Holy bajeezus... · 9:04pm Dec 19th, 2014
I'm looking back on the first few chapters of the story, and oh my celestia, it is horrible. Reading back through the prologue, I wonder to myself "what the hay was I doing? And how the hay was that chapter even close to being worthy of the spot it had for a week or more in the featured box?" So, I am quite literally taking a hammer and blowtorch to it and making it read better. Try to rid it of pesky grammar fleas and read more like a story than 'this is what happens, deal with it' and add some flavorful fluff. The story will still be much the same, just some minor details getting tweaked to make more sense and make it more appealing to new readers. Also, I am able to pinpoint where the story went from "trying to write stuff here" to "I'm actually enjoying this" and it shall be purged with fire and sprinkled with ground up unicorn horns, pegasus feathers, and alicorn tears remedied.
I will try to bring the level of writing in the first few chapters to be close to later ones, though the last couple were lacking themselves. I blame myself. Ya lose what ya don't use, amirite? So, if a chapter rears its ugly head as unread (I know it did this in the past, but I'm not sure about now. Its been two years since I've been around.) Just know it is nothing major, but you are still free to look it over and criticize it. I will also be asking for it to be reviewed once the big, main plot is underway, and I will try and get Rage Reviews to hit it with all they got. I want them to rip it a new one and discuss it with me, so I can repair the story and become a better writer in the process. Mabye I'm just sadistic and want someone to absolutely desroy my prized possession.
In other news. It is cold as fuck. I have yet to explode in anyone's face at McDonalds yet, as I am waiting for the pizza guy to call me to go deliver some tasty, delectable food that will forever haunt my Jeep with the smell of pizza. Sorry, I'm hungry. I'm agitated. I have less energy every day. Still beats where I was at a couple months ago, however. Also, I have decided, after some encouragement from a friend, to open a bloody Patreon account. If you want to and are able to, please send something. Anything. I would be happy seeing a cute picture finding its way to my inbox at this point. Oh good lord I feel dirty for this...
I have cute pictures, though, probably not what you had in mind.
Glad to hear you're okay so far, or at least hangin' in there.
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2664736 I may have some stuff like that, but mostly my pictures are of baby ponies and regression
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2664763 Mhm^^ Tons and tons of stuff like that. If you ever want any, let me know. You into it? Or just humoring me?
2664765 well, considering I had this picture commissioned... (Thank you Pia-chan)
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2664777 Woona doesn't necessarily mean you're into age/ mental regression. But that is very cute ^^
2664782 I find it cute.
2664791 Hard to argue with that.
Hold on a second.
You made those chapters and I think you should leave them as they are to see how you improved over time and also because the readers who got into the story at first read those and decided to give it a go because of your early writings. So dob't shun your work, but embrace the change you came to pass through time.
Dragon san
It's your story, do what you need to do to enjoy it. I don't think there are enough stories where Spike breaks under abuse, some of which we do see on the show.
You could put a hundred hours into writing a story just to get it done, and once the feeling of accomplishment is over, you read it and realize you need to redo EVERYTHING, but after you do that everything works out in the end yah?
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Well, I'm staring at the prologue, and the only conclusion I have come up with to make it truly better is to rewrite the whole bucking thing!!!
So, I'm just banishing the grammar mistakes and stuff... I will pimp slap the chapter into shape when I get a computer and I'm not worrying about everything...
2667145 Pimp slapping a story into shape... Haven't heard that one before
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hahaha
Well, now you have!
Also, Happy HeartsWarming Eve to you!