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EThe Grand Galloping Gallia (Opuscon789's Cinderella Mash Up)

• MLP: FiM

Rarity is bullied around and can't get her way

• Crossover
• Celestia
• Prince Blueblood
• Main 6

opuscon789 · 1.9k words  ·  5  40 · 1.3k views

Look and despair...

Comments

[SockPuppet]

preveusly was on Fanfiction.net

Diagnosed the root cause of the problem.

[The Blue EM2]

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NO NO NO NO NO NO NO!

[SockPuppet]

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Look and despair...

Surely you mean:

lokk and despear

[The Blue EM2]

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Wat? Why wee unaybel to spelle or gramer?

[Discord The Narrator]

I see you left a comment asking if it was Windlife, but I have to say this story is even older than Windlife's account.

[The Blue EM2]

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I was being ironic, as it carries all the hallmarks of his quality (or lack thereof).

[Discord The Narrator]

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Oh, ok then.

[The Blue EM2]

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Still, this is hilariously bad.

[Discord The Narrator]

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Yeah. When I first saw "Gallia", it reminded me of Asterix.

[The Blue EM2]

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Haha! LOL. By the way, we British don't drink hot water.

[Discord The Narrator]

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Heh, ok then.

[The Blue EM2]

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Another Asterix joke.

[Discord The Narrator]

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Yep, I got it.

[The Blue EM2]

5058473
This story would fascinate scientists. How can something implode 15 times in one second?

[Discord The Narrator]

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Yeah, I read the comments. It's amazing.

[The Blue EM2]

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I did see one ponyfied version of Cinderella that actively lampooned the fact that characters were behaving OOC.

[Discord The Narrator]

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That's curious.

[The Blue EM2]

5058488
Twas quite funny.

[Discord The Narrator]

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Indeed.

[The Blue EM2]

5058495
Yup.