Discoveries and a faint
Welcome again, readers, (and writers), to "Pony Terrestrial". Arc here. Let's not disappoint you, shall we? (Or…so I hope (nervous chuckle)). Without further ado I give you thy next chapter!
You know the drill. I OWN NOTHING! Except this fic
Chapter 2: Discoveries and a faint
'OH my GOD! Did I just say that?! What was I thinking?! And did I just say everypony? Oh god' To say my mind went Pinkie for a second, would be an understatement…wait, nothing goes over that level… (Sigh). Everyone was looking at me like a madman, except Fluttershy who just hid herself behind Twilight and Pinkie who just smiled. If somebody explodes from cuteness overload, please, don't be me. I know I can resist!
"Oh…I…hehe. Sorry, I went stupid for a second. A-A-anyway, what do you want to know to know first?" I managed to stutter after a few moments.
Twilight was the first to react. "O-Okay. Who and what are you?" she asked with a tad of nervousness in her voice.
"As I already explained to Princess Celestia, my name is Arcanel and I am a human." I explained.
At this everyone jumped a little. "How do you know the Princess' name? Or even that she IS a princess?" Twilight asked, raising her voice a bit.
Now I could have been more careful with my words, but we were going to go through with this anytime so…no time like the present, right?
"Well…" I started, a bit nervous with how to go on with the subject at hand. "Our race…pretty much knows everything about you…because we think we created you." I finished, bracing myself for the incoming rage.
"WHAT?!" everyone hollered. Even Fluttershy….Oh my god, if you thought she was scary when mad in the show, in live, she scares more than Freddy Krueger, Shao Kahn, AND Nemesis…PUT TOGETHER! (Forever an epitome of cuteness overload and super scariness when she wants it...that's what Fluttershy is XD)
Hell even Celestia AND Pinkie were mad…I didn't know that was possible…dear god protect me…oh, wait. He left us to our faith to do what WE wanted to do…Yep, I'm screwed if I leave that to the power I believe in.
"WHAT DO YOU MEAN, YOU INSOLENT HUMAN!?" Princess Luna said, in her royal Canterlot voice, and ouch my ears and my mind were hit…HARD.
"How could you say such blasphemy and fallacy?" Princess Celestia said in an angry AND disappointed tone. Believe me. That voice goes over that of your parents; it makes you feel VERY bad.
Everybody started saying a lot of stuff in angry voices, and I don't blame them. I can't! If after all that happened to you and your world, suddenly someone tells you that you were created, I would be pissed beyond belief too. Thing is, it was starting to put me very nervous and making me feel small, scared and bad, like a kid when you are punished or sermoned really bad by your parents. And I don't handle pressure too well. Finally, I broke down.
"I'M SORRY! WE HUMANS TRULY BELIEVE THAT YOU DIDN'T EXIST AND WERE A FIGMENT OF OUR IMAGINATION! THE FACT THAT YOU ARE HERE IS PROOF THAT THE SUPPOSED "CREATOR" LIED TO US AND I'M TERRIBLY SORRY FOR THAT OUTRAGEUS STATEMENT, BUT I REALLY DIDN'T KNOW! I BEG FOR YOUR FORGIVENESS!" I cried and shouted getting myself on my knees. (Hey, you would panic too if you were in his position against 10 magical beings ready to kick your flank any minute).
After that, I laid down rocking back and forth. I looked to see what they were doing, since I was expecting to get kicked ANY second, but everyone seemed startled by my sudden reaction…what?
Then, after a few seconds, that REALLY felt like hours, somebody spoke.
"Do not worry; we will not hurt you. Though I do believe you need to further explain yourself to us." The sun ruler said in a firm yet compassionate voice.
I stopped crying and looked at her and silently thanked that she is who she is.
"We ought to give you a chance to explain yourself further, however be VERY careful with your words. What you said before is intolerable." Luna said still in a royal tone but less loud.
Thank god, otherwise I would have gone deaf, and probably wet myself. Call me a wuss, but I'm NOT a badass guy who is afraid of nothing at all. And having a voice that is superior in many decibels to probably a plane AND being angry with it is NOT something I want to experience.
"Try to be as detailed as possible." Twilight continued.
Okay, so she is herself. Studious as ever. No prob.
"Watch EACH and EVERY one of your words." Rarity warned me in a firm voice.
Well, a warning from the master of the details, only in her words it sounds a bit more…menacing than Luna. I love her, but man, Rarity CAN be scary.
"Cause if ya' don't, y'all will be VERY bucked.""And in a lot of PAIN." Applejack and Rainbow Dash threatened.
OOOkayyyyyyy. Heartfelt threats. It could be a lot worse. I think…mommy!
"Just don't say anything like that again…I mean, if you can." Fluttershy said, returning to her quiet, timid self.
Phew, she is back. So is the impulse control to go and hug the life out of her. SO...CUTE!
"Don't worry if you can't now. You can always try again!" Pinkie said, going back to her bubbly voice.
Awwww, thanks Pinkie. Seriously though, if she weren't so random and great, even THEN she would still be Pinkie Pie. And I thank her for that.
"Pull yourself together. Don't wanna make these ladies angry." Spike said with a smug voice.
Gee, thanks Spike. That is sooooo reassuring. I mean it's cool, but mean. I still like you a FREAKING LOT!
After listening to their words, I was thoroughly relieved. Hell, I had stopped crying and was up on my feet again. I was not totally OK but I felt better. I think I still got this. I think…
"Ahhh….thank you so much." I said, bowing my head. "You have no idea how good that makes me feel, even if some are heartfelt threats, at least I now know NOT to say something like that again, unless it is explaining beliefs." I finished, silently thanking both god and Celestia.
"Very well, please excuse me for a second." I said quietly, but in a much calmer.
Then I did what many people would do in a situation like this, or so I think. I finished calming myself down, went to my kitchen, opened the fridge, grabbed a bottle of orange juice, poured myself a glass, downed it in one big gulp, left the glass on the table…and passed out.
Well, that is that! A thing I should clarify, is that there WILL be POV changes in the story (like the one that will happen next chapter), so just to get you a heads up on that. You'll see why soon enough. Anyways here's the catchphrase: Tell me everything you need to say, R&R, haters ignored, flamers abhorred, etc. Arc out.
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226174 Your welcome.
Yay! Long story.
Now that that is done, I have noticed that there is a new chapter, so off I go to read it. I may comment after I read it, I may not. We shall see soon enough.
"...and passed out."
I'm sorry to read that you have a hard time believing in God. Why should I be mad about what you believe though? You have the right to believe in what you believe in.
If I were in this position (and I was able to think clearly enough to think it) I'd probably go get my laptop, go to youtube, and show them an episode or several, pointing out names in the credits. I then may go to the webpages/facebook profiles/etc. of some of those people and show the ponies, zebra, and dragon those pages too. There is a good chance that I would also show them my Applejack toy, and maybe even my two Brony shirts for extra emphasis to prove that I'm not just spying on there lives, but that the world really does know of them. I might show them some fanfictions/comics, but I would be VERY careful about those. The same goes for other pictures. I may even show them General Zoe's Pony Creator on Deviant Art. I'd also probably introduce them to some fan-music, still being careful of which songs I expose them to. Things could get VERY awkward... even WITHOUT a lot of the NSFW stuff, clean shippings, and fan interpretations of various characters and their mannerisms. Another thing that I'd probably do would be to point out parallels between our two worlds. Things such as the pop-culture references. Hm, I wonder how they would react to/how angry they would be about the whole, we-Bronies-are-the-reason-why-Derpy's-eyes-went-back-to-being-derpy-and-stayed-that-way thing.
Anyway, great story, I think that I will give it a Thumbs-up (Is it just me, or should the hands and thumbs be a hoof pointing up and a hoof pointing down?), and I am looking forward to more of the story.
228234 THANK YOU!!!. And yeah I know but I clarify because I feel bad if I don't, plus, let's be truthful. A lot people who read this kind of stuff do get insulted so..just in case.
nah, seriously I will show them that...but it is not my main concern, oh no. I will show them the world (and my house). I also have other characters to be in different places, or rather...DIFFERENT COUNTRIES. And if you read my recent edit, I'll bring in...LAUREN FAUST
. I have a lot planificated for this, and with new episodes around in the real life, I can get more. This may seem difficult to do, but I'll give it a shot. That being said. thank you for the support and I hope not to disappoint you *bows* my faithful reader
. And yes you're right, they should be a hoof up-hoof down, (though I think it may have something to do with not being able to clearly show up and down
)
As for your ideas...DUDE don't tell them the fic
Also I again aplogize for the long, thoughtful, no-action stuff but it is how I write. Since this are the introductions there isn't much happening now, so I know it can become...tedious. But since a lot WILL happen later, so please bear with me. Also expect a LOT of change of POVs, since there will be different places, different ponies, different people. In other words PAY ATTENTION!
Nah I'm kidding, pay as much attention as you need. Remember ideas are power, so give please
Anyways I think that is all. Comment whatever you feel complled to do so, I will read and see if it needs to be replied and will do so as best as I can. Ok, rant over
Oh, and I forgot when I typed up my last comment, but the plural for of "pegasus" is "pegasi". It's not a big deal, and I've seen the same mistake made in other fics, but I thought that I'd mention it anyway.
228345 Amen to that brony. Amen to that. And thanks for the tip. Yeah I know, but let's be honest, I'm not from an English speaking country, this is my first fic, and I tend to overthink things. A LOT. You'd be nervous too
. That and my self-esteem isn't exactly high
. But oh well. I'll do my best. Also the fact that i've known the new show ever since 5 months ago, and I just watch the show, nothing else, (one of the few things letting my curiosity win was worth
) Anyways enough putting myself down
. There's writing to be done!!!!
228986 Again, you're welcome. If it helps, I couldn't tell that you weren't from an English speaking country. I have a tendency to overthink things a lot too. That and get fixated on the fine details. I'm good with fine details. I find that I second-guess myself a lot too. I joined the Herd over the Summer. There's the spirit!
229799 Ahh...MY DREAM HAS COME TRUE!!.
Allow me to explain. I always wanted to see if I could fool someone into thinking that I AM from an English speaking country...when I'm not
By the way check my profile, I put there where I'm from and a bit more stuff too. I'm an OPEN BOOK
Nah I'm from Argentina. You wouldn't believe how unknown MLP is there now. I remember 10 years ago in the TV there was not 5 minutes without an MLP propaganda... now I think 99% of the population doesn't know there's a new MLP
OH well, Lo expandire como pueda gente, yes sir!!!
Also...WHERE WERE YOU WHEN I NEEDED A BROTHER!? you're a bit like me, glad I know you.Now if you'll excuse me i'll finish writing chapter 3
230150
Well then congratulations!
) Glad to know you too. You do that.
Where was I? I was in Massachusetts, U.S.A.. (You know, unless I was out of state, in which case I wasn't there.
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...Can I PWEASE go all GRAMMER NAZI all over this chapter again?
...
...Well, whatever, I'm gonna do it anyways, whether you like it or not.
First of all, I do believe that the ponies have somewhat overreacted to Arcanel's proclamations. I mean, I can kinda see them being a little bit confused as two why humans consider them as imaginary objects, but that doesn't mean that they should get their panties twisted in a bundle! Especially considering that every spoken word has a fair amount of logic behind it, I think that Celestia and Luna would be wise enough to hear the humans reasons at to why he considers them a product of the MLP show. In fact, I think that even Twilight and Rarity would be smart enough to figure that out! I feel like that you forced out an unnecessary emotional moment for all the characters. I can see what you were trying to drive the reader towards, but there's a time and place for everything, and placing a major emotional toll on the reader during the second chapter isn't a good time.
Otherwise, keep up the good ideas and work!
231264 Well, don't worry. Attack me with all you HAVE!!
Yeah I know I may have put overreactions, but I thought it this way. Suppose your Celestia. Having lived through A LOT of stuff over your life. You are also one of the calm and comprehensive ponies out there. Suddenly you get thrown to a completely unknown world, (you'll know how in the next chapter), you meet an alien who not only tells you about you supposing to be non-existant but later he tells you that his race thinks they created YOU. After all you went through and being protective over the ponies you have watched over for an unholy amount of years, even someone like you would still be a little pissed off at that kind of statement. For the rest goes different reasons but same ending. Yes they too are inteligent enough, but they also don't like somebody you don't even know WHAT it is to tell you that everything you've done is a figment of their imagination, nuh-uh not a chance (okay so maybe Pinkie wouldn't get hit by that much but supposing that would mean somebody is supposedly telling her to do a party every 3 seconds, yeah I think she'd be mad too).
As for your other comment in the previous chapter.
(talking to yourself a lot does that to you)
and my characters will be described on the way.
).
Yeah I know I am from Argentina, but I like speaking in other languages as much as I can, (I DON'T hate Spanish, hell no, but I simply like other languages too), and I sometimes speak more English than Spanish in my own house in the DAY
Well I will try to get as much variety of words as possibleI have tried but it isn't exactly easy not to repeat said over and over again.
Don't worry about descriptions and my own character. I will describe my house soon enough (wanted to make it something like a mystery or something
As for the stuff in parenthesis, that is not Arcanel's thoughts, but they are stuff I write to break the mood, or just say something funny. I WILL put any character's thoughts between apostrophies and in Italics. But there shouldn't be much. After all, if you can see my writing style, i can be very descriptive of the thoughts of who I'm writing WITHOUT putting it into a true thought.
And as for the thing of the discoveries, well... Arcanel is intelligent enough to know not to go OMFG at this sight mainly because, he (and with him, I) has thought of something like this happening. Besides if the first pony you meet is Princess Celestia, you can tend to get more calm at the sight of her (you know, with that angelic look and all
And I think that is all. Okay with rant over. THANK YOU! I really like your comments and insights of my story and also thaks for the praise. I am really nervous about this so hearing what you are saying, HELL YES it's gratifying. Please do keep up on this kind of stuff. I'll hear ALL you have to say.
i hate story of pony on earth where the characther has no personality at all