Pinkypie

Okay, this was funny at first but now it's just annoying. It's spelled Pinkie Pie, or just plain Pinkie.

I like the idea of this story but there is just some characterization which bugs me a little. From what we have seen of him Clockwork is calm, cool, and formal with his speech. He acts this way because he knows things others do not, so apart from occasional anger or small amounts of sympathy I have a hard time seeing him being too expressive. Danny also seems a little off, despite him being in high school he never really seems to be the kind to swear. it might just be the show but to me it's because he has had a decent upbringing from his parents. Other than that my only other issue is how matter-of-fact Clockwork presents information to Danny, he has been disconnected from his time powers so it's a little odd for him to use specifics such as an exact number of days or month. All in all not a bad idea, I'll follow to see how this turns out.

"I don't trust them. For all we no they could be the enemy!" Rainbowdash said accusingly. They didn't seem right to her and she was determined to find out why. That Danny kid seemed kind of off to her.

I think that you mean know.

You seem to have misspelled three particular titles: Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie, and Ponyville. Those are the correct spellings.

2748858 Me thinks I can help you with that. Though this is my opinion, I think it works.

Okay, so with Clockwork: we only see him in 2 episodes in the entire series. Because of that, we don't really know anything about him. Therefore, that leaves us fans some creative liberties when writing his character. Yes he is seen as calm, cool, and collected. And yes, he addresses the person he talks to in a formal manner. But that is all we know. And Danny is his charge. It makes sense that he would want to protect him.

With Danny: The way I see it, Danny has been through hell and back. Multiple times. But right now, he is dealing with a utterly whacked out and weird situation. He's never dealt with something like this. I'd imagine even a swearaphobe would end up swearing at this.

For the last bit: The author did mention that Clockwork still has some connection to his time related powers. Is a small one, but still there. I figure that the connection lets him see some things. Small, menial things, but some things nonetheless.

I hope that this helped. It is just my take on it, but I think that explains things reasonably well. But, that's just me. Random moustache! Muhahahahaha!

Dear Wizardalexmix,

The pony's names are spelled Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash

Sincerely,
Golden Light

Twilight and her friend's stood at the entrants

entrance
Pinkie Pie (Pinkamena Diana Pie)
Ponyville

I like to find stories after they're finished so that I don't have to wait for the next chapter.