seen a few spelling errors but nothing consistent or damning to the story line or flow. You have remained consistent to the lore other than his void abilities. We saw the operator regain his abilities through his little spirit walk during the "War Within" quest. Regained, not gained, so while he had these abilities he couldn't remember how to use them. Your tenno appears to remember more about the past than the official tenno we play. As long as you don't back track saying he's suddenly forgotten about his time in the void but can remember his life before the voyage then this is an acceptable work around.
I liked the introduction to the tenno honor code with the law of retribution and I found the deal with twilight to save luna was interesting and creative. I haven't seen that kind of plot in a good long while.
You still loose a point for using rhino, though I will give you credit for having him use Ivara as well.
7990722 It's not so much hatred just... well take look around you'll see Rhino and Excal fics are literally a dime a dozen. I think we have almost(over?) 30 different warframes not including the primes and apparently people can only think of rhino and excal fics. That's why I gave you a bonus for using Ivara.
7990802 Well He only uses Rhino when it comes to either a first encounter or knows when its heavily defended, otherwise he lets Ordis pick his frame. And also, I just farmed the new Banshee Prime and its sweet shotgun n Helios Prime.
7992493 Lemme tell you, farming the relics sucked, farming the parts sucked more when you run out of said relics, I was only lucky that the mighty RNGesus graced me with his presence and gave me the parts. If I had to run three more missions and not get the helmet blueprint I was gonna throw my keyboard at the wall in anger.
Coming back to this story after playing Warframe really helps with perspective on everything that happens. Also, Valkyr Prime is best warframe in my opinion. What's that? Shields? Who needs those when I have 1500 armor, and a max rage mod. What's that? lvl 100 Corrupted Heavy Gunner? Hysteria and a galatine will fix that!
Okay, I loved this chapter. Dr. Saw ones was quite the interesting mare and I found it amusing that the mares (all the Mane 6 sans Fluttershy, along with Princess Celestia, liked Viktor's body). The ending with the last medical test was extremely Hillarious. Hope the next chapter comes soon.
Dude, Lossing your character sucks. If you happen to be on chaos, Ragnarock hit me up at Sahja'to Zhwan.
And you may have lit a fire under my ass to start writing, especially since the wait within dropped on console.
Oh dear
Considering the difference in technology, I thought he was gonna mention bloodletting at some point.
7802590 If I do hit you up, do I get free shit? Cause last time I played I was the crafting type of person, less of a fighting type
7802747 well that escelated aauickly she hasn't even bought him dinner yet
Looks like things are cumming together...
I'm just surprised this chapter was a bit short in regards to development compared to the first few chaps
7803265 your picture is perfect for this chapter.
7804066 it's perfect for every chapter
Well... If Viktors Rhino dosent kill all the Ponies from Viktors soon to happen Heart Attack, then the next chapter should be pretty amusing.
Now turn your head and cough
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I am a mid-core raider that dabbles in botany, leather working and carpentry (I.E. Those secondary classes are LV 60 and I have all but Dark Knight, White Mage, Bard, Paladin, Scholar and the other crafters at LV 60.)
Dragoon for life!
7811190 I am going to pretend that I didn't read any of that right now, what I am doing is Story/Gameplay Separation. In game yes that makes sense but seeing how this is a story the rules can be bent a little bit. I have already played limits on what can and can't be done with the void powers so it won't make him truly overpowered when his not controlling his warframe.
So you play Heavensward? My name is Kenshi Takamura of Hyperion, and I am a Black Mage. Pleasure to meet you.
Why is it that as soon as they Said
"Semen"
And he said ".,.What?"
I Had the undeniable urge to say... "Oh Shit".... and it echo in my mind... Thank you so much VINE
7811190 you do realize sex and romance are tagged righ? Along with gore and so on? And rated M? The only thing that it could use is comedy but that would contradict with the other tags. Its out of place because its meant to be, its shock humor. All this other stuff is going and a big reveal but we're going to focus on his dick. Its just not your sense of humor. I personally find it hilarious.
So far I gotta give this crossover a solid B. As far grammar goes I've seen a few spelling errors but nothing consistent or damning to the story line or flow. You have remained consistent to the lore other than his void abilities. We saw the operator regain his abilities through his little spirit walk during the "War Within" quest. Regained, not gained, so while he had these abilities he couldn't remember how to use them. Your tenno appears to remember more about the past than the official tenno we play. As long as you don't back track saying he's suddenly forgotten about his time in the void but can remember his life before the voyage then this is an acceptable work around.
I liked the introduction to the tenno honor code with the law of retribution and I found the deal with twilight to save luna was interesting and creative. I haven't seen that kind of plot in a good long while.
You still loose a point for using rhino, though I will give you credit for having him use Ivara as well.
7989086 7989003 7987825 I just gotta ask, why the hatred for the Rhino? I main that guy.
7990722 It's not so much hatred just... well take look around you'll see Rhino and Excal fics are literally a dime a dozen. I think we have almost(over?) 30 different warframes not including the primes and apparently people can only think of rhino and excal fics. That's why I gave you a bonus for using Ivara.
7990802 Well He only uses Rhino when it comes to either a first encounter or knows when its heavily defended, otherwise he lets Ordis pick his frame. And also, I just farmed the new Banshee Prime and its sweet shotgun n Helios Prime.
7992204 Nice! I haven't gotten it yet T_T
7992493 Lemme tell you, farming the relics sucked, farming the parts sucked more when you run out of said relics, I was only lucky that the mighty RNGesus graced me with his presence and gave me the parts. If I had to run three more missions and not get the helmet blueprint I was gonna throw my keyboard at the wall in anger.
7992723 Oh it's not the first prime i've farmed for.
Coming back to this story after playing Warframe really helps with perspective on everything that happens. Also, Valkyr Prime is best warframe in my opinion. What's that? Shields? Who needs those when I have 1500 armor, and a max rage mod. What's that? lvl 100 Corrupted Heavy Gunner? Hysteria and a galatine will fix that!
*ROUGH COUGHING* ... Well Boy, your about to lose that virginity of yours
what the fuck