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Death God

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All I can say is :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: I dont want to go over everything but I loved, "I will take Gabby and the two of us can have a girls’ night so help me! I won’t even let you watch.” Thats showing him Rarity lol The way you used the cheer from Rainbow Dash’s squad, was excellent and the bit about getting Twilight to enchant the fire detectors to ignore dragon smoke was great lol

The the pie gag was funny and the bit about a stubbed toe and Twilight talking about getting a sound proofing spell on the top part of the boutique and him trying to control himself/ Twi and fluttershy con was just perfect :rainbowlaugh:” & last but not least the ending with Pinkie :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

I could go on and put more in but hey i'd just end up pasting the whole story here hahaha thanks for the read :twilightsmile:

Ce' Magnifique!

Welcome back, broski.
~ Yr. Pal, B

I wanted to like the story, I really did. I liked some of your other stories.

But the story just feels a bit too perfect, too wish-fullfilment. Might as well grab a megaphone and run around shouting: "Spike is great, he saved the Crystal Empire (still hate how the show glosses over Twilight doing the most work). He's so great that people are miserable when they get less time with them. It blossomed into love for both of them, at the same time, because of how they missed him."

Seriously, you're a good writer, but you make it a point to mention how perfect Spike is in every fic you write. It's distracting and feels like reading the same 'backstory' multiple times, just a bit different.

I don't hate Spike and sure, make him perfect if you want, but I think leaving it implied instead of implicitly stating it would feel better.

But oh well, more luck next time, I guess :)

9961211
This comments a little weird because the thing you're complaining about is the entire concept for the episode Dragon Dropped which the story is inspired/based off of. It's about Rarity being miserable because Spike is spending time with Gabby instead of her. Then as she draws his attention, Gabby getting upset about Spike not spending time with her.

I didn't make up the concept for their feelings, I just slightly expanded on them. There wasn't a point of showing it because I was just touching on it to summarize the episode for context. This happened so now you have a reason for them having sex.

9961488
Ah, then I take back that section of the critique. Didn't realize there was an episode around this. Haven't watched the last 3 seasons.

Author's Note: I couldn't find cover art for this. If anyone has any suggestions feel free to point me in the direction.

Here's a suggestion:

https://derpibooru.org/1008014?q=rarity%2C+cheerleader%2C+solo+female

9962272
I was trying to avoid human pics but fuck it why not.

Comment posted by Phantom-Dragon deleted Nov 27th, 2019

9960262
Happy to deliver :raritywink:

I'm pretty happy about this comment, honestly. I tried to work a few funny things in here and there and it's nice to see they hit home with someone.

And yeah the obvious inspiration for this one is Dragon Dropped and the cheerleading episode, so I had to work their cheer in or it would of just felt wrong.

9962402
Nah, you're good. There's only one other pic I'd consider using, but it wouldn't pass the requirements because the top has nipple bulges, mind you not visible, and that's against the rules for some reason. It's like how when they changed the rules I had to do a edit on one of my coverarts because a line that wasn't could have been misinterpreted as camel toe.

9962409
That's the one I was talking about!

9962417
So I noticed. Again, I'm sorry.

9962429
I'll tell you what, you can make it up to me by telling me if there was a particular thing in this story you really enjoyed. Comment section has been dead X_X

9962464
Huh, where do I begin? Aside from the heavy dosage of the kinky hot stuff, I like at the beginning where you described the complex relationship between Spike, Rarity, and Gabby, by expanding more on what we knew from the episode Dragon Dropped. From there, I get that both Spike and Rarity have grown some irreplaceable parts of their day-to-day lives, before Gabby came into the picture, and after some dramas, both girls agreed to share Spike as long as he balances his time for each of them, or they can all spend time together. Thus, it invokes some brand new thoughts on what kind of activities they did together, aside from the sessions of Ogres and Oubliettes that Rarity went out of her way to participating in.

I'm still not over how this episode was released earlier in China, yet there're few stories about Spike and Gabby, or even stories that expanded upon Spike's shared relationships with Gabby and Rarity. So I'm glad you, as you put it:

With no fics involving these three in any sort of a romantic relationship, I felt that it was time to fix that.

So cheers to you for stepping up.

9962495
There is a lot of sex...

And yeah, just reaffirming the relationship felt pretty good since the show had done a pretty good set up to begin with. I feel like the three of them play OnO together, feel it in my soul.

Yeah, it's super weird. I mean this community likes to jump on everything, so no idea how this got skipped for so damn long.

Now that was really good. Part of me wants a foursome now with Spike, Rarity, Gabby, and Pinkie.

9962405
well it was well exected, I enjoyed the read so thank you :twilightsmile:

9962657
Lol, I figured some people might.

Ending!!!!! You can't end this here with that temptation oh Pinkie.

It was great to see these 3 finally. Great work.

Ever since Spike and Gabby become a thing together, slowly more fics about those two are showing.

Hope to see more Spabby fics.

9968244
The temptation! The Pinkie!


9972981
Yeah there's a few now it seems, but still really none with the three of them.

OT3 (plus Pinkie) right here

I caught the Longest Yard reference!

I am not going to say if this will eventually affect Spike's pairings in my own story... but I will say that it gave me a lot to think about.

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