Part of a Bad Introduction?
“Sometimes, you just believe in things that they are not real”
The Everfree Forest. A dark and mysterious place where unknown creatures live and fight to the death, where the weather moves by itself with no control whatsoever. Where the rules of nature comes to play and also the food chain is in play as well no matter what kind of species you are. Where the stronger live longer than the weaker.
A yellow pegasus run through the thick forest with fast and unmatched velocity with both of her wings injured and with no luck at all. What has caused this timid pegasus named Fluttershy to run you ask? Well, a pack of timberwolves have decided to target the pony as their next meal. The wolves were getting tired of their prey escaping all their furious attacks. She has done the impossible, that other preys have never done, by dodging their attacks in such a stupid ways. They were getting more and more hungry and frustrated by the second. They knew that she was getting tired from all the running and the dodging that she has been doing since the beginning of the chase and it was only a matter of time until her body crashes from exhaustion.
Fluttershy felt her whole body screaming in pain from a sudden change of events. Who would have expected that her tea party with her animal friend would become a “Run for your Life” party?
“Why did my friend, the bear, need to leave so early?! He could easily scare those mean timberwolves with a roar before they attack!” She thought while dodging branches.
There it was again, her body was screaming in pain. Her lung were burning and in need of more air. Her legs were begging to stop and rest since; her legs have never experience such a run for. Her wings were swallowed from a wolf pushing her into a dead tree trunk in the beginning of the chase. The timber wolves knew that pegasus were nothing without their wings.
“Note to self; never give to carnivores the weak points of other animals.”
She noticed that the wolves were gaining on her. The wolves also noticed the disadvantage of the distance between them. It was time to eat. For her not so much of luck, she tripped, thanks to the outgrow roots of a tree. She rolled and hit the trunk of a tree in front of her. She knew that this was the end and there was no escape from it.
Her eyes were filling with tears. Remembering all those good time with her animal friends and especially her pony friends in a flash.
Twilight Sparkle, the book worm...haha... and my most knowledgeable friend that taught me a lot of stuff. She taught me things from the simple knowledge of life, to the whole meaning of the universe. Rarity, the fashion designer diva; always invited me to her spa dates and was always willing to hear me out and help me out. Applejack, the farmer pony who was a very strong mare, a dependable and helpful friend that taught me how to defend and talk back to ponies. Pinkie Pie, the happy pony that is the most excited and enthusiastic pony that she has ever met. Always cheering me up when I'm sad and always invaded me to her Pinkies Pie Parties. And last and not least; Rainbow Dash, my dearest and best friend in all Equestria. The first friend that I ever had in my fillies’ days. The most loyal pony in all Equestria and the only one who I can trust my life with. She tough with small sobs and tear coming out of her.
The timberwolves knew that all the hope was gone from her and the deed was going to be payed in full.
“Please somepony, something, help me...” The unfortunate pony whispered to herself.
The wolves charge at her full force. There was nothing for the poor mare now. No help would come. No time to waste. No hope for Fluttershy.
“WHO IS IT, WHO IS THERE?” an Old, yet cranky, voice screamed in all directions.
“WHO IS BOTHERING ME IN MY PEACEFUL SLEEP AND HIT ME!!” the voice scream in anger.
The wolves were afraid of the sound of the voice that screams in all directions. They could not see it; and what you can't see is what you should fear the most. The wolves didn't have a second thought of staying and tearing apart their prey and feast on it. They would leave her and use her as bait for the invisible monster to devour her while they flee. And just like that, they were gone from sight.
Fluttershy saw the wolves flee in fear that the worst that was yet to come. She hoped that the voice wasn't a monstrous fiend and instead was just a peaceful creature mad for being awake just like Rarity.
“WHO IS THERE!?” The monster called again but with more anger on the tone of his voice.
“Fluttershy” the poor scared pony whispered while hiding under her hooves.
“I am sorry, I can’t hear you. Can you speak a little louder?” the voice demanded but lower his tone of anger on its voice.
“Fluttershy” the pony spoke out and trying to see where the monster was.
“One more time” the monster said getting desperate.
Fluttershy gulp at the voice tone and try to said it a little bit louder but she was getting scared every second that pass by and whisper “Fluttershy” to herself but was loud enough for the voice to hear it.
“LOUDER!!!” the voice spoke in all directions.
Fluttershy took big a breath and scream with all her might just the way Rainbow dash taught her to do so.
“FLUTTERSHY!!!” the small yellow mare shout that made some leaves to fall to the ground.
“WOW!” the voice reply impressed by the little creature outburst. ”I don't want you to leave me deaf! I am... We are already having problems by not being able to move around and not knowing where we are and you want me to be deaf too. Jesus!!!” The voice reply with an happy tone.
“Sorry” the timid mare replied while shirking.
“Well I did tell you to be a little bit louder” said the voice with a chuckle “so therefore is not your fault” the voice replied in a calm manner “and beside that´s a beautiful voice you got there.”
Fluttershy notice that the big mean voice was not that mean at all..or a monster. But she wasn't sure. Applejack always told her not to trust ponies...or creatures that fast because they might take advantage of her kind being.
“Thank you for the compliment but where are you? I can hear you but I can't see you” the mare said while looking at her surroundings to only find trees surrounding her.
“I am right in front of you!” the voice reply.
“Where...exactly? All I see are trees and branches” the mare said and try to hide behind her pink hair and hope that the voice wouldn't get mad at her for it to be wrong.
“Really?” was the only thing the voice said.
***
There was a long awkward silence that felt like it lasted for hours. Fluttershy thought that the voice was gone and left her in the dark forest knowing that she was injured. Now who will help this poor mare?
Out of nowhere the voice burst out a “HEY!!!” followed by a “Are you still here!!!?”
Fluttershy felt her poor heart skip a beat thanks to the voice out of none where sudden appearance (even taught she cant see it...Fuck you...you know what I mean).
“Where did you go?” Fluttershy ask and hope that he would put her at ease with his answered.
“Everywhere so I could guide you where I am now” The voice answered.
“What do you mean by that?” ask Fluttershy shifting uneasy by knowing that it was every where “Are you an Alicorn?” She asks the voice and hope that he was one
“I don’t know what the hell that is but just do what I say and you will find me fast before those creatures return and finish you off!” the voice commanded.
“I don’t know...What if this is a trap?” the mare asked with suspicion and whispered the last words.
“Then next time you ask for help, don't ask for it, if you won’t goanna trust the guy that is saving your sorry ass from your dead” the voice answered her in a pissed way.
Thank God, that Fluttershy did know what being pissed meant. She knew that the voice, which she decided was a old stallion by his cranky voice and for his use of bad language, but he was right about not trusting the pony that saved her plo... her life. She decided that it was better to follow the instructions that the stallion. Besides, it is better than being alone in the dark forest with nopony around and just sitting there like a free meal.
***
There she was, our timid and scared out of her fur, Fluttershy, following the stallion´s instruction. She wanted to believe that the voice was just a pony with very good magic skill and helping her on how to get to where he was. From turning left to right, how many step she should take, up to down, down to left, left to left, how many step she should go back, right to left and to many more direction instruction that she will have twisting her own tongue if she was giving to another pony.
“Okay” The stallion said. “You are really close to where I am! Turn right and you will see a cave. I want you to go inside of it and you will see me in the middle of the land just standing”
“Okay” the yellow fur mare replied “But this is not a trap...Right?” She made a terrible mistake by asking the stallion such a foolish question and knew the answer of it
“Do you think that this is a trap?! Do you not trust me?! Okay then turn around and never come back!!! You don’t need me after all!!! JUST GO!” The voice reply to the mare with a hint of melancholy.
Fluttershy felt awful and sorry for the stallion. She knew that she has hurt his feeling. The feelings of that who saved her life from the timberwolves and then guided her to safety. She also remember that the stallion couldn't move...why he couldn't move? Her mind fill with horribles though that the stallion was injure worst than her and needed help.
She took a big breath and decided to enter the dark and scary cave, with the knowledge that there was no going BACK.
She closed her eyes and started walking inside the cave. The cave was really moist and she could feel that the ground was really muddy.
“If I was Rarity, I would have fainted by now...or tell Aj to carry me” the mare said to herself.
She knew that she was getting close to the exit of the cave. She felt a ray of sunlight hitting her closed eyes. As she exited the cave. She opened her eyes, really slowly, and notices that she was inside the most beautiful garden she has ever seen. And she has been in the Canterlot Garden and that is saying a lot. The roof was, actually they were all kinds of flowers covering the skies. Her surrounding were full of growing plants, all kind of plants and trees and flowers. Even ones that she has never, ever, seen in her entire pony life. And in the middle was a tree, a funny looking tree she might add. The tree surrounded by plants and flowers and no trees surrounding it.But she didn't see anypony.
“I am here. Can you show yourself?” the pony asked while looking all directions
“You are looking at my right now” the stallion reply with frustration.
“Are you behind that tree?”
“No”
“Then where are you?”
“How about you go around the tree and you will see my face” The stallion said with anger.
“Okay” the timid mare replay and did what she was told.
She was getting closer and closer; where the front of the tree was. Then the voice spoke up to the mare which caused her to fall on her plot.
“STOP!” The stallion scream “I think is better for you to turn around and go. Yes. It¨s for the best for us...you to leave and go. I might scare the living cells out of you. Just go. I will show and guide you from the place you came from” The voice reply with a suspicious and timid way.
“Why? I am not going to hurt you in anyway. As you can see, I am helpless myself in so many ways and especially with my wings damage” Fluttershy reply to the worry voice in a sweet and warm tone.
There was, once again, the awkward silent. And it was broke by a sight.
“Okay, but I warned you about it” the voice said in a heartbroken.
“Okay then” the pegasus continue walking little by little and was getting more excited and terrified by what the creature might look like. Her mind going from he being alicord or a changeling.
As she turn to see the front of the tree. There was nopony in her sight. She felt offended on how the stallion have tricked her and lied to her that there he was in front of the tree. She bucked the tree with all her might just like Applejack showed her how to buck trees, and she heard a loud “OUCH” fallow by a “Why, in the HELL, you do that for?!”
Then she knew that she forgot to look up and see if the colt was on top of the tree and might fell and hit one of the branches. She was wrong; there was nopony, alicorn, or changeling in front of her. There was only tree with a face looking down at her with anger face that faded away and replace with a confused one.
“Mmm...I seen something like you in the before but I can't put my finger on what it is...” The talking tree said with a smug on its face.
“.............”
He look at her eyes and spoke again to Fluttershy. “Are you ok? You look like you have seen a ghost. I can tell that you are pale as one too even with all the fur on you” the tree said to poor timid Fluttershy whose mind was blank.
“..............” Fluttershy fainted.
The tree was amaze by seeing other than a human speak “Well, Bob, that the first time we see someone or...something... doing that? A what now...a pony?”
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Perhaps a cover art my dear sir? If not that's cool too. Anyways, cool story bro!
Make sure to credit the artist if you do use it!
2721284 Na don't worry about it. Just a thought
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haha i'm not going to kill anyone. XD
too messy.
the picture will be done this weekend.
Haha, the tree part almost killed me...in a non-messy way.
I'll be tracking, I really want to see where this' going.
This is a pretty good start for a first fanfic. S&G is good. But the part where Fluttershy is trapped by the wolfs though, when she starts to think about all her friends, the mood gets killed when there are these relatively lengthy descriptions about each of them. A "and then she thought about her friends and animals in ponyvile" would be sufficent enough.
I just did the Oasis quest today, and I saw the title and was gonna post about Harold
but then this happened
oh man, I am loving it so far
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Do you need an editor at all? The grammar isn't terrifyingly bad but it still needs work
Good story though
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I lol'd so fucking hard at that picture.
2742419 it's one of my faves
change the "I'ah" to "ah", or more simply " I "... what you've got right now would be closer to an Asian accent than a southern one.
Also, you change tense a lot during this story, I'd suggest you do a quick run through of it specifically looking for those tense changes.
Sigh...
Do NOT use the world "plot" for pony butts. It's just a meme originated from this picture.
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