In need of some temporary assistance · 3:17am Jul 2nd, 2012
So as you've probably noticed I'v not had anything come out this week. There are two reasons for that.
1. Family's in town staying at my house. They came a day early and fucked me out of two days of writing I had planned. Hard to write clop or even Eternal with a bunch of kids and their nosey parents around.
2. Ven has misplaced his lap top currently. If anyone is extremely proficient in grammar and would be interested in proofreading and providing feed back for and only for (most likely) the next chapter of Spike and His Six Lovely Ladies, comment here or send me a PM. I can send the unedited version through email or a PM on fimfiction but that's it. First come, first serve.
Eternal will hopefully be updated tomorrow. I have a decent part of it written and I have the rest in my head.
Spike and His Six Lovely Ladies will depend on me getting some assistance and some damn alone time without anyone in the house, or extremely late at night writing.
Everything else is still up in the air as my family will be staying with me for another 2 weeks. They're eating up all my me time!
As a reward for reading this all here's the next page of tofutron's amazing three way hentai NSFW doujinshi featuring Spike, Rarity, and Twilight.
You can find the first 5 pages in my last blog.
And if anyone is interested here is my tumblr: Clop Shop. I post any new fics, updates for my in progress fics, and repost NSFW pony pieces usually featuring Spike and/or Rarity but there is a 3 piece set with Spike and two of the mane 6 posted, sadly only the Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash one is the same pairing in SaHSLL. I'm a straight male so all the stuff will be hetero or lesbian. I have no issue against gays or bi males but I don't personally swing that way, so I'm not gonna post that way.
P.S. FlimFlamBros. you bastard, how dare you update one of my favorite 3 fics in the only free time I'v had since Monday to write! Now I have to wait till the house is full to read it cause I can't afford to waste this precious opportunity to write.
hurry i want sparity
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Mr.Cloud I will eat all of your free time like a giant carrot! and ther is nothing you can do about it!!!
love FlimFlamBros.
I would love to help! if i was any good at grammer but if you need ideas i got your back.
Sorry I can't be of any help.
205420 CANADA!
205434 That would be awesome. I have about 5000 words down, 2000 more to go roughly. So if you could start with the 5000 I have that would be so awesome. I'm not as bad as I claim to be honestly, so it shouldn't take an excessive amount of time either. Just tell me if you want um emailed somewhere or PM'ed and I shall do it!
205455 Yea well when I had Tuesday and Monday to actually write and not clean house/deal with family it wouldn't have been so long
205490 BASTARD!
205492 Ironically ideas are the one thing that I always seem to have; they also change constantly.
205508 All good. You have your own stuff to write/clean up after all.
To prove my point about my time though, 5 mins and roughly 3 sentences into SaHSLL my family got home and this is the first chance I'v had to respond to you lot.
I'm never getting shit done!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Okay breakdown over with, it will be done!
205574 Aight.
205563 When will your family leave? In 2 weeks?
205605 Yep, and then I'm binge writing in joy!
205563
Oi! Only reason you're as good as you are now is cuz o me lol. I should post a before edits of something old and a before edits of something new (I save all my before edits, idk why), just to show you (and readers, if they so wish) how much you've improved. This plan... I like it. Perhaps the first no edits chapter I get I'll do it. That sounds nice, actually. Opinions on it, Mr. Cloud? And believe me, it most likely won't be for a while, but a no edit chapter will eventually happen. I guarantee it.
205625 Just got to hold out for then huh?
205625 Also can't you ask for privacy since you seem to be implying you're living on your own?
205631 Psh, I post those half the time remember the first time. Rarity's Punishment, god that was such a mess... Seriously took you almost as much time to fix it as it took me to write it. Spike and His Six Lovely Ladies my impatience got the better of me there. Every chapter of Eternal ever written.
What you should post is the edit comments with the unedited ver that shit is hilarious!
By the way phone or laptop? Cause it would be nice to know if you found it; I'd cry a manly tear of joy!
205644 Getting alone time with a 7, 5, and 3 year old is like trying to find Atlantis. Everybody want to do it, but it's still not happening. Even if I ask, they're about as likely to comply as their parents are to sacrifice their own peace to deal with um. I am holding out, but thankfully, I can still find some time to write so I won't be hiatus for the next 2 weeks. I love them... and that's what I need to keep telling myself.
Also, I live with my mother while I attend college. The house is quite sizable, and we really want as minimal to do with each other as possible, so it's like living alone.
205658 Same thing with me and my family. We really don't try to interact with my dad too much. I mostly stay upstairs in the man cave, drink soda, and play Borderlands. Oh, and I also surf the net a lot.
205649phone, sorry
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Also, bro? Learn to comma. Please. XD
205724 NEVER! Maybe. I'm sorry...
BOOBS! Also, stop letting your clothes eat your laptop.
Darn kids. A scourge upon the earth! DESTROY THEM!
I'd offer my assistance if I wasn't stuck between finishing the climax of one story and introducing my new project. Also, too busy scrubbing frosting out of my mustache after a cupcake battle at a brony meetup today....
Lol your editor sure takes a lot of credit for making you the man/boy/child/pervert you are today. I hope my editors turn out to be as good
205910 To be fair I take credit for most of his perversions. I corrupted his innocent minddl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/discord.png
All good, I'm certainly aware of how writing multiple fics at once is time consuming,
"Did some body say frosting?"
Pinkie stop trying to use my computer to travel through the internet. The fourth wall can't handle this kind of insanity!
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Well it's against my personal policy to work on multiple things, but I realized that now would be the best time to intro my new story, before the attention from LoF dies down.
You stay away Pinkie! My frosting! You get your own!
Issue with tumblr link. Says that I don't have 'permission.' Since my account is an adult age, I should not have this problem. Is that the exact name of the tumblr or can you provide a new link?
206939 I fixed it. I sent a reply comment when you originally posted this not sure why it didn't post it apparently.
Clop Shop Bonus Link.
I've done my pre-reading. I will send it to you later today. I was doing some writing of clop for FlimFlamBros., so you'll have to excuse my lateness.
On the bright side, I did manage to do most of the editing last night. Also, I have some major concerns here, but those are addressed in my commentary. I would love to get the rest so I can work on that. Plus, I would love to do proofreading and feedback work on the rest at the same time as your normal proofreader. The more people you have offering feedback, the better off you will be.
224280 Yes, yes I did. Gave it a quick once over as well, mostly the last part. The fall of good intentions, and Spike will come next chapter, not horribly so but Twilight is going to mix things up nicely. I wanted to build him up some before I knocked him down. The best laid plans of mice and men after all. Dash's scene was a bit rushed; I'll go back through it with a fine comb see if I can clean it up. Having weeks to do Fluttershy's first part though should show more of what you're talking about. The bullies lack of kindness can be associated with the competitiveness of the situation, more then just being random ass holes as they were in Sonic Rainboom. Probably gonna have a hard time showing that.
I'm more a fan of Like Fine Wine personally
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Actually, there is an easy way. Just have them say they were impressed afterwards. Have them be courteous, to a degree.
Also, that wasn't complete, was it? I would like to see the next version of it before you post it, Or even what you have added since you sent me that part.
Good ideas, on your part.
That was actually the first of his stories that I read. I read Romance Reports all the way through last month, and read the final chapter of it yesterday. I learned a lot from reading it. Personally, I won't rate either higher than the other. They are both awesome. What changes have you made to the story since you sent it to me? Because it was kind of obvious that you hadn't finished the chapter before you sent it.
224668 I finished Fluttershy's foreplay pretty much, and it's vastly better then RD's. I still have the two rounds of sex to write.
That would do it. I'll have to see if I can find a good way to add it.
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Send what you have my way, so I can see if I can give you any on-going critiques.
Also, as FlimFlamBros. said, I am working on a side story for Flutterlicious. Let us just say that it will be awesome. And sexy. And sad. And more awesome. And more sexy! And emotional! And Sexy!!
Did I mention it would be sexy?
224870 I noticed a sad in there...
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Can't tell you. It is a secret. Unless you want to help work on Flutterlicious. Not that I could ask you, but both FlimFlamBros and I would be honored to have you aboard.
You might have too much on your plate already, though, so we can understand if you don't have the time.
225038 Indeed I do sadly. To bad really, working with you to would be pretty bad ass.
225053
I figured. There is a way you can help out, though. I need an artist who can draw in the style of the show. If you can find one, who isn't Azenge, send them my way, can you?
225067 Depends if your looking for SFW or NSFW. I know a few either way but it makes a difference which.
225089
I could use either one. Maybe a team of them. Hell, a team of them would be great for all of us working on this. We could alleviate the workload on Azenge. I'm sure he would appreciate that. Both would be a whole lot more awesome than one or the other.
225168 I'll get you a few links later tonight.
225219
Awesome. Thanks, man. I appreciate it.
225219
You got anything, yet?
226212 NaviSirus does NSFW and SFW
mechathefox does good SFW stuff.
yorik cz does NSFW and SFW
veggie55 does amazing work but he'd probably have to be commissioned SFW as well.
All of um do the MLP style.
226212 Add emeralddarkness to that list they do amazing SFW stuff to.
stinkehund
alex4nder02
Also do SFW stuff.
226212 I for the life of me can not find the contraction this refers to "NO! NO! NO! NO! NO! Never use contractions in details. EVER! EVER! EVER! THAT IS BAD! It is fine for dialogue, but not for details."
228639
Ctrl+f.
Search for appostraphes. And then break down all of the contractions that are in details. There are several of them.
228644 Oh and I have to disagree with you on this part "The Speaker and subject are unclear, here.
Clear that up, please."
Since Spike just spoke and there's a new paragraph, it's obviously someone else. The context alone makes it obvious it's RD talking, plus the actions in the same paragraph are all performed by RD as well. And the situation makes it clear that she's talking to and about Fluttershy. I could change it and I'm considering it still, but a big part of writing is that you don't want to use, '"Hi," Whoever said.' to often as it gets old to read fast.
228667
Oh, yes... This is true. However, the reason being is that you have three characters, instead of two. I was just saying that you could clear it up a bit. Never said you had to do so "explicitly"(no pun intended.) It could also have been construed for her to have also been talking about Spike(more of my point here.). However... now that I think about it, that does seem to be able to serve a purpose. A double meaning. A bit of foreshadowing. Subtlety. Unintentionally ingenious. Believe me, when you reach the point where you accidentally come up with a brilliant idea, you are golden.
228679 lol, I like to think so to.
You will be happy to know all of your suggestions have been taken into consideration and acted upon at this point with the exception of number three as that will be implemented tonight along with the next scene. I plan on finishing tomorrow as my family is leaving early tomorrow morning, and I will once again be free to write without concern of being caught
At which point I will be sending Ven and you final rough drafts, as long as neither of you find something big that I need to change. in which case you'll get another.
But since I know you wanted to help me further with SaHSLL, the first chapter needs proofread and fixed something terrible. If you find yourself with time to do so I would appreciate it. Don't get me wrong, it's still plenty enjoyable as it is, but the grammar needs work all the same
Thanks again, mate
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You're welcome.
Also, expect somewhat of a preview of what I am doing for the sidestory in a short while.
228727 Flim does that to me on occasion as well, lol.
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Oh, he is doing it, on this occasion. It's his journal.
228753 Occasionally I get PMs with shit.
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Ah, yes, well, I have been getting shitloads of PM's from him in the past week or so, now.
For good reason. It numbers to... at least... one hundred something.
228822 damn
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Most of the messages between us haven't been short ones, either.