Chapter 1 has been rewritten! · 2:19am Jul 10th, 2015
For all of you guys following me, I finally got around to rewriting the first chapter. Basically, it's similar to what it was, but I went through and improved on the flow and the description, and made Seth into more of a well defined character instead of just a cursing mess. I also improved on the relationship between him and Amaryllis, such that his random declaration of love for her in chapter 2 doesn't seem...well, random.
The other thing I wanted to focus on was to show that Seth was an asshole BEFORE his race died, because a lot of readers assume that he became the way he was because of the loss of his family and friend. I also stressed that Amaryllis was his only friend.
Lastly, I also removed every major mention of him indicating that what you're reading is his journal, because that idea didn't pan out and I ended up abandoning it in the end. I cut off the new chapter one just after he lost consciousness. I then bumped the rest into chapter 2, so that one is now longer and thus I can rewrite that all at once...later. No, I'm going to work on chapter 120 now, because I left you all at a cliffhanger.
So to all of you who read this, give chapter 1 a read over if you want, and tell me what you think about it!
I liked the idea of it being a journal. Oh well. I still remember that epic scene in Ponyville when he first discovered his power.
Thanks for the epic ride so far :3