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A man is driving home, thinking about beating his wife. Along the way, he passes a turtle. I am that turtle.

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A changeling gets a very risky and clever idea.
Pretending to be an advanced magic doll left as an anonymous gift in front of Twilight Sparkle's home.
It's so audaciously stupid there is no way it's not going to work.

Chapters (12)
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Comments ( 1918 )

You have my interest, :: steeples fingers:: continue

She may murder him if she catches on

This is awesome. Write more, and more, and more.

One thing though: "till" should be either " 'til" or "until".

Very interesting, I can't wait to see how this shall continue!

This... All the things in this world can not do this story justice so, I'm just saiyan, this is what people need more bananas... Lol you can get off on them if you do it right:pinkiecrazy:

Lets see how this goes
Like the changeling already

4738588 your picture goes along perfectly with this :pinkiehappy:

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It's funny because 'reminder' is in his name

...This was actually a pretty cool idea, haha. Love it. :scootangel:

This changeling! If Twilight were not so skittish around changelings, he could probably just fess up and bond with her properly. Anyway, interesting premise. Can't say it's completely new to me, but I certainly haven't seen it before in an MLP fanfic.

I am confused on why you've decided to clump your dialogue together when everything else is both tabbed and double spaced. It wasn't...distracting per say, just very odd.

pretty damn original man, I like it. Please do continue:pinkiesmile:

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It was the way I was taught. No one has ever told me it was strange before, so I didn't know.
Although now that I think about it, it should've been obvious after seeing no one else do it...

Oh Based God . . . . .

Welp, I'm here to stay, at least for a while. Continue, if you will.

This is very interesting, please continue

You had me at changeling.
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Seriously though, this is what I've been looking for!

Gig

This is an utterly ridiculous premise.
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I like it. Please carry on!

This certainly has ingenious moments of comedy and believable characters. Excellent job, looking forward to more!

You could use an editor or pre-reader though, there are some minor grammar and interpunction issues. Make sure you re-read each chapter before posting :twilightsmile:

If you'd like, I could pre-read for you - while not a professional, I do have some experience with ironing out the quirks of fiction :derpytongue2:

Dare I say it? A new style of writing as been born! You have earned yourself a watch and a like sir! I look forward to reading the next chapter! (If there is one :fluttershysad::heart: )

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*indicates the "Incomplete" status* :pinkiehappy:

This is so amazingly stupid it's hilarious... And somehow, it's genius at the same time. I must admit, I'm impressed.

Also, that changeling has balls of freaking titanium.

You have my attention.

Dear goodness. That is one smart changeling. I love him already.
NEW MEAT BICYCLE!
KRIEG! SHUT UP!

Y'know, there's a certain point at which you have to admit that something is either genius or madness.

I think this changeling is straddling the line quite well.

Wow that is so stupid that it actually loops back around to being genius.

Believe it or not, I have done something similar to this. Not as brilliant or as flawless, but close enough...:trollestia:

Very interesting. Though, is he a unicorn or a pegasus? It says she wanted him to become a unicorn, but then it says that he turned into a pegasus.

Will Turner: This is either madness... or brilliance.
Jack Sparrow: It's remarkable how often those two traits coincide.

I also hate to be that guy, but...

she started to life the gift up with magic.

lift?

Soon, you'll be wondering * you managed to live without one!

* I think an 'how' is missing.

it made her tell it want she wanted most out of another pony

Did you mean "it made her tell what she wanted most out of another pony"?

TDR

This is interesting. Do continue i am curious as to how this might end up.

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Wow! I'm gonna have to seriously considering taking up that offer. I have a friend helping me with the Loser Booth, but it's because he's my friend, he's not actually a fan at all. I don't want to ask him to help with any of the others since I know he doesn't exactly enjoy it. I was hoping I was good enough at this point I could catch any mistakes I made myself. The sad part is I did reread the chapter, I just have a incredibly nasty habit of auto-correcting things in my head as I read them. Because of this, I happen to sometimes leave out words or make a stupid spelling mistake. Speaking of that...
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No, do not feel bad at all, that was incredibly helpful and I appreciate it.

I need to say its very cool and original concept

This can either go really, really good, or just mildly good. I'll be tuning in to see which brand of good it'll be. Don't blow it Pickleless!

interesting ... I have to give this changeling props for sticking with his plan despite being blasted... still hope he cleared his plan with higher ups and made the 'development of the changeling doll real'

still this seems both promising and bloody hilarious I wonder how 'stupid doll' will react to pinkie pie or flutershy' ( please make fluttershy or dash crush on him):heart: it would make this all the more fun

also hey spike did you know twilight got a A.I doll ? no what you though she finally got a stallion and left him in the closet to hide ?:rainbowlaugh:


4739383 ooh I think we've already seen what the next writing idea is going to be, regardless of how this goes I think we'll be seeing a lot more changling dolls in equestrian possible some even with human minds trapped in the A.I or something. why do I get the feeling someone going to try to make a Celestia one very soon?

Where can you buy these? I want three!

Congrats on the feature. The idea's so stupid it's genius :rainbowlaugh:

Now this is an original idea! Haven't had that in a while so I await the next chapter with a smile.

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Happens to all of us, and I know that feel about forcing friends to read for you :fluttershyouch: Still, a second pair of senses always helps improve quality :pinkiehappy:

Well now, this is new and interesting.

He's stupid like a fox. :pinkiecrazy:

4739255 this is a case of give me what i want not what i ask for.

Thumb up and watch. I hope this brilliance will not degrade to clop or stupid sitcom.

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