Scootaloo had volunteered to be hypnotized first to test the hypnosis kit. Since Sweetie Belle had read the instructions, she was chosen to do the hypnotizing, while Applebloom would supervise. Sweetie asked Scootaloo to make herself as comfortable as possible. Picking up the pocket-watch, Sweetie began to swing it slowly back and forth, instantly, the pocket-watches' swirly designs began to rotate.
As if by magic, Scootaloo found she couldn't look away from the watch, her eyes following its every move.
"Ok, Scootaloo, I am going to count backwards from ten, with every number I want you to relax. By the time I count to one, you will fall into a deep sleep, do you understand?" Sweetie instructed.
"Yes." Scootaloo nodded, never looking away from the pocket-watch.
"Ten...." Scootaloo visibly relaxed her entire body.
"Nine....."
"Eight...." Scootaloo's wings drooped, and she began to feel sleepy.
"Seven....."
"Six....." Her eyelids began to feel heavy.
"Five....."
"Four....."
"Three....."
"Two...."
".....One..." Instantly, Scootaloo fell to the floor, out cold.
Sweetie and Applebloom looked at each other, grinning. For a few minutes, Sweetie was unsure what to use as a command. It was only when Applebloom suggested something she remembered from when they were trying to find Fluttershy's lost chicken in the Everfree Forest, that they knew what to do.
"Scootaloo....I want you to listen very carefully to what I'm going to tell you, and whatever it is, you must do it, understand?" Sweetie asked.
"......yes......" Scootaloo said, still asleep.
"Very good. Now, whenever you hear the word "feather" I want you to cluck like a chicken, ok?" Sweetie commanded.
".....yes...."
"By the time I count to five, you will wake from your trance, and you will not remember what you were told."
"One."
"Two."
"Three."
"Four."
"Five." Scootaloo woke up, got back to her haunches, and yawned.
"So, did it work? asked Scootaloo.
"Yea! Ya fell asleep an' everythin', just like the instructions said!" Applebloom excitedly exclaimed. Sweetie Belle nodded, noting that everything went perfectly, but they needed to test one more thing.
"What? Didn't you just say it went perfectly?" Scootaloo asked. Both fillies exchanged mischevious glances. Applebloom looked back at the confused orange pegasus, smirking, and said, "Feather."
"Cluck!...." Scootaloo clucked like a chicken, then looked around very confused.
Both Applebloom and Sweetie Belle were on the floor of the treehouse, laughing. They knew it worked, now they had to choose new targets......And what better a place, then Ponyville?
Welcome back after the long hiatus. Looking forward to how this turns out. LoL probably the last few ponies you'd want to have hypnosis abilities. Well then again I'd trust Applebloom and Sweetie Belle over Scootaloo.
In detail? That was as barebones as an induction gets. You're a step away from just wiggling a shiny coin in front of them for a second and suddenly they're hypnotized.
Let's hope they don't hypnotized Spike into being the girls' lover.
I would have to agree with Arzoo. That wasn't a detailed induction at all, in my opinion. I would suggest making it a little more comprehensive, and a little more detailed than that. I'd be inclined to read more, but the idea of even more basic inductions than that really puts me off.
That said, it is your story! Write it however you like. This is just some thoughts from a person with a strong love for hypnotism as a fetish.
Pretty lacking in terms of detail; although I'll happily admit it's rare we get a cute story like this. ^^
Let's hope Trixie ordered C.O.D.
And oh dear, she's going to get blamed for this, isn't she? Or at least get roped into helping fix the inevitable disaster. Or hypnotized. Or several of the above.
Fun story, a bit sparse in description, chapters rather short.
Sweetie Belle gets her big sis as the next test subject, Scoots looked at Sweetie "That's gross, Twilights not going to like it"
Bloom giggles "Bet it'll be as sweet an apple fritter" She rolls her eyes" And one big surprize ta boot!"
Scoots "I don't think it'll be much of a surprize to the rest of ponyville" Scoots stuffs a hoof in her mouth"Gag me It's still gross"
Later at the Boutique the bell rings as AJ rolls throught the door "Hi ya sugarcube I need...."
Rarity stares out into space"Oh,Excuse me Apple Jack I must be going dear, I have urgent business at the Library & I'm a bit late, Ta Ta"
AJ followed her from behind , She watched as Rarity trotted in a bee line straight to the Library And knocked on the door.
Before the door opened she announced "Twilight dear can I come in?" As Rarity fidgited like a filly needing to go to the little mares room
Spike opened the door "WhatSup ?... Rarity!" She looked at the Drake "SPIKEY POO"
Rarity grabbed Spike by the chubby wubby cheeks and gave him a big long kiss right on the lips, Spikes eyes burst into hearts as he wraped his claws around the marsh mellow neck and kissed her back. AJ smiled "Hold on ta her tight loverboy"
Twilight Screamed "Rarity! " "What's going on here!" 'SPIKE stop that right now" Raritys eyes blinked "Spike... SPIKEY?"
They parted lips ,Spike with a big giant smile, "Spikey I demand an answer!"Rarity boomed "And I want it right now!"
Spike in shock answered "But you started it? If you didn't like it why did you..." Spikes eyes showin a bit of wetmess.
AJ continued Yepper, You two were goin at it like a pair of love sick cat fish!" JA beamed" An don't say you two didn't like what cha did neither"
Rarity stuttered "Well I ...I...I a lady never kiss and tells" Twilight looked on "Tell? You two need a private room, Now what's going on here!"
Sweetie came into view "What's going on here?" They all looked at each other in confusion , Spike just slumped his sholders and turned to leave.
Rarity reached a hoof out stoping him.Nuzzling his cheek she whispered in his ear "Spikey dear I don't know what's going on. But you are MY Spikey poo & you kissed your lady as fine as any stalion in those romantic love novels" Rarity spoke up to the rest "Now what the hay is going on here?"
Lots of material to go with , Write on!
This is a cute little story. It deserved to have an UP vote. So I gave it one.
This may not any accurate when it comes to hypnoses but it was still fun to read and I am sure there is still a lot of fun to come with those three.
Thanks for taking the time to write this piece.
So, basically every pony in Ponyville other than Twilight is a potential
victimsubject?I look forward to see what they do to DT & SS.
Good start, needs a bit more detail but it has a very promising setup
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5004820 Do you guys have any suggestions on how to make the induction better in terms of detail? I suppose I was under the impression thats basically how it worked, being a fan of the entire concept of hypnosis. I do appreciate the criticism and feedback!
5005959 Yeah, I know thats not how it really works, I just thought it would make the list of potential subjects/victims more open. And yes, I do plan on putting them in the story.....for some payback that will have the CMC laughing instead! so keep an eye out!
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It's sort of an art form; there's no one way to do fictional hypnosis. Can't recommend much beyond reading other hypno material. Read up on the different sorts of inductions/props, like candles, the balloon visualization, etc. Check out actual hypnosis scripts.
The countdown is only one (very common) technique, but even fantasy hypnosis generally needs a few more steps to be believable. A calming/relaxing step often comes first, and there's usually some deepening after they're in trance.
Also, be sure you know what you want to write; generally people like hypnosis fiction for fetish reasons, and that's the direction my advice is coming from.
Check out Rainbow Dash discovers erotic mind control, or whatever its called (in the hypno group). It's an excellent example of hypnosis that is abbreviated but good enough to suspend disbelief, though I should warn you it does have clop elements.