Chatting with Nova Quill! · 3:20am Oct 12th, 2017
Nova Quill\Firimil were discussing a line in an upcoming chapter of Home Again.
The line was:
Sunset whispered in a tone so ephemeral, Starlight had to question for a moment she even heard it.
(Sorry fans of auties Alternative Metal bands. The word is now 'delicate').
Yeah, that sounds right.
Also:
Sunset whispered in a tone so ephemeral, Starlight had to question for a moment she if even heard it.
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Thanks! I'll fix that.
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You've saved the line from the nothing it became. Really brought it to life. :P
Speech is, by it's nature, always ephemeral. I don't know if it works for tone. Yet at the same time, I can tell exactly what you mean by that phrasing.