Review #44 - Sick Day, Sleeping In With the Sun, The Things Ponies Do For Their Cutie Marks · 11:08pm Jan 19th, 2017
Though two of these are more recently read, I really wanted to do them, so here you go:
Sick Day by Saberking2012
Sleeping In With the Sun by PoisonClaw
The Things Ponies Do For Their Cutie Marks by Zeydarxx
Sick Day by Saberking2012
(Sad, Slice of Life)
{FIlly} Twilight had one goal- impressing her brother. She becomes sick and it's up to Shining Armor to make her feel better.
Review
Twilight tries to hide her sickness so as to impress her brother, but Shining finds out anyway and he explains that she doesn't to work so much to impress him, along with making her, {le gasp}, miss school.
The pacing for this is pretty good, though it could have been slightly longer. It has a couple errors, but they are the kind the brain fills in automatically. it also seems rather planned out. And the tags work well {except for that "Cute" tag FIMFiction has yet to add}.
Score: 8/10 Recommendation: Recommended.
Personal Thoughts: Seriously FIMFiction, GET A "Cute" TAG!!!
Sleeping In With the Sun by PoisonClaw
(Comedy, Slice of Life)
Celestia owes Twilight and her friends so much, that much can't be denied. From reuniting her with her sister, to saving Equestria time and time again, Celestia has more than once offered to reward them for everything they've done. Yet every time they have turned her down, intent on achieving their dreams on their own, which Celestia respected. Until one day, when Fluttershy comes to her and asks for an... odd request.
Review
Fluttershy asks Celestia is she could sleep with her. {I know what you are thinking, and it's not like that.} So, Celestia accepts.
The pacing on this one is a little off, as it can get to feel long. It does, however, have few errors within the text. And it seems planned out enough for a story, though there is a lot of filler. The "Comedy" tag on this one does not quite fit until the last couple paragraphs, though.
Score: 7/10 Recommendation: Intermediate.
Personal Thoughts: Where the {Insert word of choice here} is that "Cute" tag?
The Things Ponies Do For Their Cutie Marks by Zeydarxx
(Gore, Dark, Horror, Thriller, Tragedy)
Apple Bloom tries to get her Cutie Mark...for murder. In this (quite dark) tale, Apple Bloom starts to go crazy from so many failed attempts at getting her Cutie Mark. This leads her with seemingly one remaining option...murder.
Review
Applebloom decides to try out murder for her Cutie Mark. Turns out there is a such thing as a Cutie Mark for murder.
The pacing on this is beutiful, and I could only wish for a sequel just to have more deaths {hint, hint... wink, wink} There are few errors within this story, which is nice. And it seems extremely planned out, but oddly with some sick-type of humor. The tags fit so well too.
Score: 9/10 Recommendaton: Recommended.
Personal Thoughts: Warning: Extreme Gore. Provided you don't have a weak stomach, this is amazing.
Thank you for the review. If I had to suggest my next story, it would be "A Talk Between Sisters". It's my latest work and has good ratings so far