Chapter changes, hopefully for the better. · 3:58pm Jan 2nd, 2016
I've made some radical changes to the story, while still keeping the same plot. The rewrite is comparatively minor in scale to a full rewrite. I focused on changing Alex's character to be less aggressive, impulsive and irresponsible. An engineer on any ship shouldn't be that crazy. I still tried to keep her flavour as a distinct character. The encounter is a bit more realistic and tried to incorporate as much as I could from the comments, while expanding what I saw in my mind's eye instead of the quick, brief outlines I had originally done. As a consequence, the chapter is slightly longer. There's some additional line changes in chapter 2 to complement chapter 1. Chapter 3 has an additional scene that debates the ethics of detaining Cobalt Blue, whilst having the power to.
Some errata about me and my writing and Cobalt Blue's future:
- Next Chapter notes are always there, even when completed. There's a bit of a romantic reason behind why I do it. Suffice to say it's a bookend that sort of extends that the universe will continue on in your mind, the Next Chapter if I write it, or by itself in its little universe.
- All fics I publish are self-edited, which means there's no external editor. In this case it was pre-read by only one person that was not me. This lead to some gaping holes in sci-fi contact, which is embarrassing because I should know most of them and they made sense when I read the comments. Ah well, excitement gets the best of us.
- Continuation: Most likely not going to happen. At best, I'll probably whip up something that has a similar setting, but it'll probably have a completely different premise. I hope it does better and meets your expectations!
As always, my fragrant readers, thanks for reading!
I love that particularly long hashtag.
These changes are acceptable.
It's our plea--
*smells armpit*
. . . WHERE THE F
K DID I PUT MY DEODORANT!?
I skimmed to that part, but did not understand how they had the power to detain a larger, more advanced ship.
3665612 With a fleet.
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A fleet takes time to mobilize and travel, though.
More than enough time for a ship to flip it's shit, gut the other, and run like hell.
3665651 Though it wasn't explicitly mentioned, they weren't far off. They had about a month to get there and weren't stationed very far. Out of respect, Twilight didn't want them to come too close. Probably not enough time to save the Princess, but definitely close enough for punitive retribution. At least, that's how I constructed it.