"When Kindness Met Hatred" For Equestria Daily? · 4:09am Jun 11th, 2014
Hey, how's everyone doing? I hope you are all enjoying the story so far, if you are still with me after the most recent update. Just a quick announcement that the progress for the next chapter is going very well; I'm even about 60% of the way through already! I see you all sitting at your computers, waiting with antici........................................................................................................................................................................................................................ pation! (If you got this reference, I will love you forever!)
As of late, I have been having some thoughts about promoting the story even further—now that I think it's at a point where my plot and characters are finally well developed. Last August, I found that one of the EQD pre-readers on FIMfiction had a special commission called a "Mock Pre-reading." This was where he would take your story, skim through it, and take notes to determine whether or not it would be accepted by the site. I submitted WKMH to him, and this was what he had to say:
Prediction: Rejection.
Likely areas of note were this sent into EqD:
-Capitalization
-Tense inconsistency
-Its/it’s confusion
-Spacing and ellipses
-Word misuse (we’ll instead of well, etc)
-Dialogue punctuation
I will note that the errors seemed to mostly be present in the first chapter, as far as my skim could tell.Possible areas of concern:
-Setting off actions with asterisks
-Loads of adverbs
-Inconsistent indentationStrong points:
-Good OC, despite being the relative of a canon character, which is usually seen as a Gary Stu move
-Good use of music lyrics (usually they’re shoehorned in)
-Good theme (EqD has published stories like this before, and if you're familiar with my work at all, you know I can get behind a story with LGBT stuff)
(This was all based on just the first four chapters)
Now, I meant to fix a lot of these issues and send it in, but I ended up getting discouraged both externally and internally; long story short, I abandoned the idea. However, now that I'm feeling much more confident with the story and how to have a better grasp of the subject matter, I'm having the crave to actually submit it to the big boys. However, as the author I can tell that it needs a lot of work if it will ever happen.
So my question to you all is simply, "Do you think WKMH has a chance?" "Should I do it?" Well, if enough people answer yes, I'll do it!
That being said, if it is going o happen, I'm going to need people to help me revisit my old chapters and assist me with a huge cleanup; this is because both my writing style and my grammar has improved over the past year, at least I think. Please either comment or PM me if you want to help, and we can work out specifics from there.
So, what say you?
I'd love to see it go up on EQD, but...
Even if you fix any typographical or grammatical errors, I have a feeling it may be rejected for it's content. Now, I'm not saying male homosexual content doesn't get posted on EQD but usually...
I'm sorry. EQD's readership isn't receptive to male/male homosexual pairings, regardless of the characters involved. They like lesbians because, as a bunch of heterosexual men, they can fantasize about *two* female partners at one time, and that is the extent to which they're willing to step outside of their hetero-normative boundaries.
Anything with GBT (yes, bisexuals are in the same boat) characters tends to get hit with horrible comments and actual threats of violence against the author. Relevant mods turn a blind eye to it or prevent more M/M or trans stories from being posted to avoid having 'negativity' or some crap.
2197643 Equestria Daily has actually in the past had some stories with M/M shipping. A couple of examples include "Social Standards" or "The Price". But I do understand where you're coming from with:
That was one of the concerns of one of the pre-readers when I submitted the story to Twilight's Library. When the group rejected it for grammar/spelling issues, the head of story approval actually commended me for being brave enough to write the story in the first place. I'm still surprised that so many homophobes think they have the right to call themselves bronies.
Then again, it will all depend on whether or not they think I'm handling the issue carefully enough; throughout this whole process, I feel like I've been walking on egg shells. Which was why I wanted to see if the story was still doing well if I went deeper.
We'll if this your dream....DREAM NEED TO BE TRUE!
I'm not all that familiar with EQD's story section so cannot offer much input on the general attitude of EQD's visitors regarding M/M themed writing. Not all bronies follow the love and tolerate code or aim to be like the show, the majority of them just like the show and community around it I expect, not necessarily potential associated values.
Judging by the feedback you were given though, it looks like the mayor concerns revolve around grammar and perhaps some stylistic inconsistencies. It actually seems rather positive towards the content and characters. Based upon that, I do think you have a shot. If you really want to give it a shot, I could try and see if I could help out a bit. I'm by no means a great writer of any sort, but the least I could do is check any grammatical or Spelling issues that may be present and look for consistencies.
Get a proofreader and/or an editor to look for grammar and format mistakes, and you might have a chance. If that's what your problem is then here is your solution.
2199425 Not sure if you got my PM, but I would appreciate you helping if you still wanted to. I just gave the entire story two very big clean sweeps, so hopefully, there won't be too many issues.
Dramacolt, my friend, I would be honorerd to help you in anyway. However my laptop is currently getting repaired but by the time it gets fixed it will be spring break and at any moment of any day you can hit me up and I'll help you out. PM me for my Skype bro.
2207409 Spring break? It's summer... at least where I live.
2207503 I meant summer
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2207560 I'm assuming you're a high school student? I just finished my third year of college, so I've been home for a month. But, seriously though, I can use all the help I can get. I already have Wireframe looking it over for basic grammar errors and consistency, but if you want to identify other things such as characterization or cliched dialogue/narration I would very much appreciate it. That is, if you'd be up for that kind of thing. We'll talk more once your computer's fixed.
2207572 I'll hit you up the moment I get my PC back.