Alright

Hey Pickleless?

Yeah Pierce?

THe last couple chapters have been a bit pointlessly confusing at points.

Oh, well let's fix it then.

Okay!

Send criticism to my editor, he's the one I generally obey with little question.

You can send it to me too, and you should, but lately I been feeling really strange, and it's hard to look at any comment without a odd, detached viewpoint.

Comments

[Cynewulf]

They've seemed crazy but not really incoherent.

[Wydril]

If your editor is why the last two chapters are the way they are, you may want to regain some artistic control of your story from him.

[Pickleless]

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Nah, it's not like that, he's usually like "this might be too M rated here." Or he suggests a better way to word something.

[Warrior Kitten]

3815495
Speak for yourself, I'm completely lost.

[La Barata]

Honestly? It feels like you wanted to write a series but were worried people wouldn't want to read the sequels, so you wrote 60% of the first one and started inserting chapters from the sequel ok more like three stories down the line before the ending so people would HAVE to read it.

[djthomp]

3815495 This. If it doesn't make sense then people weren't paying attention.

[PiercingSight]

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Heh, nearly.

There were ideas that were going to be included in the story that ended up being skipped completely. So there are a lot of things still in the chapters that are no longer necessary because they were going to be a part of the ideas that got skipped.

We'll be going over the chapters soon to see what changes we need to make to fit the current direction of the story better. You probably won't have to reread the chapters when they are done because confusion is still meant to be the general effect, but you can if you want to, and a few things may be more clear once the unnecessary stuff is removed.