This is a intrensting story. Please continue it.

continue or become the fear of a space marine....nothing.

good story

Proof read this a few times.

wait...so fluttershy's dad rape her?!?

and did rainbow dash and pinkie pie read cupcake???

Wait, so what if you were scared of something like wide open spaces?
Would a boggart be able to change the environment around it?
Or what if you were scared of non-existance, as in not being real or existing or whatever?
What would happen to the boggart? Would it die?

HOW DARE YOU TREAT YOUR OWN DAUGHTER LIKE THAT. FILTH LIKE YOU SHOULDN’T BE ALOUD TO WALK FREE,

Made me laugh IRL.

Also, flutterrape? Wtf?

Fluttershy being a rape victim--- way too much. dude.

rein it IN.

Wow, that was...hilarious, actually. That whole confrontation scene was so absurd, if I didn't know better I would have thought that it was satirical.

Well, there went all the conflict.

Edit: well I could be mistaken but. Well, there goes the Obvious source of conflict. Good luck with the rest of the story.

Fluttershy was raped....Kkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk..........

Well, that was funny and interesting, but it went so fast... he just came out of the barn right away!

YAY, freedom!

Though you probably should have gone on longer than that with the whole "i cant control my body guess what IM YOUR WORST NIGHTMARE" thing

The whole "Fluttershy has a rapist dad" thing is unneeded and unwanted. It would have been perfectly fine to have been perfectly fine for her fear to have been...
-A bully from her time in school
-Her animals rebelling and attacking her
-A full grown dragon
-Her friends rejecting her
-Falling (I would be scared too after what happened in her cutie mark story)
-The Everfree Forest
-Gilda
-Any pony that she never met before
Need I go on? (Please say no, I cannot think of anymore at the moment)

i really like this story, but it's a pity that rook's "forced imprisonment" period ended so fast. so much more could have been done with it in my opinion. nevertheless, excelent work.

Oh my god, that was screwed up, man. Sweet story!

No, just, WHY would Dash and Pinkie's greatest fear be the Cupcakes Pinkamena? I could understand why you set that form as the fear, after all, losing her friends is definitely one of Pinkie's greatest fears and seeing her normally cheery friend like that might have really scared Dash, but how in the seven hells would that equate to Cupkcakes? Are you saying that Dash is afraid of Pinkie suddenly killing all her friends and making cupcakes from them? Or that Pinkie thinks she could do that? Also the general amount of dark in your Equestria is startling. (Flutterrape, both AJ and Rare thinking about their sisters commiting suicide...)

2583536 no, that isn't what they fear.Is afraid of loosing her friend, and Is afraid of . Cupcakes just combines those fears.