Sidestory to Fallout Equestria: Commonwealth. A wounded alicorn washes up on the shores of mysterious Fog Harbor, suffering a crisis of faith and implored to 'Be Better'.
This was an interesting chapter, it was nice seeing Spoiled Rich in the story and Ms Polo too, which I like the take on her business personalty. It was nice to see that Fast's favored comic book artist is still alive, of a sort. it was perfectly understandable that he lost interests in doing more of the Shrouded Stallion and moved on to other, I hope that Fast will understand that when he meats him finally, I wonder what happened in the castle that got him so spooked and how. I thoughts it was interesting that Vera has taken an interest in investigation and taking on a persona of investigator, can't wait to see when she will tell about Cane to Fast. Great chapter.
I loved this chapter. Just as I loved this part of thr Far Harbor DLC. I especially liked how you made use of Vira's tallents with out over powering them, after all just be cause you can read minds doesn't mean you have all the facts.
She had never heard of a Stable with so few residents however. Well... she had once heard a rumor about a mythical 'Puppet Pony' wearing the double 7 that had become taboo in certain parts of Equestria. According to legend, this Stable 77 was only one pony and a box of puppets, but she doubted that was true.
"Yes, yes... I'm Bobbing Cane, writer and artist of those silly old things. Don't tell me you're a fan Miss Vira? I didn't think anypony nowadays read them." Mr. Cane trotted over and shrugged to the faded poster, pulling out a box of the comics themselves from the corner, all preserved in yellowed plastic bags.
There's your path to Fast's heart Vira, though she may enjoy those comics herself. Can't believe I missed the fact of who Cane was until I got to this part
You are not allowed to kill Mr. Cane until Fast meets him. I forbid it.
I like this. It's a very different journey from the main Commonwealth story, smaller in scale. The differences between Fast and Vira keep it fresh, especially since Vira here ironically doesn't have a bunch of voice in her head. At least, not coming from her subconcious. While I can't imagine this side story will be super long, I'm very much fascinated. Closest comparisons I can think of is when Song of Ice and Fire added Jaime as a perspective, Especially with the redemption angle going on here, redemption being something MLP loves these days.
Mr Stripes, the kinda mean landlord of Rarity's Manehattan shop's location, and his daughter Plaid Stripes. Both from the S6, E9 'Saddle Row and Review' episode.
I think that Suri and Raspberry Beret were from another of Rarity's episodes about her shops. But I can not place them.
Mr. Cane, the artist, is mentioned in FOE Commonwealth. When Fast Times finds the Artist/writer's home and private museum and shop, and the reader learns he was the author of the Shrouded Stallion comic series, as well as others. The Shrouded Stallion being based upon a near-mythical pony actually created by Luna to bring Justice to the world during the night.
Poor Spoiled Rich. Yeah, she was bitchy, but still, killing her? Ah well, if ya need a stiff for a plot, I guess she was a 'good' choice. Oh well. (personally, I am not THAT put out that Spoiled got knocked off).
Ah-Ha! As I suspected, Spoiled killed Mr. Stripes and took his place (sort of like the murder in the Fog Harbor DLC, don't you think?).
It was only half a dozen of the undead monsters, wearing tattered remains of moldy suits and ties, business ponies locked in a meeting that even death hadn't released them from.
Now that is the stuff of nightmares, a meeting over 200 years long
Of much more interest was the rusty steel walls and rickety stairs leading up to a huge, gear shaped door, bearing the number 118 in faded and chipped yellow. Vira had never been into a Stable herself, standing in the shadow of one now filled her with a sense of superstitious dread. The Destroyer came from a place like this... the one who murdered her mother and opened the sky... Most wastelanders were leery of Stables as dangerous death traps in general, but to Vira and her sisters they were like a dragon's lair, potentially the home of somepony that could set the world on fire.
Mrs. Spring muttered as the holotape whined in Plaid's chest, rearranging the case full of matching orange tapes labeled with marker scrawled names of the residents. "Pickle is always messing up the order... Mr. Stripes' tape belongs here, not down there... Don't fall in love with a mad scientist girls, unless you have a lot of patience."
Oh Pickle isn't the one who messed that up
And too late, Vira is already crushing on one
"Yes, yes... I'm Bobbing Cane, writer and artist of those silly old things. Don't tell me you're a fan Miss Vira? I didn't think anypony nowadays read them." Mr. Cane trotted over and shrugged to the faded poster, pulling out a box of the comics themselves from the corner, all preserved in yellowed plastic bags.
I knew I recognized the name, but I just couldn't place it
She could understand his incredulity when he spoke, though wondered about the other complex emotions beneath it of concern, anxiety and confusion. "I heard the radio talking about somepony out there dressing up as the Shrouded Stallion... but he's real? An alicorn like you? H-He's not the really real one... is he Miss?"
Well... no, but kinda yes... look the situation back in Trotson is getting really complicated
She was glad to feel a little relief and wonder coming from Mr. Cane as he saw the images in her mind, the robot giving a soft sigh and cheering up as he spoke."Well... I'll be. Had me worried for a minute the real one got out somehow,
Ehhh yeah, so like I said, the situation over in Trotson is getting very complicated
Hoofing over 10 caps was more than worth Suri making a quick snip and stitch to the wide purple hat, guiding her graceful horn through the new hole along with the others for her perked up ears, setting it atop her mane more carefully this time, adjusting the brim to a rakish angle and primping the bow as Vira squeed to herself happily. With it properly perched on her head, Vira gave a broad smile to the mirror and the stylish hat atop her head, feeling a sense of pride in herself that was different than the blind belief in her own perfection before. She liked how she looked, she got this hat herself with her own caps, she earned a little something for herself and liked the feeling.
Mrs. Spring muttered as the holotape whined in Plaid's chest, rearranging the case full of matching orange tapes labeled with marker scrawled names of the residents. "Pickle is always messing up the order... Mr. Stripes' tape belongs here, not down there... Don't fall in love with a mad scientist girls, unless you have a lot of patience."
Clue #1 The holotape containing Mr. Stripes voice sample is not where it should be.
Vira glanced down to Plaid, concerned at the surprise bordering on shock at her father's actions. She tapped her metal claw at her mouth panel nervously, mentally biting her hoof and thinking furiously. "He didn't say anything about that... it's not like him... Daddy always said the robot staff were more than enough, that we didn't need to be running around packing weapons when it's just us. Why wouldn't he talk to me first?"
Clue #2
Mr. Stripes is acting out of character.
Setting those two cans aside, Mr. Cane wheeled across the room to a sloppy workbench, glowering at some kind of magic powered spray gun that was apparently out of place. After moving it over an inch to where it belonged, Mr. Cane picked it up in his claws and examined it carefully, a growing sense of violation slowly overriding his previous excitement.
Clue #3
Mr. Cane's supplies and tools have been used without his knowledge or permission. Said supplies were paint cans holding the colors red and white.
"It appears to be a place Spoiled Rich came, to escape the others and plot her own ideas for how they should deal with the outside. Thankfully not ideas that held any sway with the others..."
Clue #4
Spoiled Rich's War Room and the true murder scene.
Looking up from consoling the sad orange mare, Vira spotted Nick looking at her with a funny expression and feelings going on beneath the brown fedora he tipped her way. His conflicted feelings settled into one emotion that surprised her, pride... Pride in her...
This was an interesting chapter, it was nice seeing Spoiled Rich in the story and Ms Polo too, which I like the take on her business personalty. It was nice to see that Fast's favored comic book artist is still alive, of a sort. it was perfectly understandable that he lost interests in doing more of the Shrouded Stallion and moved on to other, I hope that Fast will understand that when he meats him finally, I wonder what happened in the castle that got him so spooked and how. I thoughts it was interesting that Vera has taken an interest in investigation and taking on a persona of investigator, can't wait to see when she will tell about Cane to Fast. Great chapter.
I loved this chapter. Just as I loved this part of thr Far Harbor DLC. I especially liked how you made use of Vira's tallents with out over powering them, after all just be cause you can read minds doesn't mean you have all the facts.
Im currently in Far Harbor in the DLC, almost finishing tho (probably).
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An interesting comic related to this
There's your path to Fast's heart Vira, though she may enjoy those comics herself. Can't believe I missed the fact of who Cane was until I got to this part
Crazyperson's Calamitous cameos, Batmare!
You are not allowed to kill Mr. Cane until Fast meets him. I forbid it.
I like this. It's a very different journey from the main Commonwealth story, smaller in scale. The differences between Fast and Vira keep it fresh, especially since Vira here ironically doesn't have a bunch of voice in her head. At least, not coming from her subconcious. While I can't imagine this side story will be super long, I'm very much fascinated. Closest comparisons I can think of is when Song of Ice and Fire added Jaime as a perspective, Especially with the redemption angle going on here, redemption being something MLP loves these days.
Wow, I really forgot how the quest went in the game that it actually surprised me at the end when my memory finally clicked XD
And Cane! I didn't realise who he was until it was spelt out to me. It's nice to see him still alive :)
Mr Stripes, the kinda mean landlord of Rarity's Manehattan shop's location, and his daughter Plaid Stripes. Both from the S6, E9 'Saddle Row and Review' episode.
I think that Suri and Raspberry Beret were from another of Rarity's episodes about her shops. But I can not place them.
Mr. Cane, the artist, is mentioned in FOE Commonwealth. When Fast Times finds the Artist/writer's home and private museum and shop, and the reader learns he was the author of the Shrouded Stallion comic series, as well as others. The Shrouded Stallion being based upon a near-mythical pony actually created by Luna to bring Justice to the world during the night.
Poor Spoiled Rich. Yeah, she was bitchy, but still, killing her? Ah well, if ya need a stiff for a plot, I guess she was a 'good' choice. Oh well. (personally, I am not THAT put out that Spoiled got knocked off).
Ah-Ha! As I suspected, Spoiled killed Mr. Stripes and took his place (sort of like the murder in the Fog Harbor DLC, don't you think?).
I am liking this, so far.
the Frank Pony
Shit I would have had her stripped for parts
Shit I would have had her stripped for parts
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I lean towards mercy and stuff.
Now that is the stuff of nightmares, a meeting over 200 years long
I mean, it wouldn't exactly surprise me
Oh Pickle isn't the one who messed that up
And too late, Vira is already crushing on one
I knew I recognized the name, but I just couldn't place it
Well... no, but kinda yes... look the situation back in Trotson is getting really complicated
Ehhh yeah, so like I said, the situation over in Trotson is getting very complicated
Clue #1
The holotape containing Mr. Stripes voice sample is not where it should be.
Clue #2
Mr. Stripes is acting out of character.
Clue #3
Mr. Cane's supplies and tools have been used without his knowledge or permission.
Said supplies were paint cans holding the colors red and white.
Clue #4
Spoiled Rich's War Room and the true murder scene.