Looking for more prereaders for Pony-Me · 6:26am Nov 26th, 2018
Given the loose that requirements gave the three that I already have, it's a bit hard to actually get somebody to look at the chapter at all before publishing.
Requirements are simply to be available within a reasonable amount of time (within half a week, give or take a few days), and be honest about your opinions. There are no deadlines, no strict times, just as long as I don't have to wait an entire month for a single reply, or else that'd hold up the entire story.
At the moment, with my three prereaders for the story, I try to get approval from at least two prereaders before publishing, but as of now, I've only heard back from one of them. I'll likely expand the number required as more sign on.
Part of the reason why I have such loose requirements is that I have no way to reimburse you as a prereader or pay in any way. As such, if you no longer wish to be a prereader, just say so in a PM and I will stop sending messages.
Below is a synopsis of the entire story up until the current published chapters, if you'd like a quick overview of the story before deciding:
The story, in the beginning, focuses primarily on two central characters: Lisa Garnet and Samantha Hayes, who within a VR world of their own creation, are represented as Twilight Sparkle and Pinkie Pie, respectively. A network outage rips them back into the real world, with the former soon finding that she's spent nearly a decade within the simulation, while the latter has only spent around 3-5 years, tops. Unable to predict what may come in the future, or whether the simulations would come back online at all, they begin working to pull together the communities of people who were affected by the "disconnect". During this time, Lisa runs into a teenage boy named Timothy, who is quickly revealed to be the person behind Spike. Soon, however, the network connection is re-established, and most people reconnect. However, a select few ultimately decide to remain outside of the simulation, wishing to either rediscover their past life before the simulations or simply to explore what they'd never known of before.
During the entirety of this section of the story, however, Lisa is split on whether or not to return to the simulations as Twilight, or to resume her life outside of the simulations as herself. Similarly, it is revealed that Samantha seems to have a form of split-personality disorder resulting from her joining the simulation years ago to "contain" Pinkie's AI to limit her potentially-destructive abilities. Alongside the reconstruction of the community, Lisa's dilemma and Samantha's issues serve as the three main conflicts in this section.
This summarizes the entirety of Part 1 of the story.
Part 2 begins on Lisa's ultimate decision to leave behind her life as Twilight Sparkle, joining Samantha and Timothy, as well as Professor Argall, who appears around halfway through Part 1. Argall hints multiple times of a past relationship with Lisa, bringing up old memories and occasionally reminiscing about the girl's childhood. There isn't very much external conflict in this part of the story, with the majority of conflict taking place within Lisa and Samantha's thoughts. In this case, they focus on Lisa, or more specifically, Twilight's fears of abandonment by her friends and/or forgetting who she is, and Samantha/Pinkie's ongoing feud over control of Samantha's body. Near the end of this part, Pinkie and Samantha soon mend their relationship on an agreement, while Lisa begins to remember more about her past, leading to Twilight's persona splitting off from Lisa as the two identities begin to drift apart.
In the final chapters of Part 2, it is revealed that Pinkie and Twilight both reside on embedded neuromorphic chips embedded in the subdermal layer of Lisa and Samantha's necks. Samantha is hinted to have removed her own chip herself, removing Pinkie from her body after a mysterious "final agreement". Lisa, however, begins to run into complications as Twilight's AI abruptly breaks, growing more corrupted by the second as her code began to break down, potentially bringing Lisa's life with it. An emergency removal operated by Samantha later, and Lisa appears to be back to normal, and surprisingly, begins to revert to her personality from before she ever joined the simulations, growing less and less reserved and more poppy and fun-loving, though somewhat clouded by her parents' death from years prior. It is just around this time when it is revealed that not only is Lisa the biological older sister of Timothy, but she was also adopted by Professor Argall after her parents' death, explaining his attitude towards her. During this entire time however, Timothy, who joined the simulations as a toddler, has nothing to rely on but his persona as Spike from the simulations, and thus never has his chip removed. As a result, he still has struggles integrating back into real life, and sometimes slips up and refers to Lisa as Twilight.
During this section of the story, Twilight's AI is "repaired" and "merged" with an existing copy of Twilight that was automatically regenerated in her place within the simulation. The same happens with Pinkie's AI, whose "agreement" with Samantha was to essentially strip herself of all of her supernatural and fourth-wall/physics breaking abilities. However, the merger with their regenerated counterparts also ends up burying their memories deep within, with the regenerated AIs taking majority control over their actions. As a result, Twilight begins to become frantic over the sudden "memories" that have abruptly resurfaced, while Pinkie's agreement with Samantha ends up being put into overdrive, with Pinkie's old AI practically stripping the regenerated AI of any semblance of her signature Pinkie Pie personality.
The final chapter of Part 2 that is currently published introduces a new character, new places, and an entirely new potential conflict that leads into the currently-unpublished Part 3 chapters. A young girl in her early teens, Zoey, is introduced as the daughter of a man who took over the company led by Samantha and Argall years prior when the two retired from their positions, the former due to old age and the latter in at first to enjoy more free time to herself, and later in order to pursue Pinkie in the simulations. This is where the story ends thus far.
The current two unpublished chapters are an epilogue to Part 2 focusing on the final interactions between Twilight and Pinkie, and the first, unfinished chapter of Part 3, respectively.
I don’t mind I would love to do it
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Alrighty then. I'll send a PM, which will contain links to the unpublished chapters, the password, and the optional Discord server.
The server isn't really used very much since it was originally set up for the editors of a derivative story, but since that's currently on hold I don't think anyone would mind if I temporarily repurposed the server.
Lol and k
I might be able to do it. I'll give it a go, if you want, and if I find that I don't like it I'll let you know.
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I'll PM you tomorrow. I need to sleep in the meantime.
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Have a good night!
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I've sent a PM to you about prereading.