My plans have been derailed. Again. · 7:08pm Apr 9th, 2015
(Spoiler warning if you haven't read my story up until "One does not simply walk out of pyramid fortresses". If you already have, then you're K.)
(Though, there might be small spoilers anyway)
Initially, Artemis was simply going to hatch at Canterlot, at which point a bunch of stuff would happen, but since the trek from the hive to Canterlot takes "at least" a day or two, I figured that if she was to be awake for the trip then she should "DO" something along the way.
And so, Bam. Artemis hatched much earlier than I originally intended and I put most of the Canterlot stuff related to her 'on hiatus' in the meantime.
Then I realized that so far Artemis had pretty much taken the role of a "first person spectator/narrator", not doing much other than describing what was going on around her as well as a few random thoughts. I wanted her to actually do SOMETHING other than just following the pony bandwagon until Canterlot, something that at the same time would fulfill my desire for fluffiness. Because who doesn't love fluff?
And so, Wham. Slow friendship buildup with Daring Do, whom then gets kidnapped (foalnapped..?) and Artemis is the only one who can save her. A super sneaky Adveeentuuuure! ensued.
But now, I kind of screwed up by making the relationship between Daring and Artemis too... close? Can't find the word I'm looking for...
Not "screwed up" in the sense that it's bad. So far everyone seems to love what's going on between the two.
But therein lies the problem I'm having for now.
Daring Do was never intended to be a "Main" character in my story, though she would make quite a few appearances every now and then over the course of the story. Artemis still believes her "Mother" is alive, thus if anything, Daring is more like a big sister to her. Of course, Daring can't know that, believing instead that Artemis looks at her as if she was the changeling's mother.
But with what happened with our little duo, I guess referring to Daring Do as one of the main characters is pretty much established now.
And so, I now have to rethink a whole bunch of things related to the Canterlot events that will be happening.
Or, more likely, I'll keep with what I had originally planned. Maybe a couple changes here and there, though.
The other issue, though, is that I feel like people don't really care about what's been happening in Canterlot while Artemis was having her adventure. I made Cadance suffer maybe a little too much (and cry too much?) and now I'm not even sure if people would even want the princesses included in the story considering I've practically had no comments on what's been going on out there so far. I know that the lack of comments doesn't mean that people don't have an opinion about it, but I've had no feedback in that regard so far.
Then again, there hasn't been much actual character development with the princesses yet, so maybe I'm worrying over nothing since that would eventually change.
If you were expecting the story to revolve around Artemis and Daring Do always traveling together, fighting evil and stuff, well I'm sorry to dissapoint you in that regard. It might still happen once or twice though, you never know. Nothing's fully set in stone yet.
I guess that's one issue with having such a vague story summary: nobody knows which direction the story will take or what the focus is. Then again, it leaves people wondering and your comments have given me quite a few ideas over time.
In the end, I'll see what I can do to keep everyone happy.
...Hopefully.
I had just thought you where going for a bit of a heartbreaking scene when they reached Canterlot, where daring do has to reluctantly leave the little queen behind? Overall though it has really been a amazing story, and I look forward to seeing it continue.
Im sure whatever you do will be good enough.
I dont see a problem, sure D.D will not bee the "mother" but dont she teach ath canterlot when not traveling?.
D.D will bee close enough for more interaction and the princesses can bee the official care takers
Well A. K. Yearing needs to write the books sometime, so she's not always out in the field. She is also a scientist of sorts and would probably hang around for at least a few days to answer questions on her observations, the hive, and what she discovered before either moving on to another job or returning to her hut to write her books. She doesn't have to disappear outright, even if she is tempted to to avoid the heartbreak.
As for the Princesses, so long as Artemis isn't in the picture they don't have a big role to play. It is the story about The Last human Changeling [Queen], and it shouldn't be surprising that anything that isn't related to that would be taken with an "OK, that's nice." reaction until we see how it relates later on. Obviously once Artemis interacts with them their presence will matter a whole lot more.
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That's a good point.
The one thing I have to comment on the princesses is the fact that Celestia doesn't send reinforcments, or personally goes herself, to check on the last child, her niece, of her long lost sister she thought she killed and who died more or less in her hooves. I mean, where's the love?
By the way, I think you did I fine job on cadences character. Just a heads up.
My suggestion for if you want to give the princesses something to do you could have them moving to handle the potential mayhem that the arrival of Artemis would cause, as well as simply answering the question of "Who's gonna take care of her."