I Choose You!
"Cyndaquil!"
Professor Elm smiled and said, "Well then, let's meet your first Pokémon." He took Cyndaquil's Pokéball off of the display case. He turned to Leon, who had stepped out of his way, and pressed a button in the center of the ball. The Pokéball opened, and a white beam of light shot from it. It landed on the ground in front of Leon, and it soon began to take shape. A small, mouse-like Pokémon appeared from the light in front of the little boy. It looked around and sneezed. As it did, a flock of flames came to life on its back, and they continued to dance in their fiery form.
"Cinda!" it said in a high pitched voice.
Leon couldn't help but smile. "Hey, little guy. I'm Leon, and I'm your new Pokémon trainer." A slight shudder of excitement drove through Leon's body, overwhelmed by the fact that he now had his very own Pokémon.
Cyndaquil looked at Leon, and smiled. "Quil!" it said, then yawned.
Elm smiled at Cyndaquil's innocent actions. "Cute," he said, then handed Leon Cyndaquil's Pokéball. "He's all yours, Leon."
Leon took the Pokéball into his hand, and thought, Awesome! My very own Pokémon! "So, I just press this button..." Leon pressed the button that Elm had pressed earlier, but this time, a red beam of light shot from the Pokéball and hit Cyndaquil. The red beam consumed the fiery mouse, and contracted back into the Pokéball with Cyndaquil in it. "Cool," he said in amusement.
Professor Elm fumbled through some papers on a nearby desk while Leon admired his Pokéball. After sorting through the papers, Elm turned around, with five more Pokéballs and a small, computer-like device. "Here are five more Pokéballs, giving you a total of six, and your Pokédex." Elm handed Leon the items.
"My Pokédex?" he asked, confused.
"Yes. Like I said earlier, there are many Pokémon in this world. A Pokédex is a digital encyclopedia that allows you to catalog and record Pokémon data. Some models of the Pokédex automatically give you all the information about a Pokémon when it sees it. Some only give you the information of a Pokémon when you successfully capture it. Unfortunately, I only have the model that gives you the data of a Pokémon when you catch it.” Elm made a nervous laugh, expecting Leon to get annoyed by the fact that he’d have to catch Pokémon to obtain their data.
“Cool,” he said, to Elm’s surprise.
“You mean you’re not mad?” Elm asked.
“Why would I be?” Leon replied. “What’s the fun in just getting data if I don’t have a Pokémon to show for it?” he said, thinking of all the Pokémon in Johto waiting to be caught.
Elm smiled. “It’s good to see that you’re enthusiastic about catching Pokémon. You know why I gave you five more Pokéballs, and no more, right?”
Leon thought for a moment. “...No.”
“You can only carry up to six Pokémon with you at a time. If you catch a Pokémon and you already have six with you, the Pokémon you caught will be transferred to a PC, or a Personal Computer. These PCs have a Pokémon Storage System, where you can store and move Pokémon that you’ve caught,” Elm explained.
“Oh,” Leon said simply.
“Anyway, I’ve held you up for far too long. It’s time you went on with your journey. I have high hopes for you and Cyndaquil. Oh, by the way, would you like to give Cyndaquil a nickname?” Elm asked.
Leon pondered for a bit, and said, “Sure! I think I’ll name you... Cynders!” He admired Cyndaquil’s new name. “With a ‘Y’,” he added.
“Okay then. Leon, and Cynders, I wish you the best of luck on your journey,” Elm said, smiling.
“Thanks, Professor Elm!” Leon had begun walking to the door, when Elm remembered something.
“Oh, one more thing!” he called out.
“Yeah?” Leon asked.
“I’d like you to walk with your Pokémon. Just the first one in your team, though.” Elm said.
“Why?” Leon asked.
“Well, I’ve been studying how walking alongside your Pokémon affects it, and I’ve come a conclusion that walking with a Pokémon can help strengthen your bond with it. Trust between trainer and Pokémon is a key ingredient to training.” Elm said.
“Oh, well, in that case, come on out, Cynders!” Leon reached for Cyndaquil’s Pokéball, and pressed the center button. Like before, a white beam shot out from the Pokéball, and Cyndaquil materialized in front of Leon.
“Cynda!” it said again.
“Hey, Cynders. I heard that walking is a good trust exercise, so let’s walk!” Leon said merrily.
“Quil!” Cynders raised his arms in excitement, and began walking alongside Leon as he exited Elm’s lab.
“Good Luck!” Elm called out. He sighed, “There goes another one. I hope he does great things in this world.”
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“Okay, Cynders, what should we do now?” Leon asked his Pokémon.
Cynders replied, “Cynda... quil?”
“Yeah, I guess we shouldn’t do that,” Leon said, pretending to understand what Cynders was saying. “Oh, I almost forgot! I have to get my Pokégear from my mom! I was so excited to get my first Pokémon, I didn’t think to get my Pokégear. C’mon, Cynders, let’s go back to my house."
“Cynda!” Cyndaquil followed Leon back to his house.
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Leon called out, “Mom, I’m home!”
“Oh, hi, Honey.” Leon’s mom was watching TV, relaxing on a sofa.
“Mom, I finally got my first Pokémon! Look!” Leon presented his new Cyndaquil to his mother.
His mother looked at Cynders, and said, “Oh my, it’s very cute. Is it a boy or a girl?”
Leon bent down on one knee to pet Cyndaquil. “He’s a boy. His name is Cynders, with a ‘Y’. Hey, mom, didn’t my Pokégear come today?” he asked.
“Ah, that’s right.” Leon’s mother went into another room, and came out shortly after with a small package. “Here. I already took off the adhesive, so it should be easy to open it.”
Leon took the package and opened it up. He began searching through packing peanuts, and eventually found a small, phone-like device wrapped in plastic. Leon ripped the plastic off and studied the design of the device. “My own Pokégear. Let’s see, where’s the instruction manual?”
Leon’s mom smiled, and looked at Cynders. “Are you hungry?” she asked.
“Cynda!” Cynders said, putting his arms on his belly.
Leon’s mom made a small giggle, and said, “I’ll take that as a yes.” She went to the kitchen and began searching through the cupboards for something that Cynders could eat.
Meanwhile, Leon was skimming through the Pokégear’s instruction manual. “Let’s see... call function... map card... radio... settings...” Leon opened the Pokégear and began fidgeting with its functions. “Hey, where’s the map and radio?” Leon looked back at the manual. “Blah blah blah... I can only use the other two functions when I get a card for them? Where do I get cards?” Leon’s mom came back with a bowl of Pokémon food and set it on the ground for Cynders to eat. As Cynders ran to the food and started eating, Leon’s mother sat back down on the couch.
“Well, I’m pretty sure you can get a radio card from Goldenrod City’s Radio Tower.” Leon’s mom said, putting a finger to her chin, thinking. “As for the map card, I’m not sure where you can find one of those. Sorry, Honey.”
“Eh, that’s okay.” Leon took off his backpack and put the Pokégear’s instructions manual in one of its many pockets. He then took the Pokégear, registered his mom’s number (which he already knew by memory), and clipped it onto his belt.
“What are you planning to do now?” Leon’s mom asked.
Leon thought for a moment, and said, “Eh... I’m not sure yet.”
“Here’s an idea. How about you travel Johto, and collect Gym badges? That way, when you reach the Indigo Plateau, you’ll be eligible to be participate. The Indigo Plateau is basically a place where tough trainers from all around come to test their strength,” His mom suggested.
“...That sounds great! Where are the gyms?” Leon asked, getting excited.
“There are various Pokémon Gyms scattered around Johto. If memory serves, the closest one is in Violet City. Oh, but you’ll need this.” Leon’s mother went back into the room where his Pokégear had been, and came back with a case that had a Pokéball symbol on it. “Here, it’s a Badge case.” She handed it to Leon. “Whenever you beat a Gym Leader, they’ll reward you with a Gym Badge. Those Badges let other trainers know that Gym Leaders have recognized your strength. Once you have eight Gym Badges, you can enter the Indigo Plateau,” Leon’s mom explained.
“Thanks, mom.” Leon placed the case in his backpack, and zipped it up. “Hey, Cynders, you ready to go yet?” Leon asked. He turned to Cynders, who had finished stuffing himself, and smiled. “You must’ve been really hungry, huh?”
“Cynda...” His Pokémon said sluggishly.
Leon laughed, and began to head out the door, Cynders following behind. “Oh, Honey, aren’t you forgetting something?” Leon’s mom said.
“What? I don’t think I am,” Leon said.
“Unless you want Cynders to starve, I suggest you take some money with you. Here, take some money.” Leon’s mom pulled out a sizable amount of money, and handed it to her son. “Spend it wisely, because I don’t have money growing in my wallet, and I know how you can get with money,” she said sternly.
“Oh... right. Thanks, mom.” Leon ran out the door, Cynders keeping up with ease.
“Be careful!” Leon’s mom called out. She sighed, “I knew this day would come. Stay safe, Leon. I don’t want you getting hurt...”
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“So, did you like my house?” Leon asked Cynders.
“Cynda!” his Pokémon replied.
“I’ll take that as a ‘yes’.” Leon walked out of New Bark Town, now venturing into the fields he watched as a kid. “Now, I know there are Pokémon in grass, so we need to be careful, ‘kay, Cynders?” Leon said cautiously.
“Quil!” Cynders replied. A patch of grass rustled nearby.
“What was that?” Leon asked.
“Tret?” a voice replied.
Leon stopped. “...That wasn’t you, was it Cynders?”
“Sen... tret?” the same voice answered. Leon turned around, to see Cynders staring at another Pokémon. A small, furry Pokémon with stubby limbs stared at Leon.
“I know this one!” Leon said. “You’re a Sentret, right?” he asked, recognizing this Pokémon from all the times it appeared in the grass while he watched as a kid.
“Tret!” Sentret replied.
“Okay then. Cynders, let’s catch our first Pokémon!” Leon said, confidence brewing inside him.
“Quil,” Cynders replied.
“Cynders, use... uh... hold on.” Leon searched through his backpack, and found what he was looking for: the Pokédex. “Uh, let’s see... Cyndaquil... you know Tackle and Growl. Okay then, Cynders, use Growl!”
“Quil!” Cynders followed Leon’s command. “Quill... Quil!” he said, in an intimidating manner.
“T-tret!” Sentret shook a little, then shook its head. “Sentret!” Sentret ran towards Cynders, its paw beginning to glow. When it got close, it lunged at Cynders, and scratched him.
“Quil!” Cynders yelled in pain.
“Cynders, are you okay?” Leon asked with concern.
Cynders was clutching his face, but quickly shook it off. “Quil!”
Leon smiled. “Okay, enough messing around. Cynders, use Tackle!”
“Quil!” Cynders charged at Sentret.
“Tret!” Sentret moved, dodging the attack.
“Ugh,” Leon said, annoyed. “Cynders, again!”
“Quil!” Cynders repeated his actions. This time, Sentret was too slow, and didn’t react fast enough to dodge. Cynders tackled Sentret, knocking it over.
“Tret!” Sentret said, a slight sound of pain escaping its mouth. Sentret got back up, dusting itself off. “Tret!” Sentret charged at Cynders, preparing to scratch again.
“Once more.” Leon said. “Cynders, Tackle!”
“Quil!” Cynders turned around, and lunged again at Sentret. Sentret stopped, and began bracing itself for Cynders’ attack. Cynders hit Sentret with all his might. Sentret tried to take the hit, but fell to the ground again.
“T-tret...” Sentret stayed on the this time.
“Okay, now you’re weak enough! Go, Pokéball!” Leon took one of the Pokéballs Elm gave him earlier, now minimized for storage convenience. He pressed its center button, expanding the ball, and threw it at Sentret. The ball hit the furry Pokémon. It opened up, and took in Sentret. The ball fell onto the ground, shook a couple of times, and stopped, making a “ding” sound. Leon walked to the ball. Picking it up, he admired it. “Awesome, my first capture.” He checked his Pokédex, which was recording Sentret’s data.
The Pokédex beeped, signifying that it had successfully recorded and catalogued Sentret, and in an electronic voice, read, “Sentret, the Scout Pokémon. A very cautious Pokémon, it raises itself up using its tail to get a better view of its surroundings.”
“Cool. Look, Cynders, we got one.” Leon showed Cynders the Pokéball, and smiled.
Cynders smiled back, and said, “Quil!”
“Well, C’mon, Cynders. Let’s hope we can get more on our way to Violet City, wherever that is!” Leon said cheerfully.
“Quil!” Cynders followed his trainer through the grass patches, already thinking that he’d have an awesome journey with Leon.
Little did he know, awesome didn't even begin to describe it.
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One of my favorite Pokémon from johto region
You. Must. Have. a. Mareep. and. a. Dinosaur
That idea about SS was actually a good one
All I can think when I see the name Leon is Leon from the Biohazard series.
Leon Kennedy, Pokémon trainer. That is a hilarious mental image!
Keep it up!
Magicarp.
P. S. Invest in a thesaurus, and a dictionary. You repeat yourself a lot, and I, at least, find that annoying.
I see that a lot of tiny errors are still slipping through the cracks. Also, there's too many of these:
What's up with that? Where else would he think?
As a writer, you have to catch yourself before making these types of mistakes. I understand that you may be in a rush to get out each new chapter, but that's when small, stupid errors like this slip in and potentially throw off a reader.
I suggest you slow down and make sure everything flows properly before you pass it on to a proofreader. Don't put all your faith in the editor, do it right the first time, so you don't have to worry.
I find it a little too pokemon game and not enough pokemon tv serie like
You have a pretty good concept, but in my opinion, the tone in the writing is pretty dull.
This can be attributed to a lack of variation in vocabulary. A wide range of vocabulary and words can help polish up the writing and really make it shine. Variation in vocabulary makes the writing more interesting and sound less repetitive.
Also, try to get your point across in as few words as possible. This means that instead of saying, such as, "The fox jumped with extreme grace over the log that was in its path," write it as, "The fox nimbly lept over the log." There are already implications that the log was in the way of the fox, if not, why would it go out of its way to just jump over a log? Being direct helps not bore the reader with sentences that go around the actual point. However, don't make all your sentences too short or else they will sound too choppy.
Then, there is the dialogue. The dialogue lacks much character. From some sentences, it seems that Leon is actually a very eager youth who wants nothing more than to get out into the world and explore, yet in others, he seems like an indifferent teen who just wants nothing more than to just get out of the place in general. Some of this can be fixed with punctuation. Replacing some periods with exclamation points can cause the tone of the speaker to sound excited instead of indifferent. Of course, don't put exclamation points all over the place, or else the character will sound too eager and generally be annoying. Unless that is what kind of character you are aiming for. When writing dialogue, actually get inside your character's head and think about what they would say. Develop their personalities.
I am a big Pokemon fan, so I am excited to see how this will turn out. If you actually read through this entire comment, you're amazing.
I was thinking you should probably skip to the Fluttershy encounter and not just because that's the intended purpose of the story. Right now it feels like whats going on is happening simultaneously because its not really stated other wise [this could just be be though.] Typically when i read a story where events bounce back and forth between characters point of views your going in to the immediate future or it happened along side what had just happened. It wouldn't make sense to have Fluttershy just sitting in the forest for weeks. Time has to be more real for a story than the day it takes one to beat all 8 gyms playing pokemon games. This chapter also felt a little to flat that i dont remember from previous chapters but i could have been sleep deprived and not noticed before. The conversations need to seem more real as well as some of the actions taken.
Still in love with the idea and I will stop reading and go home if a Mareep is not caught on his way to meeting Fluttershy[joking but seriously marreep for the win]
the tone does seem a little bland and repetitive
. like when cynders and leon where conversing what to do every Small action was stated prolonging the time it took to get to the fun stuff. i do love the concept though.
some of my fondest childhood memories are of paying pokemon.
This chapter did seem bland compared to the others. The dialogue was bland, either pointing out the obvious, or the characters did not seem to care about what they say (seriously, how can a mom send a 10 year old out to travel the world so willingly?). Not even the fight was all that interesting as it seemed too much like the battle system for the games. I love Pokemon, but I just wish they would put more action in the battle system. However, I like how you are using actual Pokedex entries and at least beginning to employ some of the benefits the anime has. Anyway, I really like this concept of yours, keep it up, I really want to see where you go with this. I don't know if you intend on catching every pokemon before Fluttershy leaves, or if you intend on traversing both the Johto and Kanto regions, but anything you write, I know will be awesome. Now bring on Fluttershy, the pony, turned human, that is most adorable.
If Ponyta were catchable before Ilex Forest, then I would of said for Fluttershy to meet one, just for the sake of Irony. I could only imagine how the story pans out from there.
2645530 2645487 Thanks for the feedback. I'll make sure to read through my chapters carefully before I give it to my proofreader. Honestly, I actually didn't check for any mistakes myself before giving it to my proofreader...
I see now that a proofreader is supposed to help with any mistakes I might've missed after I check for them myself. Also, I don't know why my mind got stuck on so little words, and the "thought in his mind" thing... Yeah, I'll change that.
Again, thanks for the feedback. Criticism is appreciated.
2645802 I did, and your feedback and criticism is appreciated.
I'm not aiming for Leon to be hyped up all the time, because I myself find that annoying. I do need to work on my writing, because sometimes, I just type runoff sentences and I don't even notice.
Also, I'm expanding my vocabulary.
Okay, here's where I come out with a possible explanation:
The writing of this chapter may have been hurt because there were a lot of things that happened in the past couple of days for me. I wanted to continue writing this story, but I guess I should've waited for things to smooth out in real life before getting back to it.
2645909 When Flutters was stuck in the void, time was accelerated (at least that's what I'm putting out there). So, when she finally got out, all of the things that happened to Leon by the time he got to Goldenrod City had passed. When she starts stumbling through the forest, Leon has already lost to Whitney a third time.
2645986 2646304 This is where I input my own idea about sending your child out to fight fire-breathing, psychic creatures. I've developed the idea that it's tradition to send your child out to explore the world once they reach the age of ten. By then, they will be able to get their first Pokémon in the safety of their hometown. When they leave, they will enter their first route filled with feral Pokémon. This, however, is not a bad thing. My theory is that special forces make sure that the Pokémon in beginning routes are weak and easy to defeat for a starting trainer. By the time said trainer reaches the next route, their Pokémon will have been trained enough to make it easier to explore that route, which now has slightly tougher Pokémon. This is why when you progress deeper into the region, you see tougher Pokémon that you wouldn't see in previous routes. It makes sense to me because if you're going to employ the idea of Pokémon into real life (and by that I mean more realistic, like in the anime) you have to wonder why a Rapidash from Mt. Silver doesn't just wonder off to Newbark Town or near Route 29.
Does this make any sense to you, or is it just me?
Anyway, I did use some characteristics from the game, like getting your first Pokémon from Elm and then being asked to walk around with it. Although, I also added some things that weren't in the game, like how you get your badge case and Pokégear, and how the use a Pokégear is explained. I'm not going to use everything from the game, because it wouldn't make sense for an old man to give you his shoes and say, "Push the B button if you want to run," or something like that. I have to think of the way I put out battles. One thing I know is that your Pokémon can do things that they couldn't in the games, like when you say dodge, they actually do, or you could include a double attack combo, or even do things that wouldn't even seem plausible in the game. An example of that is when I watched a random episode of the anime (can't remember which season) and Bianca had told her Emboar to use Stone Edge, then she told her Emboar to pick up the rocks from Stone Edge and throw them, or something along the lines of that. That's what I love about not being in the game;
Just about anything goes.
Anyway, thanks for pointing out things I'm doing wrong. I'll make the chapters less dull in the future, or at least, I'll try my best.
On a side note: It may be hard for me to characterize Fluttershy. If you look at the episodes that focus around her, many different writers of the show have written them, so there are many different ways that Fluttershy has been seen as. To further explain what I'm talking about, this guy was saying it in part of his video:
could you give an average of time between the chapters and future chapters in publishing.
2647517 I'm not sure how often I'll be able to update. I'm currently watching all episodes of MLP:FiM that revolve around Fluttershy so I can at least get a basis on how to characterize her, and I'm also trying to see how I can make the battling experience less game-like.
I hope that I'll be able to post a new chapter by the end of the week, but I'm not going to rush it.
You'll just have to wait.
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I love Digibrony, and I agree, Fluttershy's characterization seems to be all over the place, but I think they can still be tied together.
Dragonshy: Fluttershy is seen to be brave when she has something worth fighting for.
Staremaster: she learns that there is a different approach to taming different sets of cratures.
Green isn't Your Color: she learns that keeping secrets for the benefit of others can only lead to undesirable situations and it is important to be selfish once in a while.
A Bird in The Hoof: she also learns that keeping secrets can lead to trouble, and that telling the truth often is more desireable, or something about asking for permission is often the first thing you should do before you take on a job. I don't know... Digibrony is right, I don't know what this episode is about.
Putting Your Hoof Down: she learns that being assertive and being mean are two different things, and she figures out when being assertive is necessary.
Hurricane Fluttershy: she learns that peer pressure is something to be ignored all together when it doesn't serve to better herself, and she needs to do what she thinks is right. She learns that her insecurities and peer pressure only serve to keep her grounded in her flawed character, and that she needs to ignore them in order for her to look at herself, find out what needs to be fixed about herself, and work to fix them.
Keep Calm and Flutter On is where these combine. She takes on the mission of reforming Discord because she wants to fulfill Celestia's wishes, and if she fails, it means failing Celestia and her friends. She has something to fight for. Then she takes an appropriate approach on how to tame Discord. She ignores her friend's misplaced concerns and continues to do what she thinks is right. She demonstrates when she needs to be a door mat, and when she needs to put her hoof down. This episode was showing us a fully realized Fluttershy based off of the previous episodes, and it shows us how kindness trulyis a powerful elementthat can change lives. I will excuse Discord's reformation since it really did show us a good Fluttershy moment, though I will still ignore his reformation in the story I wrote, he is just too good of a villain to be a good guy, and unless he becomes the Vegeta of MLP, I will never accept him as a 'reformed villain'.
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...and? Why would you want it to be like the series?
2647856 Yeah. When I went back to watch Digibrony's analysis again, along with the aforementioned episodes, I developed a basis on how to characterize Fluttershy. I just hope I made my basis accurate.
Now leaves the situation of the way I present Leon's battles and, for that matter, any battle I plan to write out. I'm taking the time to see what I can do about this...
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I think the battles will be more epic once he gets to Goldenrod. Leon will be better at battling, his Pokemon will have learned new moves, and there will be more variety in the types of Pokemon. I don't know what team you have planned for Leon, but I think Onix or Geodude will be good additions, I prefer Onix. Bellsprout would be cool too, and Caterpie or Ladyba or Spinarak, I always try to add some sort of bug type in there for psychic destruction. Well, that's four, maybe a Mareep and Magikarp or Wooper. I kind of wish Chikorita won, as it can defeat both starters with ease once it evolves into Meganium, but I digress. You might not want both a bellsprout and a mareep, but whatever, do as you wish.
2647947 I'm in the midst of writing out Leon's rematch against Whitney, and I'm inputting things similar to battles in the anime, i.e., dodging mechanics and shifting moves mid-turn. Honestly, I'm still thinking what Pokémon Leon will have on his team. I'm thinking that I should have him rotate Pokémon, but only one rotation. I don't want Leon to have ten Pokémon on his team, but probably just seven. This is only if I do decide to have him rotate. Also, what are your thoughts on my theory of control over Pokémon in routes?
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It's very understandable and well thought out, and I do see this whole journey thing as some sort of right of passage into adulthood. I just like teens better than children, and 15-19 seems like the better age range.
Also, for the teams, I always plan them out in order to dominate every sort of type there is. Always have a water type, grass or electric, bug, and ground. That's four, and I would replace bug with dark, but in the johto region there are no dark types that close to the beginning. Oh, I also always have a flying type. Chikorita, Onix, Caterpie, Gastly, Wooper and Hoothoot, is what I would go with on my next HG/SS adventure. However, since you started with Cyndaquil, Caterpie, Onix and Hoothoot are still recomended, although you can switch out Hoothoot with Togepie. Bellsprout would be good or Mareep, I would go with Bellsprout as I already have a trained Mareep, but either is fine. Now for 6 and 7... Evee is deffinitely a possibility, and I would evolve it to either Umbreon or Espeon. And, knowing what I know about Whitney, I would get a fighting type. I think Machoke can be found in the wild before her, but I'm not sure. Maybe you'll want to switch out Caterpie with Heracross. A lot of these are psychic types, or can learn psychic type moves, and there is a reason for that, as the fighting type gym is often the hardest one to beat.
Heh, I haven't even thought about Pokemon since X and Y were announced, and now I'm thinking of playing again.
2648164 Thanks for your thoughts on the theory.
Heh, yeah. In my most recent Johto adventure, my finishing team was Meganium, Ledian, Crobat, Ninetales, Jolteon, and Slowbro. Meganium became a tank, with Attract (she's a girl, by the way) and Earthquake. Ledian always struggled, but could come through at times. Crobat was a speed demon. I evolved my Vulpix once I reached the Pokémon League, and she just changed to a heavy-hitter. Jolteon would cripple opposing Pokémon. Slowbro was another tank, and was my main offense against Lance and Clair with Avalanche. Honestly, Chuck was too easy for me. By then, I had just gotten Slowpoke, and I only used Ledian and Vulpix to beat him. Surprisingly, Jasmine was the problem, as her Magnemite outsped my Vulpix and would T-wave her.
I intend for Leon to have an Eevee. I'll probably ask for you guys to vote for Eevee's evolution, but until then, I have to put more effort into future chapters.
I actually intend to change the Gym Leader's rosters a bit, like replace Falkner's Pidgey with a Hoothoot or add a Furret to Whitney's team.
Eh...
Oh, to heck with it. I want to see what's going to happen next. Have a favorite.
2649810 I hope to entertain you for as long as I can.
Did u cast my vote????
2650318 Eeyup.
In the end, Cyndaquil had the lead with fourteen votes.
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A Cyndaquil!
One of my favorite starter Pokemon! And now the adventure begins!...
For real this time!
Right?
2653244 Hopefully. I don't like spoilers, but all I can say about the next chapter: Leon and Flutters meet.
2653446
So the adventure DOES begin!
2659607 Yeah... I have the next chapter ready, for the most part. I've already read over it to look for any mistakes, and I did find some. I'm just waiting for it to be proofread one last time before publishing it.
Not sure how long that's gonna take, though.
you say that you don't want a cliché, but choosing Cyndaquil is like standing up and shouting "I wasn't my story to be as generic as possible!"
please don't take this the wrong way though, its a good story, but think of all the chapters that just write themselves if Leon had chosen Chikorita- struggling with the first 2 gyms, and maybe even facing ridicule for his choice. Having the weaker one makes room for more characterization that can be put, and people can FEEL his victories and losses as if they were the ones achieving them. shame it was put on hiatus...
You really should have made Angel Bunny turn into a Bunnelby even if it is a later Gen Pokemon as I think it suits him better than the Bunny Pokémon that later turns into the Pokémon version of Playboy, no offense to any Loppunny lovers out there reading this.